Monica
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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I am enjoying the pace of the story so far and found your author notes helpful in understanding motive and actions.
It seems more people will be drawn closer and maybe trapped in a spiralling web of violence and anger.
An interesting read.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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I am enjoying the pace of the story so far and found your author notes helpful in understanding motive and actions.
It seems more people will be drawn closer and maybe trapped in a spiralling web of violence and anger.
An interesting read.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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Thanks so much Shirley. Haven't seen you on in a while. Rox
Comment from CrystieCookie999
It is always intriguing when there is overlap between chapters in the way of how does this character's circle of people they know start to overlap the next circle of people someone else knows. I was kind of surprised the bullet wasn't found, but fire could destroy all kinds of evidence. I liked Sarah's idea of getting more tickets. It sounds like Monica is a forest fire of sorts, that starts and stops.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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It is always intriguing when there is overlap between chapters in the way of how does this character's circle of people they know start to overlap the next circle of people someone else knows. I was kind of surprised the bullet wasn't found, but fire could destroy all kinds of evidence. I liked Sarah's idea of getting more tickets. It sounds like Monica is a forest fire of sorts, that starts and stops.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Monica is a bad one and only getting worse. Being spoiled rotten and having a personality disorder are a very bad combination. ={ I'm so glad I'm pretty much perfect myself. Except for punctuation of course. =} Thanks much dear.
Comment from JudyE
I didn't find much to report here. I feel sorry for Sarah and Rob. I'll be looking out for the next chapter although I have limited access for a few weeks.
Just two points:
She spent thrity minutes scrubbing the leather. - spelling 'thirty'
Rob said, shoving a one in his mouth. - delete 'a'
Cheers
Judy
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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I didn't find much to report here. I feel sorry for Sarah and Rob. I'll be looking out for the next chapter although I have limited access for a few weeks.
Just two points:
She spent thrity minutes scrubbing the leather. - spelling 'thirty'
Rob said, shoving a one in his mouth. - delete 'a'
Cheers
Judy
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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Thank you dear.
Comment from the13thpoet
Happy Monday to you Roxanna. That was a nice smooth continuation of the story. This Monica chick Is one sick and twisted individual. I can't wait to read the rest, I just hope she doesn't claim anymore victims. Great job!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Happy Monday to you Roxanna. That was a nice smooth continuation of the story. This Monica chick Is one sick and twisted individual. I can't wait to read the rest, I just hope she doesn't claim anymore victims. Great job!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Yep she's a sick one and she just gets sicker. This is so fun! Not really, I just hate writing this. =] Thank you dear.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Excellent! Monica's character is so realistic; people's attitude towards NPD is manifested contributory; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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Excellent! Monica's character is so realistic; people's attitude towards NPD is manifested contributory; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
Comment Written 04-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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Thank you. =}
Comment from Darlene BoClair
As I continue to read, I am curious. Doe Sarah's cousin and assistant at the bakery have a formal name for this story? With the fire I am surprised Monica had no burns of any kind on her body. Monica is so smart, yet even being smart there is always someone smarter than her. Watch out Monica, for Sarah and Rob are bound to catch youin that inappropriate moment. Great story, I will continue to read the next chapters.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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As I continue to read, I am curious. Doe Sarah's cousin and assistant at the bakery have a formal name for this story? With the fire I am surprised Monica had no burns of any kind on her body. Monica is so smart, yet even being smart there is always someone smarter than her. Watch out Monica, for Sarah and Rob are bound to catch youin that inappropriate moment. Great story, I will continue to read the next chapters.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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I'll say more about Sarah's cousin and asst in other chapters. I think of names for them. =} Monica is a bit kuku. =} Thanks so much dear. Rox
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written chapter with a lot going on in it. You used very good descriptive words and I think that Monica is really crazy! You used very good dialogue too. Another great chapter my friend! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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This is a very well written chapter with a lot going on in it. You used very good descriptive words and I think that Monica is really crazy! You used very good dialogue too. Another great chapter my friend! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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Monica is a crazy. It kind of worries me that I'm good at writing about crazy people. =} Thanks so much Teri.
Comment from royowen
Thanks for the notes Rox, that's important in understanding the plot. After murdering William, Monica now turns her attention to winning and breaking the bond between Rob and Sarah, (I was thinking of the song, Jolene by Dolly Parton) a great plot, well written and absorbing, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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Thanks for the notes Rox, that's important in understanding the plot. After murdering William, Monica now turns her attention to winning and breaking the bond between Rob and Sarah, (I was thinking of the song, Jolene by Dolly Parton) a great plot, well written and absorbing, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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She's a crazy one alright. It kind of worries me that I'm good at writing about crazy people. =} Thank you sir.
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No, your good at writing
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Oh no! Now she's in their home! She definitely appears to have a narcissistic personality disorder. My ex-husband was diagnosed with that many years ago. It is not only rare, but even rarer in women. Only he wasn't as bad as Monica! But it was difficult to live with him. You are doing an awesome job at portraying this disorder in this character! Patiently waiting to see what evil lurks further! xoxo
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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Oh no! Now she's in their home! She definitely appears to have a narcissistic personality disorder. My ex-husband was diagnosed with that many years ago. It is not only rare, but even rarer in women. Only he wasn't as bad as Monica! But it was difficult to live with him. You are doing an awesome job at portraying this disorder in this character! Patiently waiting to see what evil lurks further! xoxo
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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Thank you. It seems a lot of people have at least a little of this now a days. No one wants to admit they are wrong. I think most politicians have it for sure. =} Sorry you had to live with it. That would be very hard.
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It was, but thankfully he improved somewhat with age and we are friends as I would never hold resentment for something that is noted be genetically inherited! But life together with him then could not continued back then
Comment from Gail Denham
Strange story - reads like a crime novel - but worse as this is an obsession. The first guy she killed in the last chapte r- was he one of her obsessions also? Does she pick randomly.
Held my interest.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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Strange story - reads like a crime novel - but worse as this is an obsession. The first guy she killed in the last chapte r- was he one of her obsessions also? Does she pick randomly.
Held my interest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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Thank you. Monica is a crazy one, and it can only get worse, sadly. Rox
