Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Aw. As if I don't have enough things to feel compassion about, now it's rental cars. Very well written, Maria. An enjoyable short piece. Great job. Marilyn

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019

LOL!
Thanks for reading.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Maria, This is a very well written 50 Word Flash Fiction story. You used very good descriptive words and the art work you chose to go with your words went well together. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019

Thanks, Teri.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

I was trying to guess what it was before I got to the final line, but didn't get there. Good little fifty word story Maria,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019

Thanks so much for reading. Have a lovely day.

Comment from brenda faye curtis

Excellent

This cute little story put a smile on my face today, and I have to admit I really needed the boost. I am sure you will do well in this contest, Maria, as this is a very well-constructed story.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019

Thanks for your review. I'm glad this made you smile.

reply by brenda faye curtis on 19-Aug-2019

You're welcome, my friend.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lol. I kept thinking that the narrator was a human and maybe the ones that didn't last was a pet, a stray animal visitor. But you turned it all around with personifying a rental car!

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019

Thanks so much for reading. Have a lovely day.xxx

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Oh, that poor little rental car, haha. Not only will people not love him, they'll trash him as well.

Another good one, Maria. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019

Thanks so much for reading.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

LOL!! Oh, please, keep them coming, Lady Maria!! Love these!! :) I do hope you are keeping these in a collection somewhere because they truly ROCK! :) :) Thanx so much for sharing the thoughts of the Hertz Heartbreak!! ;) :) Yvette

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019

Thanks for your review. Take care.

Comment from Tanvi Pauddar

Exceptional

I enjoyed reading your lovely poem, and could read it over and over again, because I LOVED your choice of words. I just have one quick question, and I am NOT trying to offend you or anything. Is this more of a poem or a story? Because it is short, it seems like a poem, and because of its structure, it seems like a story. Once again, I am not saying anything bad about this, and I like these types of poems. It is just that I am in 5th grade, and don't have much knowledge about all this kind of complicated stuff. :)

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019

First of all, you haven?t offended me at all. It?s a very clever question.
This is a story. The reason why it?s so short is that it?s flash fiction.
Thanks for reading and for the six stars.

Comment from Bichon

Excellent

Oh, I thought this short story was going in a different direction haha. You always do an amazing job at the flash fiction types, I love to read them! Great job with this one.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019

Thanks so much, Chloe.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

MJ,

Cute! Another of your fun, tiny stories with the unexpected endings and tangled twists. haha Neat!

I do have a suggestion - but you're welcome to ignore it since your tale works, anyway --

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The last one stayed with me for two weeks.
--> The last one (only wanted me) for two weeks.
--> since the car actually stays with them, not vice versa
--> and so then, I would probably ...

Most don't last longer than a weekend.
--> Most don't (linger) longer than a weekend.

Thanks!!

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019

Thanks for reading and for the suggestions.