Two Hearts
The joining of14 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This is lovely .what great imagery, fire forging the flames of love. The picture you chose goes well with the words. I don't know much about this form of poetry, but i do know that i enjoyed this very much. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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This is lovely .what great imagery, fire forging the flames of love. The picture you chose goes well with the words. I don't know much about this form of poetry, but i do know that i enjoyed this very much. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from Mark D. R.
Very nice entry for this contest and a format yet to be explored by me. I too have used jgrace for my FanArt illustrations - terrific choice to complement your poem.
like:
the contrast between your 'one' and 'two hearts'
'sealing everything ...'
Love conquers all in life and in your verse.
Nice job!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Very nice entry for this contest and a format yet to be explored by me. I too have used jgrace for my FanArt illustrations - terrific choice to complement your poem.
like:
the contrast between your 'one' and 'two hearts'
'sealing everything ...'
Love conquers all in life and in your verse.
Nice job!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much for this very encouraging review****kahpot
Comment from Melanie Cox
Wow! A very powerful poem. The intensity of emotion is evident in this impassioned write. Not easy to do when there are limited on words. Well done. I just want to offer 1 suggestion. According to the rules of the contest, line 3 should be 3 syllables and it has 4... forged (1), by (1) and fire (2). Could you use "flame" instead here? Just a suggestion, as I said but it fits with the rules and also maintains the same meaning and power for the line. I hope you found this helpful. Very best wishes for the comp.
Bless
Mel
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Wow! A very powerful poem. The intensity of emotion is evident in this impassioned write. Not easy to do when there are limited on words. Well done. I just want to offer 1 suggestion. According to the rules of the contest, line 3 should be 3 syllables and it has 4... forged (1), by (1) and fire (2). Could you use "flame" instead here? Just a suggestion, as I said but it fits with the rules and also maintains the same meaning and power for the line. I hope you found this helpful. Very best wishes for the comp.
Bless
Mel
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much and yes very helpful I shall check that out, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a passionate and powerful write and I felt the emotion and the loyalty here in your words, a fine poem and I wish you luck with the contest, you entered my heart here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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This is a passionate and powerful write and I felt the emotion and the loyalty here in your words, a fine poem and I wish you luck with the contest, you entered my heart here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much for this wonderful and encouraging review, appreciated always****kahpot
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Two Hearts", is short, succinct and very much to the point. Woven through each short line of this talented poet's work are the golden threads of truth.
To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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"Two Hearts", is short, succinct and very much to the point. Woven through each short line of this talented poet's work are the golden threads of truth.
To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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thank you very much, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Your overall presentation is beautiful. I really liked your use of the words, 'forged', 'joining', and 'sealing'.
This is a wonderful contest entry for the Tetractys. Very best wishes!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Your overall presentation is beautiful. I really liked your use of the words, 'forged', 'joining', and 'sealing'.
This is a wonderful contest entry for the Tetractys. Very best wishes!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much
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A beautiful entry!
Comment from Mia Twysted
It is a lovely idea that you join hearts when you are in love. It gives power and meaning to the trials we put our hearts through.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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It is a lovely idea that you join hearts when you are in love. It gives power and meaning to the trials we put our hearts through.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written tetractys poem about two hearts that are induced as one by the fire of love that connects them from the first minute they see each other, a bond not to be broken.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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A very well-written tetractys poem about two hearts that are induced as one by the fire of love that connects them from the first minute they see each other, a bond not to be broken.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from JLR
Might just be my old worn and tired eyes but this very well written piece would be so much easier tor read with. Larger font and or perhaps a bolder font to bounce,of the heavy deep red back drop.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Might just be my old worn and tired eyes but this very well written piece would be so much easier tor read with. Larger font and or perhaps a bolder font to bounce,of the heavy deep red back drop.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from fm wright
A beautifully written poem that flows very well and uses this form wonderfully in conveying your thoughts. I have found nothing wrong with this piece and look forward to seeing it do well in the contest. A perfect picture accompanies it!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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A beautifully written poem that flows very well and uses this form wonderfully in conveying your thoughts. I have found nothing wrong with this piece and look forward to seeing it do well in the contest. A perfect picture accompanies it!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much
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You're very much welcome!
