Will You Linger Longer?
Possibilities after the night before.14 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Such an excellent poem--skillfully-written, moving, making great use of specific details to describe those feelings on the morning after, the mixture of warmth and satisfaction with uncertainty, wondering . . .
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
Such an excellent poem--skillfully-written, moving, making great use of specific details to describe those feelings on the morning after, the mixture of warmth and satisfaction with uncertainty, wondering . . .
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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What a terrific review! Thanks for the high rating!!
Comment from RodG
A very tender love poem with a happy ending for an aging couple who have found how wonderful it is to share bliss again. Congrats on the win, my friend. It's my pleasure to share the red ribbon with you again. Rod
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
A very tender love poem with a happy ending for an aging couple who have found how wonderful it is to share bliss again. Congrats on the win, my friend. It's my pleasure to share the red ribbon with you again. Rod
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review Rod. Ditto.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This a a beautifully penned poem. We do all need love, no matter what age we are. I do hope he stayed. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
This a a beautifully penned poem. We do all need love, no matter what age we are. I do hope he stayed. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your lovely review, Debbie.
I hope he stayed, too... for both their sakes. I wonder what they had for breakfast. It might have been crumpet.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely. The read is fluid and the imagery used vivid and lingering. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
This meets the contest requirements nicely. The read is fluid and the imagery used vivid and lingering. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review!
Comment from Patty Palmer
So sad when you meet someone you think might be the one and then find out you were just a one night stand. The pain it causes sometimes feels unbearable. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
So sad when you meet someone you think might be the one and then find out you were just a one night stand. The pain it causes sometimes feels unbearable. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review. Different expectations can cause distress.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is a lovely poem. The portrayal of a yearning for a new page in a book that has been half read. To continue on with a fresh start to a new chapter, with anticipation of a different ending. You have collected your words to create a very meaningful poem. Good Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
This is a lovely poem. The portrayal of a yearning for a new page in a book that has been half read. To continue on with a fresh start to a new chapter, with anticipation of a different ending. You have collected your words to create a very meaningful poem. Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your lovely review!
Comment from Gail Denham
Definitely a deep feeling, emotional poem. Good job. And sad to thing of only one night - when obviously the two characters both need each other. One would hope it would last a lifetime. That's how it should turn out.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
Definitely a deep feeling, emotional poem. Good job. And sad to thing of only one night - when obviously the two characters both need each other. One would hope it would last a lifetime. That's how it should turn out.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review. I have my fingers crossed for them... they should be older and wiser to not just have a one-nighter. We all need company to share things with.
Comment from JLR
The process of holding one ...just one more...day, cup of tea, walk in the park, dinner with candle light, taking a hike, sitting by a fire, anything that we can just do and be to stay together Well written with great hope...
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
The process of holding one ...just one more...day, cup of tea, walk in the park, dinner with candle light, taking a hike, sitting by a fire, anything that we can just do and be to stay together Well written with great hope...
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem about the feelings we have the morning after the night we spend with a lived one often seems meaningless when we feel ignored by our partner.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
A very well-written heartfelt poem about the feelings we have the morning after the night we spend with a lived one often seems meaningless when we feel ignored by our partner.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Thanks Sandra!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Love always seems to be better the second, third, or latest time around. I think I like the lines "Our eyes cannot disguise/that separate hunger deep within" best as it seems to be the most universal in tone. I think the only thing I would change is "Speak to my heart before we part:
tell me how it could be." I would change the colon to a semi-colon, since there are two independent sentences there.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
Love always seems to be better the second, third, or latest time around. I think I like the lines "Our eyes cannot disguise/that separate hunger deep within" best as it seems to be the most universal in tone. I think the only thing I would change is "Speak to my heart before we part:
tell me how it could be." I would change the colon to a semi-colon, since there are two independent sentences there.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Thanks for reviewing and for your comments... always good to hear what might need another look for accuracy.