Spend An Hour With Me
Reflecting on love....41 total reviews
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Diana: I like the poem and photo. Spend time together
is a great message. We can bond, walk and dine in friendship.
We can discover treasures of gold bonding. Congrats on a
great song. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Diana: I like the poem and photo. Spend time together
is a great message. We can bond, walk and dine in friendship.
We can discover treasures of gold bonding. Congrats on a
great song. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you, I appreciate your kind support! I?m so glad that you enjoyed!
Comment from estory
I think you did a great job with the rhythm and rhyme in this lyric, you had some nice musical effects in the writing; it's hard to say what it would sound like with the music. I've found in my own experience that song lyrics aren't as easy to do as they appear; you have to really work hard to get the rhythm of the language to fit to the rhythm to the music. So we need to hear that music to see how successful you really were. But the images of sand and softness, of soft light and steady love in the eyes, were nice. estory
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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I think you did a great job with the rhythm and rhyme in this lyric, you had some nice musical effects in the writing; it's hard to say what it would sound like with the music. I've found in my own experience that song lyrics aren't as easy to do as they appear; you have to really work hard to get the rhythm of the language to fit to the rhythm to the music. So we need to hear that music to see how successful you really were. But the images of sand and softness, of soft light and steady love in the eyes, were nice. estory
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you, I appreciate your kind support! I?m so glad that you enjoyed! I am not musically talented enough to set it to music but maybe one day, i will find that musician! xo
Comment from jlsavell
Diana, this is so lyrically beautiful! Absolutely and undeniably. I am taken captive. Your talent shines bright in this work and great talent you have! As I sigh with poet envy...
Incredible.
Your friend and fan
Jimi
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Diana, this is so lyrically beautiful! Absolutely and undeniably. I am taken captive. Your talent shines bright in this work and great talent you have! As I sigh with poet envy...
Incredible.
Your friend and fan
Jimi
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Awww! Thank you, I appreciate your kind support! I?m so glad that you enjoyed!
Comment from Ms. Snyder
VIRTUAL SIX - this is really beautiful and I felt the emotion that threaded through each stanza even though it repeats it builds. Which I enjoyed immensely! Ms. Crawford, you made something as simple as sand an enjoyable and romantic notion that you would share with a potential friend and lover. The sentiment is something that has much passion and devotion behind it. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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VIRTUAL SIX - this is really beautiful and I felt the emotion that threaded through each stanza even though it repeats it builds. Which I enjoyed immensely! Ms. Crawford, you made something as simple as sand an enjoyable and romantic notion that you would share with a potential friend and lover. The sentiment is something that has much passion and devotion behind it. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you, I appreciate your kind support! I?m so glad that you enjoyed!
Comment from JudyE
This is a very entertaining work with a rhythmical feel which makes it easy to read. I also like the imagery you've woven into the piece. The best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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This is a very entertaining work with a rhythmical feel which makes it easy to read. I also like the imagery you've woven into the piece. The best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you, I appreciate your kind support! I?m so glad that you enjoyed!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Spend An Hour With Me", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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"Spend An Hour With Me", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you, I appreciate your kind support! I?m so glad that you enjoyed!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is very nice and lyrical. It reminds me, a little, of "We got tonight..." lyrics which speak of taking full advantage of the idea that 'we' have now, and should make good use of it. You stook to form as lyrics go, and I enjoyed reading this aloud. My favorite three lines are, "Let us become good friends. No one knows when it ends, and we all need to know who we are." That expresses growth in the experience, no matter how it ends up, eventually. These are wise words and tell of someone, who has been there before and knows. Well written and thoughtful. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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This is very nice and lyrical. It reminds me, a little, of "We got tonight..." lyrics which speak of taking full advantage of the idea that 'we' have now, and should make good use of it. You stook to form as lyrics go, and I enjoyed reading this aloud. My favorite three lines are, "Let us become good friends. No one knows when it ends, and we all need to know who we are." That expresses growth in the experience, no matter how it ends up, eventually. These are wise words and tell of someone, who has been there before and knows. Well written and thoughtful. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you, I appreciate your kind support! I?m so glad that you enjoyed!
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You're welcome. Have a nice weekend.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is a great contest entry and should do well in the voting booth. I would love to hear your lyrics set to music. There are members on this site who can do that for you.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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This is a great contest entry and should do well in the voting booth. I would love to hear your lyrics set to music. There are members on this site who can do that for you.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Hi Tom! Thank you for checking it out! I would be interested in knowing who on this site I could work with. I?ve always wanted to set some things to music, but I?m not musically trained enough to write my own melodies. I would love if you have a name or two :).
Comment from patcelaw
Like the flowing of sands in the hour glass when we are with friends the times seems to pass so very quickly. May your weekend be blessed with great wonders.
Patricia
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Like the flowing of sands in the hour glass when we are with friends the times seems to pass so very quickly. May your weekend be blessed with great wonders.
Patricia
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Beautiful! Thank you for appreciating the work! Funny, I almost used a pic of sand in an hourglass LoL
Comment from Janice Canerdy
These song lyrics are well-written, uplifting, and moving. A life-long
friendship or a sustained romance begins with that "hour" spent
together. Love mustn't slip through one's fingers.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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These song lyrics are well-written, uplifting, and moving. A life-long
friendship or a sustained romance begins with that "hour" spent
together. Love mustn't slip through one's fingers.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for stopping in reading my work and for commenting and you are so correct! That is why I have a question at the end of the chorus! xoxo
