Bleeding
A Tyburn5 total reviews
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I found this form difficult. Did you? Good, strong, descriptive words to describe a broken heart. I'm a little confused by left in line 5, leaving line 6. Well done, and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
I found this form difficult. Did you? Good, strong, descriptive words to describe a broken heart. I'm a little confused by left in line 5, leaving line 6. Well done, and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Thank you, idea was if someone steals your heart it leaves a hole which would bleed, which left me grieving
Comment from Lobber
Hello,
Wow what a difficult rhyme scheme to work with. I understand how Grieving and Thieving work together, but then Leaving and Bleeding becomes a stretch ...you have left me Grieving or is it Heaving? and forget which Hole. Sorry- Lobber
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
Hello,
Wow what a difficult rhyme scheme to work with. I understand how Grieving and Thieving work together, but then Leaving and Bleeding becomes a stretch ...you have left me Grieving or is it Heaving? and forget which Hole. Sorry- Lobber
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much, every hole needs a bit of heave
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Grieving, thieving, leaving, bleeding powerful and gradual action verbs cascading into a bleeding hole - the bleeding soul. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
Grieving, thieving, leaving, bleeding powerful and gradual action verbs cascading into a bleeding hole - the bleeding soul. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Henry King
This is an excellent poem, but I think of it as an antiromantic poem. That person has left a trodden soul in the dirt. Perfect words for a dark event. The colors of the art work support the poet's view perfectly. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
This is an excellent poem, but I think of it as an antiromantic poem. That person has left a trodden soul in the dirt. Perfect words for a dark event. The colors of the art work support the poet's view perfectly. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much, I will have to look up that form you mentioned
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You are welcome.
Comment from Patty Palmer
I think you made your point with the few words you were allowed to use. Good luck on the contest!
Whoever this person is you wrote this poem for, better leave town LOL!
Patty
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
I think you made your point with the few words you were allowed to use. Good luck on the contest!
Whoever this person is you wrote this poem for, better leave town LOL!
Patty
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much