Spend An Hour With Me
Reflecting on love....41 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
This would make a beautiful song! I can not only hear the music, but I can feel the emotions of friendship growing into love. Just spend an hour, that's all. And see where it takes us. Great job!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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This would make a beautiful song! I can not only hear the music, but I can feel the emotions of friendship growing into love. Just spend an hour, that's all. And see where it takes us. Great job!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Again, Your appreciation means so much to me
Comment from fm wright
You might want to put in "an" in the last writing of the chorus. Other than that it is a beautifully written lyrical poem with all the elements. The picture suits it so very well. I truly wish you the best with this entry!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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You might want to put in "an" in the last writing of the chorus. Other than that it is a beautifully written lyrical poem with all the elements. The picture suits it so very well. I truly wish you the best with this entry!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you for first reading and for spotting that oops! I read it so many times I guess my eyes didn?t realize it must have been erased with one of my edits! Bless you for pointing it out! It is corrected now xoxo
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You are ever so welcome. I think every writer, no matter how proficient they are has done that at one time or another. As for myself, more than one time or another.
Comment from Ava Wilson
This is such a beautiful poem that could easily be turned into a wonderful love song. I really enjoyed reading this and love your references to sand slipping through your hand. Excellent choice of picture as well.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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This is such a beautiful poem that could easily be turned into a wonderful love song. I really enjoyed reading this and love your references to sand slipping through your hand. Excellent choice of picture as well.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for even bothering to read it in for finding the joy that I felt writing it!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are kind, loving and creative. The reader
found this poem to descriptive and interesting. The artwork
compliments the words and theme of this poem well.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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The author's words are kind, loving and creative. The reader
found this poem to descriptive and interesting. The artwork
compliments the words and theme of this poem well.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for even bothering to look at it and for commenting! I am blessed that so many have responded so positively to this poem!
Comment from Dean Kuch
'll tell ya right straight up-front, Diana.
I'm not a big fan of romantic poetry, much less the topic of romance in general.
To me, love is but a myth, an emotion driven purely by lust, desire and want.
Like scratching an itch to satisfy a need.
People ask, "Why do you write about such dark, dreadful things?" to which I answer, "Because darkness is real but can be beautiful all at the same time."
Like a moonlit night sky filled with thousands of twinkling stars, for example.
Putting all of those feelings behind you did such a fantastic job at writing this that I felt I would be slighting you if I awarded your efforts with anything other than a six.
I'm glad I still had one left to give.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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'll tell ya right straight up-front, Diana.
I'm not a big fan of romantic poetry, much less the topic of romance in general.
To me, love is but a myth, an emotion driven purely by lust, desire and want.
Like scratching an itch to satisfy a need.
People ask, "Why do you write about such dark, dreadful things?" to which I answer, "Because darkness is real but can be beautiful all at the same time."
Like a moonlit night sky filled with thousands of twinkling stars, for example.
Putting all of those feelings behind you did such a fantastic job at writing this that I felt I would be slighting you if I awarded your efforts with anything other than a six.
I'm glad I still had one left to give.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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As I noted in my private message you have blessed my heart with this comment xoxo
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It was my pleasure, Diana.
Good luck!
~Dean
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LoL see I even got ya blowing hearts!!! Haha!!! Glad they are not red, bloody ones though blahaha!
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I got all kinds of things, Diana, heh-heh-heh...
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Hahaha!!!
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I was thinking as I read this, it should be a song, then I see it is a Lyrical Poem. Just put some lovely music to it, it could be a hit! Well done, Hope you do well in the contest. Rox
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I was thinking as I read this, it should be a song, then I see it is a Lyrical Poem. Just put some lovely music to it, it could be a hit! Well done, Hope you do well in the contest. Rox
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for reading it and your precious comment! I wish that I was musically inclined enough to put a tune to it. Maybe one day I?ll find just that song writer who has just the right melody. Heck we could collaborate if you had a tune in your head! xoxo
Comment from Artasylum
This is so lovely and touching... not to mention brilliantly written chorus or refrain it keeps one reading through this well written piece... looking yours, di
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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This is so lovely and touching... not to mention brilliantly written chorus or refrain it keeps one reading through this well written piece... looking yours, di
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I appreciate your reading and awesome comment! This is truly one of the favorites that I feel I?ve ever written! xoxo
Comment from the13thpoet
Great song! I liked the lyrics and the rhyming scheme. It had a nice flow, I found myself trying to sin it in my head. Good luck with the contest, I may have to make an entry myself.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Great song! I liked the lyrics and the rhyming scheme. It had a nice flow, I found myself trying to sin it in my head. Good luck with the contest, I may have to make an entry myself.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Awesome thank you so much because I believe that somewhere out there there is a tune for it I?m just not that musically inclined enough to come up with one. If you actually can put a tune to it maybe we should collaborate. xoxo
Comment from Loren .
Among other things, two things caused me to really like and enjoy this poem. One, of course, is the message it is telling. Spending time with a true (and actually only) friend. And, two, the repetitive "chorus". It help to solidify the rhythm of the poem , ultimately making it lyrical. Loren
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Among other things, two things caused me to really like and enjoy this poem. One, of course, is the message it is telling. Spending time with a true (and actually only) friend. And, two, the repetitive "chorus". It help to solidify the rhythm of the poem , ultimately making it lyrical. Loren
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much Loren for stopping in reading it. It is truly one of my favorites and it truly blesses my heart to know that others are enjoying it also
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Diana. This appears ro be a good entry in the lyrical poetry contest. I liked the way it sounded to a certain point, but, being honest, I didn't care for these lines:
" I'm sure that you'll find
great treasures of gold.
Won't you stay and be kind?
I don't think rhe falling in love should be reflected and compared by gold in this way. (Probably just me though.) Good luck in the contest. Bob
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Hi, Diana. This appears ro be a good entry in the lyrical poetry contest. I liked the way it sounded to a certain point, but, being honest, I didn't care for these lines:
" I'm sure that you'll find
great treasures of gold.
Won't you stay and be kind?
I don't think rhe falling in love should be reflected and compared by gold in this way. (Probably just me though.) Good luck in the contest. Bob
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you Bob, I appreciate that you even read it in the first place! The gold is a little bit like Neil Young?s song ?heart of gold?. I have always love that reference.
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Oh, I see. : ) Bob
