Chatting With Ray And Marlin
Two Fishermen at a Bar9 total reviews
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements brilliantly. Too bad the word count was limited as you have quite a few more species of fish to 'tackle'. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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This meets the contest requirements brilliantly. Too bad the word count was limited as you have quite a few more species of fish to 'tackle'. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Yes, I could have carried on but suddenly the 100 was looming.
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from BeasPeas
It certainly IS a fishy story, but I think you've carried it out successfully without losing any of them. Clever and interesting. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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It certainly IS a fishy story, but I think you've carried it out successfully without losing any of them. Clever and interesting. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thanks for reviewing this rather smelly offering. I hope that's not all what fishermen talk about.
Cheers.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
You are really, really good at this, you know. It's amazing that within a 100 word story, 22 words are fish names.
Between the title and your description, I had an idea where this was headed, and I was not in the least bit let down.
Cleverly fascinating, and a great contest entry!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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You are really, really good at this, you know. It's amazing that within a 100 word story, 22 words are fish names.
Between the title and your description, I had an idea where this was headed, and I was not in the least bit let down.
Cleverly fascinating, and a great contest entry!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thanks so much for your enthusiastic response to this story. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Mia Twysted
Wow if that is how fisherman talk I'm left speechless.
I can see two men in the bar and I find the point of adding the different fish in the piece. I see the men as drunk and trying to be some kind of funny.
Is it one man telling a story or two men talking? I feel like it is a conversation but there are no (" ") so I can't tell what is words and what may be thought or action. And left me tumbling around unclear.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Wow if that is how fisherman talk I'm left speechless.
I can see two men in the bar and I find the point of adding the different fish in the piece. I see the men as drunk and trying to be some kind of funny.
Is it one man telling a story or two men talking? I feel like it is a conversation but there are no (" ") so I can't tell what is words and what may be thought or action. And left me tumbling around unclear.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thanks for your point of view, Mia.
It's how a certain 'orange roughy' spoke about women. (And that's why he'll probably go to hell.)
I hoped the heading 'Chatting with Ray and Marlin', and introducing their names in the story, would indicate there are 2 character in this exchange of dialogue. I took my cue for leaving out the speech marks from a prompt which had those instructions. I am sorry if it confused you, but you were probably distracted by the unsavoury content of what some men talk about, especially when alcohol is involved.
Comment from Six-Star Writer
I was really hooked on this basstard. The tempura was great. It should be lit up in neon. A true piece of gold . . .fish are great. Nice damn flow, too!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I was really hooked on this basstard. The tempura was great. It should be lit up in neon. A true piece of gold . . .fish are great. Nice damn flow, too!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Are you fishing for a compliment on your nice review?
Thanks for your excellent rating!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, this is a brilliant fishy story and you amusing me with all these different fishes! You included so many! This is a fishing story I won't easily forget! Good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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He he he, this is a brilliant fishy story and you amusing me with all these different fishes! You included so many! This is a fishing story I won't easily forget! Good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I'm pleased you found this entertaining. I do not go fishing myself so I had to find out some fish names.
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You used all the fish names brilliantly, you should be proud, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Comment from Darlene Franklin
What a brilliant play on words! What fish I hadn't heard of, I could guess.
The story unfolded without the word play feeling forced. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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What a brilliant play on words! What fish I hadn't heard of, I could guess.
The story unfolded without the word play feeling forced. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thanks for reviewing the story. I had a bit of fun with this one, although I am not a fisherman myself.
Comment from JudyE
I'd better not hazard a guess as to your identity, mystery writer, but I loved this. So many fishy names you've managed to include here. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I'd better not hazard a guess as to your identity, mystery writer, but I loved this. So many fishy names you've managed to include here. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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You'd be right about identity, methinks. Glad you liked it.
It occurred to me after I posted it with 5 minutes before deadline, that the committee might disqualify it for not being a story, just dialogue. Then I noticed that there was another contest that was JUST for dialogue. I probably should have put it in that contest instead. Darn.
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I'm glad you missed the dialogue contest. I have one in that. (Just joking - about missing). Anyway, I guess you'll just have to write another. :) Get busy.
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I'm stuck with having to do reviews to get some $$$ for entries and promotion.
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I quite like doing reviews except on tiny little poems where I never know what to say. And sometimes they don't pay much either.
Comment from barkingdog
This was a very clever idea. I can't believe you were actually able to concoct an entire conversation. It actually made sense.
Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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This was a very clever idea. I can't believe you were actually able to concoct an entire conversation. It actually made sense.
Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I had to look up fish names because I am not a fisherman... then I picked out ones that sort of made sense and had a bit of fun.
Thanks for reviewing.
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I've been reading all the entries. Voting is going to be tough. The booth wasn't open the last I checked.
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Those contests sure throw up some imaginative variety.
