Sheep's Clothing
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think this is a very ironic story, short and to the point, and it also goes to show that Satan could imitate a man if he wanted to. He is using poetic references to Psalm 23, perhaps, presenting himself as a lost lamb. That menacing grin in the second to last line is what keeps you awake to the very end! Nice job.
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I think this is a very ironic story, short and to the point, and it also goes to show that Satan could imitate a man if he wanted to. He is using poetic references to Psalm 23, perhaps, presenting himself as a lost lamb. That menacing grin in the second to last line is what keeps you awake to the very end! Nice job.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a complete story in exactly 100 words. It progresses in a logical manner and is SPAG free. The content is clever and the ending very well executed. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a complete story in exactly 100 words. It progresses in a logical manner and is SPAG free. The content is clever and the ending very well executed. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This piece is very well-written--with a flash of well-placed dark humor
at the end. All we have to do is watch or listen to the news to realize that these devious "leaders" exist in every denomination! Well-done
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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This piece is very well-written--with a flash of well-placed dark humor
at the end. All we have to do is watch or listen to the news to realize that these devious "leaders" exist in every denomination! Well-done
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your feedback. Much appreciated
Comment from Rikki66
Say anything to achieve your desired goal. Good luck in the contest.************************************************************************************
Rikki:)
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Say anything to achieve your desired goal. Good luck in the contest.************************************************************************************
Rikki:)
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
Comment from Gail Denham
Hmmm - confusing a bit - I'm not acquainted much with the Catholic confessional -but what did the Enemy do wrong in giving out the man's way back to God?
Interesting tho.
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Hmmm - confusing a bit - I'm not acquainted much with the Catholic confessional -but what did the Enemy do wrong in giving out the man's way back to God?
Interesting tho.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
Comment from James W. Reynolds
This story has an unexpected twist at the end that raises many questions, such as (a) how did Satan even get in the church and (b) what is he up to. The story has a nice build. Everything seems to be normal until suddenly it is not.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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This story has an unexpected twist at the end that raises many questions, such as (a) how did Satan even get in the church and (b) what is he up to. The story has a nice build. Everything seems to be normal until suddenly it is not.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your feedback. Sometimes I like to leave questions at the end and leave it up to the reader's interpretation as to how/why things happened.
Comment from Alex Rosel
I think this is a neat entry for the contest. Of course, it all hinges on the final paragraph, and you've constructed the foundations for that with craft. I didn't see the twist coming :)
Just one picky point:
In both American and British English, the period at the end of a sentence of dialogue is placed within the closing quotation mark, and you've placed it outside the closing quotation punctuation. (However American and British English varies in how it punctuates direct quotes in this respect.)
Good luck with the competition :)
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I think this is a neat entry for the contest. Of course, it all hinges on the final paragraph, and you've constructed the foundations for that with craft. I didn't see the twist coming :)
Just one picky point:
In both American and British English, the period at the end of a sentence of dialogue is placed within the closing quotation mark, and you've placed it outside the closing quotation punctuation. (However American and British English varies in how it punctuates direct quotes in this respect.)
Good luck with the competition :)
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Wils. I'm flippin' speechless. That was awesome. So deep, imaginative and inventive all in a 100 word package. That was a great piece of work. How you managed to make me drop my jaw, make me smile and give me chills all at the same time ..........amazing. Good luck in the contest......six stars all the way!!!!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Hello Wils. I'm flippin' speechless. That was awesome. So deep, imaginative and inventive all in a 100 word package. That was a great piece of work. How you managed to make me drop my jaw, make me smile and give me chills all at the same time ..........amazing. Good luck in the contest......six stars all the way!!!!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Thanks very much for that. Not really sure where it came from. Maybe I should watch Sister Act while I write more often lol
