Two Sleazy Old Maids
Tools of the Trade Now Remembered18 total reviews
Comment from Six-Star Writer
Yeah, sorry but there was a comma missing between "sharp" and "rusty."
Also, the line "the tools that make things dead," doesn't sound rright to my ear.
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Yeah, sorry but there was a comma missing between "sharp" and "rusty."
Also, the line "the tools that make things dead," doesn't sound rright to my ear.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness these two old maids remind be of a couple of witches! Stirring the pot and waiting for their next victim! A fun write, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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Oh my goodness these two old maids remind be of a couple of witches! Stirring the pot and waiting for their next victim! A fun write, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
Comment from Hitcher
A cleverly rhymed slice of dark poetry telling the tale of two evil maids who like to tease, torment, torture and kill children with their own specially designed tools of terror. I do not mind reading or writing a bit of dark poetry myself, so well done Lobber, there aren't too many on site who indulge these days.
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A cleverly rhymed slice of dark poetry telling the tale of two evil maids who like to tease, torment, torture and kill children with their own specially designed tools of terror. I do not mind reading or writing a bit of dark poetry myself, so well done Lobber, there aren't too many on site who indulge these days.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
Comment from LisaMay
Gosh, this is a smack in the head with a blood-soaked bucket! Private abortionists still ply their sad trade, probably in the same matter-of-fact tones in which you have written this gory glimpse to the 'final solution' for some desperate (or dismissive) girls and women. As long as there is sex there will be 'unwanted' babies... pregnancy needs to be supported with options and some will always think this is an option.
Your writing is powerful and stark, well suited to the topic.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Gosh, this is a smack in the head with a blood-soaked bucket! Private abortionists still ply their sad trade, probably in the same matter-of-fact tones in which you have written this gory glimpse to the 'final solution' for some desperate (or dismissive) girls and women. As long as there is sex there will be 'unwanted' babies... pregnancy needs to be supported with options and some will always think this is an option.
Your writing is powerful and stark, well suited to the topic.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Hello,
Your comments mean a lot to me since I?m a relentless silent follower of all of your works... I am honoured and your writings never cease to amaze and entertain me. Thank you for taking the time to read my poem. -Lobber
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Thank you so much for your appreciative words about MY writing!
Comment from kahpot
What a read, it gives the imagination a workout, death by coathanger
" young corpses, boxed, bent enshrined", thank for this it is an excellent poem the rhyme is great, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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What a read, it gives the imagination a workout, death by coathanger
" young corpses, boxed, bent enshrined", thank for this it is an excellent poem the rhyme is great, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
Comment from Gail Denham
Oh my stars - this is murderous abortion that you write about in your poem. You describe it so well and it hurts to even think about this horror. And it's still being done - only not with coat hangers.
Good poem
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Oh my stars - this is murderous abortion that you write about in your poem. You describe it so well and it hurts to even think about this horror. And it's still being done - only not with coat hangers.
Good poem
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt rhyming poem about the horrifice deeds the two sleazy old maids did to unborn and unwanted babies are an evil deed when it is done just for the sake of doing it.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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A very well-written heartfelt rhyming poem about the horrifice deeds the two sleazy old maids did to unborn and unwanted babies are an evil deed when it is done just for the sake of doing it.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Hi,
Not true! It wasn?t done for the sake of doing it. These women were paid. It?s all about the early days of the
Comment from Patty Palmer
I'm lost! these old ladies killed people? OMG! Nice little old ladies shouldn't be doing that. Somehow I think I should have already known this. But I like your poem!
Have a great weekend
Patty
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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I'm lost! these old ladies killed people? OMG! Nice little old ladies shouldn't be doing that. Somehow I think I should have already known this. But I like your poem!
Have a great weekend
Patty
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Hi,
My poem is about the early days of abortion. These women were paid. There were NOT nice little old ladies. It was a trade using simple tools, like hangers. It?s a practice still worldwide- Lobber
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now I get it. Thank for explaining to me
Comment from Joan E.
What a fascinating story you tell in this horror poem. I admired your rhymed quatrains and vivid details. Best wishes in the Rhyming Poetry Contest. Cheers- Joan
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What a fascinating story you tell in this horror poem. I admired your rhymed quatrains and vivid details. Best wishes in the Rhyming Poetry Contest. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you do deliver a poem with solid end rhyme throughout. The meter is rather askew which is something they consider when evaluating rhymed verse here. The content is clever as the darker side of life is not often associated with this style - I hope it works for you. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you do deliver a poem with solid end rhyme throughout. The meter is rather askew which is something they consider when evaluating rhymed verse here. The content is clever as the darker side of life is not often associated with this style - I hope it works for you. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
