The French Letter
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Comment from Sylvia Page
What a flying experience arriving with a bump and check to see if the seat belts really worked! The pilot must be an award-winning guy to take his passengers with so much safety and landing most comfortably in a land of many surprises. I thought that a Sikh is Indian and that the two countries are at loggerheads with each other.
Well written,
Sylvia
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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What a flying experience arriving with a bump and check to see if the seat belts really worked! The pilot must be an award-winning guy to take his passengers with so much safety and landing most comfortably in a land of many surprises. I thought that a Sikh is Indian and that the two countries are at loggerheads with each other.
Well written,
Sylvia
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Sylvia. The Sikhs originally came from the Punjab in what is now Pakistan. Although many would have been relocated at the time of Partition in 1947, there is still a significant minority in cities such as Lahore and Islamabad.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is a good chapter, Tony, that sets
the stage for Charles and Helen's trip
and mission as outlined by Bamforth.
-You give good detail about the steps they
need to take, like being at the Immigration Office.
-Obviously, they have to bend the truth a bit and
say they are married, and Helen is advised to wear
clothing more suitable for the area.
-So far, everyone they meet is polite
and helpful, but I am sure that will change
as they reach their ultimate destination.
-Charles and Helen also share
a bit of banter about their "marriage."
-I'm not sure how they will continue to pull that
off because they will probably be scrutinized more closely
the closer they get to involvement in the plan.
-The ending is very intriguing!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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-This is a good chapter, Tony, that sets
the stage for Charles and Helen's trip
and mission as outlined by Bamforth.
-You give good detail about the steps they
need to take, like being at the Immigration Office.
-Obviously, they have to bend the truth a bit and
say they are married, and Helen is advised to wear
clothing more suitable for the area.
-So far, everyone they meet is polite
and helpful, but I am sure that will change
as they reach their ultimate destination.
-Charles and Helen also share
a bit of banter about their "marriage."
-I'm not sure how they will continue to pull that
off because they will probably be scrutinized more closely
the closer they get to involvement in the plan.
-The ending is very intriguing!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your comments, Pam. I imagine there is still a bit of banter to come about the 'marriage'! I also suspect that you may be right about things hotting up as they travel further north and away from the cosmopolitan cities.
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You are very welcome, Tony. I appreciate your reply about my observations.
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is the first time I've come across your book. I enjoyed this chapter. When I have a chance I will have to go back and read more. Your characters sound interesting!
Good job!
Patty
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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This is the first time I've come across your book. I enjoyed this chapter. When I have a chance I will have to go back and read more. Your characters sound interesting!
Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Delighted that you have been able to spare the time to read this chapter, Patty. Much appreciated, as are your kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
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You're welcome
Comment from barkingdog
Thank you for translating Celsius into Fahrenheit, etc. Instruction is well taken.
They may have found a helpful guide in their driver. haha
I loved the bargaining for the cab fare. It brought realism to the scene.
I'm beginning to get the jist of it now.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Thank you for translating Celsius into Fahrenheit, etc. Instruction is well taken.
They may have found a helpful guide in their driver. haha
I loved the bargaining for the cab fare. It brought realism to the scene.
I'm beginning to get the jist of it now.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Thanks for this review, Ellen, and continuing to follow the story. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter, sometimes we say things under pressure that makes us wonder where it came from. It worked once at the airport and now pretenses have you be keep up.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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A very well-written chapter, sometimes we say things under pressure that makes us wonder where it came from. It worked once at the airport and now pretenses have you be keep up.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Thanks so much for your review and comments, Sandra. Very much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Tony,
Another great chapter.
After a short eternity, the senior official - superlative oxymoron here. lol
carlet turban and gold teeth that glinted in the sun when he smiled. I was reminded of Jaws.- Richard Kiel was always a favourite of mine. Very underrated too.
Rasheed turned on the CD player, and the gravelly tones of Louis Armstrong wafted into the ether. - more advanced than me! lol I still had a tape deck in my car until only last year.
There is a great ebb and flow to this piece, chapter to chapter but moving forward all the time. Great stuff
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Hi Tony,
Another great chapter.
After a short eternity, the senior official - superlative oxymoron here. lol
carlet turban and gold teeth that glinted in the sun when he smiled. I was reminded of Jaws.- Richard Kiel was always a favourite of mine. Very underrated too.
Rasheed turned on the CD player, and the gravelly tones of Louis Armstrong wafted into the ether. - more advanced than me! lol I still had a tape deck in my car until only last year.
There is a great ebb and flow to this piece, chapter to chapter but moving forward all the time. Great stuff
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Thanks for the review and sixer, G. Appreciated, as always. The CD player may be a bit of an anachronism, though I don't think I've actually specified the year in which all this takes place.
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and it fllowed well with no Grammar issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this.. Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and it fllowed well with no Grammar issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this.. Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you, Ricky. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Gail Denham
Really enjoyed this chapter - moved along smoothly - lots of dialog, believable events. Well done. I hope you can continue in this vein. I thought she might have to wear a head scarf? Anyway - good job.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Really enjoyed this chapter - moved along smoothly - lots of dialog, believable events. Well done. I hope you can continue in this vein. I thought she might have to wear a head scarf? Anyway - good job.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Gail. I appreciate your encouragement. Glad you?re still enjoying this lengthy saga. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Janilou
Interesting chapter. I haven't read previous chapters but this is well written and the dialogue kept me intrigued.
Notes:
"What is the purpose of your visit?" The immigration official looked up from my passport and visa. His face was impassive.
I might have written it like this:
"What is the purpose of your visit?" The impassive faced immigration official looked up from my passport and visa.
"In your dreams!" I sidestepped to avoid the playful push.
I think this should be separated by a line space.
"In your dreams!"
I sidestepped to avoid the playful push.
That's all I found for suggestions.
All the best,
Jan
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Interesting chapter. I haven't read previous chapters but this is well written and the dialogue kept me intrigued.
Notes:
"What is the purpose of your visit?" The immigration official looked up from my passport and visa. His face was impassive.
I might have written it like this:
"What is the purpose of your visit?" The impassive faced immigration official looked up from my passport and visa.
"In your dreams!" I sidestepped to avoid the playful push.
I think this should be separated by a line space.
"In your dreams!"
I sidestepped to avoid the playful push.
That's all I found for suggestions.
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Gail. I appreciate your encouragement and useful suggestions.
Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was interesting, that Helen would need to dress in the more culturally appropriate way. Why can't they do the same when they come to our country? Hmm. So, they are having to go by train because of a terrorist 'incident', if it were me, I'd about-turn and take the next flight home!! lol. It was nice to know I'm not the only one not to fully trust Helen, Charles is very wise not to as well. Well done, another excellent chapter. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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That was interesting, that Helen would need to dress in the more culturally appropriate way. Why can't they do the same when they come to our country? Hmm. So, they are having to go by train because of a terrorist 'incident', if it were me, I'd about-turn and take the next flight home!! lol. It was nice to know I'm not the only one not to fully trust Helen, Charles is very wise not to as well. Well done, another excellent chapter. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Sandra. As always, I appreciate your review and comments. Looking forward to the next instalment of Eric.
Best wishes, Tony
