Renaissance of Enchantment
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Chapter Seven, Part 2"It was their world long before our existence...
16 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
This is another good connecting chapter moving the story along. The characters are becoming more defined and settled in readers' minds. It continues to be a great story.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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This is another good connecting chapter moving the story along. The characters are becoming more defined and settled in readers' minds. It continues to be a great story.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Hope it's not getting too weird for you...? :) :) Take care and enjoy! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sankey
Good chapter. Glad they have finally arrived at the mansion. I know things are gonna be a bit weird but I am glad to be along on the ride. No spags as far as I can tell.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Good chapter. Glad they have finally arrived at the mansion. I know things are gonna be a bit weird but I am glad to be along on the ride. No spags as far as I can tell.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Hooray!! ;) So good to hear/see you're enjoying! ;) Yvette
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Vibes and feelings--Maggie's gut feeling, her intuition. God gave intuition to women as protection. Sometimes you see it in men. From what I've seen though, if men have intuition, they usually do not listen to it.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Vibes and feelings--Maggie's gut feeling, her intuition. God gave intuition to women as protection. Sometimes you see it in men. From what I've seen though, if men have intuition, they usually do not listen to it.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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That 'feeling' has a lot to do with Maggie never having been around these 'kinds of folks' before.... ;) ;) ;) Hmmmmm.....
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I'm anxious to read the next chapter...
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Interesting!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The meeting of their new friends was a little hairy at times. I'm sure that Addison and Maggie will look out for themselves as they get adjusted to their new surroundings.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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The meeting of their new friends was a little hairy at times. I'm sure that Addison and Maggie will look out for themselves as they get adjusted to their new surroundings.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Definitely .... ;)
Comment from JudyE
I'm enjoying your story and I don't even like 'fantasy'!! haha ]
I picked up a very few points:
"You have no idea what she's talking about do you?" - comma after 'about'
"You know, when she thanked me for the suitcases this morning, I agreed because I knew we really needed to get our bags checked and all else taken care of." Geoffrey glanced at Maggie standing on the lawn outside the car, hands on hips in a relaxed stance with her back to them. - space needed between the above paragraphs.
the size of what was now hers was more than a little over-whelming - delete hyphen
That maybe this was going to be a good thing afterall. - afterall should be two words.
Bongo twined himself around the boys' legs. - should be 'boy's legs'
Having to look slightly up as they were on the bottom step - I might have said 'look up slightly'
and she halted in half-way up the steps - delete 'in'
I'll mostly be away for a couple of weeks so don't get too far ahead of me! It's okay really. I'll bookcase chapters if I can't get here too often.
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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I'm enjoying your story and I don't even like 'fantasy'!! haha ]
I picked up a very few points:
"You have no idea what she's talking about do you?" - comma after 'about'
"You know, when she thanked me for the suitcases this morning, I agreed because I knew we really needed to get our bags checked and all else taken care of." Geoffrey glanced at Maggie standing on the lawn outside the car, hands on hips in a relaxed stance with her back to them. - space needed between the above paragraphs.
the size of what was now hers was more than a little over-whelming - delete hyphen
That maybe this was going to be a good thing afterall. - afterall should be two words.
Bongo twined himself around the boys' legs. - should be 'boy's legs'
Having to look slightly up as they were on the bottom step - I might have said 'look up slightly'
and she halted in half-way up the steps - delete 'in'
I'll mostly be away for a couple of weeks so don't get too far ahead of me! It's okay really. I'll bookcase chapters if I can't get here too often.
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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All fix-ed (two syllables as the country-folk round here say!)... thanx for the second pair of eyes...very appreciated as always, ma'am!! ;) ;) Take care of your while you're out traipsing and gallivanting around the countryside -- LOL! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvette. As time permits, I go back and read previous chapters to try to get myself up to date in the story. I will continue to read past chapters to make sure I am up to date on what is happening. Z
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Hello Yvette. As time permits, I go back and read previous chapters to try to get myself up to date in the story. I will continue to read past chapters to make sure I am up to date on what is happening. Z
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Thanx so much for your dedication, Z -- means a lot to the crazy blonde over here! :) Been just surviving the teacher meetings this week thus far.... if you still hear from me each day, then I'm okay...I think... :) :) Take care, sir! ;) ;) Yvette
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You're welcome!. I'm so happy I retired couple of years ago even though I enjoyed my work a great deal. Now when people ask me what I do for a living when I meet them, I tell them I'm a writer. If the rules change and I have to make money doing it, I'll have to tell them something else. :- Z
Comment from Debbie Pope
I'm still wondering where this is going. This is amazing. None of the characters even know what is going on. There must be another big force in control that has not even been introduced. I'm glad that all the characters (that we know about) have finally met each other.
I look forward to the next installment.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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I'm still wondering where this is going. This is amazing. None of the characters even know what is going on. There must be another big force in control that has not even been introduced. I'm glad that all the characters (that we know about) have finally met each other.
I look forward to the next installment.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Ah-ha!! So, I have you wondering... that is a good thing! Perhaps, if I survive the teacher meetings this week you shall find out!... Of course, that's a mighty big PERHAPS.... LOL! ;) :) Thanx for the wonderful review and especially for those wonderful stars, MQ! ;) Hope the week's going well so far.. take care! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Randa Dayle
How cool! I love that Peadar is a Leaprachaun to, and I want to know where his pot of gold is too. I hope that the darkness that shows across his face doesn't mean he is a mean leprechaun!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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How cool! I love that Peadar is a Leaprachaun to, and I want to know where his pot of gold is too. I hope that the darkness that shows across his face doesn't mean he is a mean leprechaun!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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You are so awesome for keeping up with Maggie and the gang, Randa -- thank you so very much!! ;) :) Take care out there! ;);) Yvette
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter about the arrival at the new home, there is already some sinister feelings and happenings that seems to brew in the older inhabitants and the new comers.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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A very well-written chapter about the arrival at the new home, there is already some sinister feelings and happenings that seems to brew in the older inhabitants and the new comers.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Thank you so very much for keeping up with the gang, Sandra -- you are awesome! ;) ;)
Comment from royowen
Of course I never thought that they could not take Bongo on the plane, apparently as big as a panther. But his size could be regulated I'm sure, but not on a plane, provision had not been made, but it proves that Bongo is part of this mystery, so introductions have been made, and Addy is pleased, and Maggie is now established in her role, well done Yvette, interesting to see where the story, "heads" great story, blessings Roy
Typo Stephen had that (dom) edge?
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Of course I never thought that they could not take Bongo on the plane, apparently as big as a panther. But his size could be regulated I'm sure, but not on a plane, provision had not been made, but it proves that Bongo is part of this mystery, so introductions have been made, and Addy is pleased, and Maggie is now established in her role, well done Yvette, interesting to see where the story, "heads" great story, blessings Roy
Typo Stephen had that (dom) edge?
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Thanx for the review on this one, Roy... dom is actually correct on this one (slang for dominant...), but thank you THANK YOU for having my back for me!! Goodness knows I need all the extra eyes I can get... :) ;) Take care over/down there! ;);) Yvette
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My pleasure Yvette
