Eric's Epic Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Next Adventure Begins!"Another adventure for Eric
34 total reviews
Comment from WryWriter
I am reading these chapters in backwards order it seems. But it doesn't hurt one bit because they are so well-written and very enjoyable to read. I don't know where you pick these stories out of your brain, but keep it up!! They are delightful!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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I am reading these chapters in backwards order it seems. But it doesn't hurt one bit because they are so well-written and very enjoyable to read. I don't know where you pick these stories out of your brain, but keep it up!! They are delightful!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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What a nice thing to say, thank you so much, WryWriter, that is so kind of you. It's lovely to know you are enjoying this story. Big hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from JudyE
You chose a great place to stop! Now what I am going to do till you write the next bit? lol
Just two small points:
Eric stood his bike up and stroked the strange looking box - I would have hyphenated 'strange looking'
'The only sign of life nearby came from a small log cabin. The smoke from the chimney was the only evidence that someone was at home.' - getting really picky but there are two 'only's' quite close. I might have changed the second sentence a bit. Of course, it's just a personal thing but it did make me pause. :)
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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You chose a great place to stop! Now what I am going to do till you write the next bit? lol
Just two small points:
Eric stood his bike up and stroked the strange looking box - I would have hyphenated 'strange looking'
'The only sign of life nearby came from a small log cabin. The smoke from the chimney was the only evidence that someone was at home.' - getting really picky but there are two 'only's' quite close. I might have changed the second sentence a bit. Of course, it's just a personal thing but it did make me pause. :)
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for going back and reviewing this chapter, Judy, and pointing out those nits. I totally agreed with you on both counts and have changed them. It's those little things that I miss at times and need someone with a sharp eye to find them for me. So a HUGE thank you! You don't have to wait, the next part is already posted and I'm keen to see if you find anything that jumps out at you. Thanks again, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Seems to flow very well. I like the choice of names, because it seems as if anyone of any age would relate to the characters. A horse from another time is also intriguing, because on the one hand, a horse is still a horse, but those of us who are horse lovers will want to know more. I only found two or three words which reminded me this is UK English, so it could definitely be shared anywhere! Nice going.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
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Seems to flow very well. I like the choice of names, because it seems as if anyone of any age would relate to the characters. A horse from another time is also intriguing, because on the one hand, a horse is still a horse, but those of us who are horse lovers will want to know more. I only found two or three words which reminded me this is UK English, so it could definitely be shared anywhere! Nice going.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Crystie, for this nice review and for sharing your thoughts on the story. I'm pleased you enjoyed it. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very good image and story, Sandra.
-I like how you begin with
the possibility of seeing Drozig.
-He and his son were very nice characters.
-But, Herbie and Eric are off to the days
of the West, as Herbie scans the horse.
-I also like how Eric explains
what amounts to time travel,
and Herbie comments on the Gizmo.
-The horse is fixed up, and when
they settle in the new surroundings,
they don't see too much, but
the horse finds it very familiar.
-However, someone was not expecting
visitors, and we wait to see who it was
that fired a shot and why!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
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-Very good image and story, Sandra.
-I like how you begin with
the possibility of seeing Drozig.
-He and his son were very nice characters.
-But, Herbie and Eric are off to the days
of the West, as Herbie scans the horse.
-I also like how Eric explains
what amounts to time travel,
and Herbie comments on the Gizmo.
-The horse is fixed up, and when
they settle in the new surroundings,
they don't see too much, but
the horse finds it very familiar.
-However, someone was not expecting
visitors, and we wait to see who it was
that fired a shot and why!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
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I'm really pleased you like the way the story has started, Pam, and the way things are happening. Now the introductions are almost there, the story will begin to take shape. I'm delighted you are enjoying it. I've been working on the next part these last two days. I think it's almost ready. :)) Thank you so much, my friend, and a huge hug for all those pretty stars! Love Sandra xxxx
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You are very welcome for the stars and review, Sandra. Glad the story is going well!
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
So we've arrived in the not too wild west. Not yet anyway.
Excellent set up of the story line. Previous readers will know
about Herb and Giz, now new ones do also.
Just the right touch of humor that kids will relate to,
and the horse understands English. I wonder if it talks.
Oh crikey, another perfect ending.
Even Mildred would smile at "Oh crikey."
Maybe you could send me one of those protector, time-traveling gizmo thingies. I could make very good use of a time jumping gizmo.
Well done.
Robert
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
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Hello Sandra,
So we've arrived in the not too wild west. Not yet anyway.
Excellent set up of the story line. Previous readers will know
about Herb and Giz, now new ones do also.
Just the right touch of humor that kids will relate to,
and the horse understands English. I wonder if it talks.
Oh crikey, another perfect ending.
Even Mildred would smile at "Oh crikey."
Maybe you could send me one of those protector, time-traveling gizmo thingies. I could make very good use of a time jumping gizmo.
Well done.
Robert
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
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Yes, it was a bit of a let down really. Eric believed he was going to be in the thick of it, but there was nothing there! Lol. It's going to hot up soon. I had to laugh at the Mildred part, yes, she would, wouldn't she? I never thought of that. lol! I wonder why my books are always about time travel, it was intentional. Perhaps I come from the future???? I'll have to look to see if my Gizmo is here somewhere, and, NO, sorry, if there was one here, it would be used by MOI! There are loads of places I'd like to go to.
Thank you so much for the sox stars, my friend, and this lovely, fun review. Big hugs!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is well written and thoroughly engaging. You deliver a SPAG free piece which allows the reader to completely immerse themselves in the story without any distractions. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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This is well written and thoroughly engaging. You deliver a SPAG free piece which allows the reader to completely immerse themselves in the story without any distractions. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much, Mystic Angel, I'm really pleased you enjoyed this part, those were such lovely comments! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Earl Corp
I dont think the UK English detracts from the story. I love time travel stories. One piece of advice, you might want to take a look at Old West jargon before you get into interactions between Eric and the settlers.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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I dont think the UK English detracts from the story. I love time travel stories. One piece of advice, you might want to take a look at Old West jargon before you get into interactions between Eric and the settlers.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Thank you for that, Earl, I had a look on line to see if there was a site that gave me the info, and there is. I'll be using that a lot! The story is for middle group children, 9 - 14 (and old children like me) Thank you for reading this part and for the tip, that's what I needed. :) Sandra xx
Comment from SLMorrical
This is a wonderful chapter to the book. I feel this is more of a book for a younger person. I think it is cute that Herbie is a drone, and from another planet. This is very good. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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This is a wonderful chapter to the book. I feel this is more of a book for a younger person. I think it is cute that Herbie is a drone, and from another planet. This is very good. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Sandra. Yes, Eric is my 11-year-old grandson, and is dyslexic. He starts a special needs school in September so we are all hoping it will be a big help. He asked me if I'd write a book about him having adventures, so I wrote, Eric and the Aliens. Now he wants more! His new school headmaster went to see my son and daughter-in-law two weeks ago to have a personal chat about Eric and he saw my book. Chris told him how it came about and he has ordered some for the school. I'm hoping he'll get some of this one too when it's done. Thank you, my friend, I'm glad you are with me for this story. Big hugs. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from l.raven
HI Sandra, ok...the next word for the following chapter will be...BANG...you really have to stop leaving me hanging...LOL...so off we go on another awesome adventure...and I was glad the horse got back with his friends...and hope this guy is a bad shot...love the story already sweet girl...so very well written my soooooo sweet friend you...sending much love to you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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HI Sandra, ok...the next word for the following chapter will be...BANG...you really have to stop leaving me hanging...LOL...so off we go on another awesome adventure...and I was glad the horse got back with his friends...and hope this guy is a bad shot...love the story already sweet girl...so very well written my soooooo sweet friend you...sending much love to you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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LOL! No, it's not, it's 'pop pop pop! LOL. Aw, Linda, you are so funny, you always make me laugh. Thank you for all those lovely stars, and for those really fun comments. Bless your heart, my friend. Sending you an extra hug, and lots of love back! Give Noah my love! :)) xxxxxSandra xxx
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I Will...and you my wonderful sweet friend...are so very welcome...biggerest hugs to you....and give Ian one as well...How is Sarah doing???...love you lots right back at you...smiling big...Linda xxoo
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Hooray!! So, I get to pick up at the beginning now! :) This will be fun with a bicycle in the 'frontier days'... :) A great beginning, even for those of use who were not familiar with the first book, it was easy to 'fall into' the characters and the action! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing and I look forward to more! ;) :) Yvette :)
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Hooray!! So, I get to pick up at the beginning now! :) This will be fun with a bicycle in the 'frontier days'... :) A great beginning, even for those of use who were not familiar with the first book, it was easy to 'fall into' the characters and the action! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing and I look forward to more! ;) :) Yvette :)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Lol, Yvette, this is part 2, but you know enough to come back for part 3. Thank you so much, my friend, it's lovely to have you come along on the journey. big hugs, Sandra xx
