Exercising Sermonic Demons
The good, the bad, and some ugly impacts.12 total reviews
Comment from Six-Star Writer
This seemed way to generic and preachy to me. So I'll have to give the poem a pass. And trust me, people don't have to be furious to some out abusive language. There are plenty of people who use so-called calm, passive-aggressive language that is usually worse than furious language. In fact, these are the people who usually invoke others to anger.
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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This seemed way to generic and preachy to me. So I'll have to give the poem a pass. And trust me, people don't have to be furious to some out abusive language. There are plenty of people who use so-called calm, passive-aggressive language that is usually worse than furious language. In fact, these are the people who usually invoke others to anger.
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your honest review. It is vey refreshing to have your point of view; many others seem to think they will offend so they give everyone a 5 and therefore the review doesn't really give the writer an honest appraisal of their writing's impact on someone else.
So you think my poem is preachy? Yes it is, that's why it's got Sermon in the title. Being preached at is another way words can have an impact, negatively, even if they are supposed to be 'nice' words.
Your comment about passive-aggressive I know too well myself from experiencing that in a past (thank god) relationship. Very undermining. Cheers, LM
Comment from john mallahan
I almost get the sense of two lovers here--I mean, two different. They could be men, I suppose, or only, two very different beings. Would that only everyone could always be the same--could contribute to a relationship in ways that were only positive. Guess it is the others choice as to whether they move on or not...
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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I almost get the sense of two lovers here--I mean, two different. They could be men, I suppose, or only, two very different beings. Would that only everyone could always be the same--could contribute to a relationship in ways that were only positive. Guess it is the others choice as to whether they move on or not...
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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It could be God and the devil also... we all have something of each in us. Positive / negative energy... angry, calm. If we were always the same it might be a bit dull for most people. But we could certainly all do with no angry, shouting people in our lives.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written piece makes excellent use of strong, descriptive words
to draw a vivid contrast between uplifting, healing words and destructive
vitriol. The last line is TRUE; beating down others takes down the speaker too.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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This well-written piece makes excellent use of strong, descriptive words
to draw a vivid contrast between uplifting, healing words and destructive
vitriol. The last line is TRUE; beating down others takes down the speaker too.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Terrific review, thanks Janice.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about false words that people speak to us and pretend to speak the truth and by the time we find out it was not the truth it is normally too late and the damage is done forever.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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A very well-written poem about false words that people speak to us and pretend to speak the truth and by the time we find out it was not the truth it is normally too late and the damage is done forever.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Sandra.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Excellent, excellent, excellent ... all 'the good, the bad, the ugly' of spoken words were well depicted within each stanza.
I love your title; clever choice of words: 'EXERCISING SERMONIC demons'. I had to catch myself when I read your title. My mind had naturally drifted to 'EXORCISING' demons.
This is a really a great contest entry. Very best wishes :)
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Excellent, excellent, excellent ... all 'the good, the bad, the ugly' of spoken words were well depicted within each stanza.
I love your title; clever choice of words: 'EXERCISING SERMONIC demons'. I had to catch myself when I read your title. My mind had naturally drifted to 'EXORCISING' demons.
This is a really a great contest entry. Very best wishes :)
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thanks very much for your excellent feedback. 'Exorcising' inevitably springs to mind when demons are mentioned... I thought they needed some exercise as well, then see who noticed. You didn't let me down!
Comment from Cindy Warren
Once you say something, you can never un-say it. The damage is done, and it may be forever. In my opinion when someone says something really threatening or abusive it should raise a big red flag. It will probably happen again.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Once you say something, you can never un-say it. The damage is done, and it may be forever. In my opinion when someone says something really threatening or abusive it should raise a big red flag. It will probably happen again.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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I totally agree about the red flag signifying future distress. Sometimes we only see it in hindsight though.
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Debbie Pope
When I read your last line, I actually said "wow." Your play on words is not lost on me. I love to read such crafted word usage. And, I like your organization of this piece. Your first stanza shows your chivalrous use of words and how such words can calm and settle nerves. Your second stanza uses words to bruise the air (I love that image) and set it a'quiver ( I love the use of "a'quiver"). Your third stanza challenges the reader to self-assess his own motivations.
I could go on and on. I love how you write.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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When I read your last line, I actually said "wow." Your play on words is not lost on me. I love to read such crafted word usage. And, I like your organization of this piece. Your first stanza shows your chivalrous use of words and how such words can calm and settle nerves. Your second stanza uses words to bruise the air (I love that image) and set it a'quiver ( I love the use of "a'quiver"). Your third stanza challenges the reader to self-assess his own motivations.
I could go on and on. I love how you write.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Hi Debbie - We are kindred spirits in our enjoyment of word pictures and meanings. I am going to fan you because not only do you yourself write exquisite poetry - I love your haiku with such crisp yet layered meanings - but you write exceptional reviews! (I love lapping up praise.)
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Thank you for this wonderful reply. I am lapping up the praise for sure.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Use of words in dimensions is well reflected, soft, silken words of support is appreciable and encouraging, but cruel and tough words scare you, and use words not to demean own personality; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Use of words in dimensions is well reflected, soft, silken words of support is appreciable and encouraging, but cruel and tough words scare you, and use words not to demean own personality; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your comments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We can sometimes get a bee in our bonnet and once our temper is lost, there is no turning back or reasoning as no one is listening after that, food for thought here Lisa, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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We can sometimes get a bee in our bonnet and once our temper is lost, there is no turning back or reasoning as no one is listening after that, food for thought here Lisa, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Loss of control leads to terrible outcomes, for sure.
Comment from Sally Law
Wow, this is quite the contrasts penned here, The complete opposite which sometimes can pour forth even from the same mouth. I just had to be a little honest here because I've heard myself on both ends of the spectrum and must confess it now. My only hope is that I've grown wiser, and realize in my old age the power of the tongue. I've chosen to heal with it.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Wow, this is quite the contrasts penned here, The complete opposite which sometimes can pour forth even from the same mouth. I just had to be a little honest here because I've heard myself on both ends of the spectrum and must confess it now. My only hope is that I've grown wiser, and realize in my old age the power of the tongue. I've chosen to heal with it.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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It's very confusing when someone's communication can be both... blowing hot and cold. My previous partner was one such and it did my head in eventually; I never knew what to expect: verbal abuse or Mr Nice Guy. I am glad your late-onset wisdom has led to a healing tongue. Come and lick me.
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I send you xxx and ooo?s today....
