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Love's Petals Pulled Apart

The emptiness afterwards.

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Comment from Bill Schott
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This trinet, Love's Petals Pulled Apart, using the 2-2-6-6-6-2-2 formatting, finds that the very petal pulling that indicates who loves who can be referenced in a terrible split as well. Flowers pay the price again.

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
    The innocent suffer the most. Always.
    Thanks for reviewing. I'll try to be more cheerful next time!!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I know these feelings and the emptiness loss can leave behind, I enjoyed your words here and wish you luck with the contest, a poignant write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
    Thanks very much, Dolly.
Comment from kahpot
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This is a wonderful Trinet, love, heartbreak, all going on down the line, and the pulling of the petals-great artwork, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
    Thank you very much for your comments.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
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I love this! Sorry it took me so long to read. I had a wonderful day with grandchildren. I love how you rhymed the short lines! Beautiful picture too! xoxoxo

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
    Thanks for your lovely review, Diana!
reply by Diana L Crawford on 11-Aug-2019
    Of course, you are always welcome! xoxo
Comment from Gail Denham
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This is a chilling story in your poem. I hope it doesn't apply to you personally. You've used many images that are sharp - pulling the petals off a daisy (not to say "he loves me, he loves me not) but anguish pulled them off.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
    Thanks for your review, Gail. The situation in the poem has happened to me, so that is probably why it is so emphatically dark.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Wow -- a very well-written trinet that speaks so clearly of betrayal and sadness that it brings the reader into your mood of melancholy -- great job!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
    Thanks for your review. The poem is rather grim, but I'm pleased it captured the emotion. 'Feeling is foremost'.
Comment from V McCrary
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Wow, If I could put a big sad :-( and then a scared face :-0 here, I would. I'm in a fresh relationship of almost 5 years that has been "off & on" and your words perfectly describe how each breakup has made me feel and even voices what I pray I'll never feel again... thank you for putting it into words. Keep writing. V

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
    It makes me sad that you are feeling these emotions as I have. There is a Maori phrase here in NZ: "Kia Kaha"... it means "Stay Strong". I send you a hug and good thoughts of happiness.
Comment from Patty Palmer
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I'm sorry if you lost your love and it sounds completely.
Your poem however is done very well. The rhyme and rhythm sound pretty good. It's sad when a friendship breaks up but sometimes it can't be helped.
Good job!

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
    I think in this case it was best that it broke up because the 'beloved' turned out to be a 2-faced phony. We can get sucked in sometimes and then our sincerity is abused.
    Thanks very much for reviewing.
reply by Patty Palmer on 10-Aug-2019
    You're very welcome
Comment from royowen
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This is an excellent entry in this trinet poetry contest. I like the construct of the work, the fluctuating short and long, commentary and the great use of language makes this a pretty good competitor, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
    Thanks for your comments, Roy. Much appreciated.
reply by royowen on 10-Aug-2019
    Welcome
reply by royowen on 10-Aug-2019
    Most welcome
Comment from Nike23
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I like your trinet poem. Your word choice is descriptive and vivid. Your words create images in the reader's minds. I like the lines "You have planted in this heart -
then pulled all love's petals apart." This is very visual. Good job.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
    Thanks you so much for this great review.