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I Found IT

The IT that changed my life

17 total reviews 
Comment from WryWriter
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I really liked this short story. It has mystery, sage advice, hope, and wonderment. I love the revelation of "I found God's Love." The artwork choice goes well with this story. A couple of suggestions to consider:

an fabrication (a fabrication)
even thou I was undeserving of it (even though)

Enjoyed reading your work!

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
    Thank you for your comments and suggestions
Comment from the13thpoet
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Hello Paulette, happy Friday to you. That was a nice piece of work done for this writing prompt. To tell a story in so few words is hard to do and to be able to keep a reader in suspense while doing that is awesome. I was wondering what you found and now I know. If we all could find that this world would be a better place. Thanks for sharing and good luck.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Comment from Gail Denham
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And I'm glad you found it also. What a blessing. Thanks for your story that describes so well your search - as God called to you- and you found it - the love and forgiveness of God.
Good story

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
    Thank you for your comments
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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This is a very moving, sincere piece. You held my interest by holding me in suspense about what you had found. I found it too!:-)

Here's why I gave a 4: (1) "an" in front of "fabrication" should be "a"
(2) ; after "power" should be , (3) "thou" for "though" or "tho"

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2019


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Comment from Pearl Edwards
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A good response to the Found It topic for this challenge, with you finding your spiritual gift of God's love. Your words, your emotions through this write show the impact it's had on your life. Good luck in the contest,
cheers.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
    thank you for your comments and yes IT has a definite impact on my life.
Comment from Mia Twysted
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The "some said" and "some called" threw me being so close and back to back to each other. I am glad you identified that which you found because I was not catching on.

I would have liked to know how you found it. You just claim you found it and I did not get to be involved in the journey.

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 Comment Written 15-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
    Thank you for your comments. I guess how I found IT, would be the beginning of another poem.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hey Mystery Writer. You found the one thing you need most. We find lots of things in life. Most of them we don't want or need. We then proceed to lose them for someone else to find.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
    Thank you for your comments and ratings.
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 26-Sep-2019
    You're welcome.
Comment from judester
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This is a wonderful glimpse into your life and the change brought about by finding something to believe and guide you.
The only suggestion I would make is to put in a new paragraph mid way.

thru forgetfulness.

I found it.
It gives the reader a chance to breath and the statement, I found it, becomes bolder.
Bravo and God bless you, judester

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2019


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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A fine faithful write and I wish you luck with the contest, we are all searching for something to support us in life and you have found hope and love in your search here, fine words, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2019


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Comment from LefthandedScribe
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Your build is well executed, and the repetition of the word some really works for me. However, I wanted more of a payoff at the end...to see what you found. That's what i was hoping for at the close.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
    Thank you for your comments. I found God's Love.