Reviews from

The Spider's Web

5-7-5 poem

15 total reviews 
Comment from sunnilicious
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Great visual imagery. The things spider webs can accumulate. It's like spiders are insect hoarders but openly. Halloween time brings the fake ones and they are dreadful. But the knitting is so attractive. Lolz.

Good luck in the contest. God bless you :)

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
    Thank you so much, Alicia for the great review and comments and for the awesome six stars. I don't like spiders in my house, but in free nature with dew drops they are beautiful!!!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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Yes a real set up for the spider's dinner; flies, etc. However, you have met the rules of the contest while creating a nifty little poem,
that the picture compliments. Very nicely done.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
    Thank you very much Raffaelina for a wonderful review and comments. They are much appreciated. Fia
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Oh, Fia -- absolutely love the sentiment and the visual that brings in a bit of personification through the artist's avenue!! ;) ;) Great job!
I would only suggest that the 2nd and 3rd lines have a 'mismatch' of plural and singular from one to the next. In order to limit the syllables, you can't make the 3rd line plural, so I would suggest making the 2nd line singular... one way (certainly not the only way, just a suggestion):

a spider spool-knits her web

This is such a cool compilation as I've never even heard the term before but it immediately conjures the perfect mental image!! ;) ;) Thank you for sharing and best of luck to you in the contest! :) :) Yvette

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
    Thank you so much Yvette for a wonderful review and feedback.
    You are right, there is a mismatch here, thanks for telling me. I have changed it and for wishing me luck. Fia
Comment from closetpoetjester
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Ahh the never ending thread from the rear end spool haha
Indeed a deathly piece of artwork.
You spun a great yarn here...but I AM glad it's on the outside of the window haha
Well done
Cheers P

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
    Thank you so much for a wonderful review and comments. Spiders here in Holland are not dangerous, only scary.... Especially the hairy ones..... Fia
Comment from Gail Denham
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Ugh - I got no use for spider s- even seeing them on the page gives me shivers. And there are some poisonous ones even around here. They say you're never more than three feet from a spider. i say Ugh.
Good poem

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
    Thanks for a wonderful review and comments, Gail. Spiders here in Holland are not dangerous, only scary. I don't like them, especially the hairy ones... Fia
Comment from BeasPeas
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Great job on this 5-7-5, Fia. Best of luck in the contest. The spider's web is beautiful art but deadly as you mention here. Unique poetic theme, well worded. Marilyn

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
    Thank you Marilyn for a wonderful review and comments.
    I love the spider's web without spider... It's beautiful early in the morning with dew drops... Fia
Comment from misscookie
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I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match
Your word captured my attention from the first word to the last
And its true they are artist in their own ways.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
    Thank you Cookie for a wonderful review and comments. I love the spider's web, but without spider. Especially early in the morning with dew drops. Fia
reply by misscookie on 15-Jun-2019
    my pleasure
    cookie
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Yes this is a deathly piece of artwork for the poor fly getting caught in it! But the spider has to eat and flies don't live long anyway! He he he, I smiled when I read this one, good luck with the contest, I like it, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
    Thank you Dolly for the wonderful review and nice comments I like the spider's web without the spider. Especially early in the morning with dew drops. I don't like spiders, especially the big hairy ones, they walk very fast and it's scary when you don't know where they are.. Love Fia x
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Dutchie,

I do I like 5-7-5s: to read, to write, and to study!

You selected a great illustration to complement your syllable restricted verse. I too am a fan of centering text for my 5-7-5s. IMHO it is the best means to display short verses.

'Deathly ... art' is most descriptive for the web spinner's daily duties.

Good luck for your entry.

Mark

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
    Thanks so much Mark for a wonderful review and nice comments.
    It's not easy to write a good 5-7-5 poem. It's not only syllable counting... I have to look at your portfolio, I am curious.... Fia
reply by Mark D. R. on 14-Jun-2019
    Fia,

    I have no capability to write longer verses. So I typically review only short verses and write exclusively in the Japanese or English Haiku style.

    And, given my astrological sign, I am an eclectic topic writer LOL

    Mark

    BTW ... in my portfolio is a three-word 5-7-5 entry!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
    I take a look, Mark. I'm not very capable to write long verses too. I'm Dutch and live in Holland. Sometimes I try a long verse or short story.

    Fia
reply by Mark D. R. on 14-Jun-2019
    Fia,

    I met my future wife on a tourist day long bus ride to Keukenhof, Maduridam, and Rotterdam. As a an adult, I visited with my children too. Two years ago, my wife did a canalboat-bike ride with a group of friends. So I like Holland. You might enjoy reading on the Internet 'Welcome to Holland,' which is unrelated to our interest in short verse poetry.

    'Dankjewel' for your reply.

    Mark
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
    That's awesome. I was born in Amsterdam and live about 10 km from The Hague where Madurodam is situated. I will look the Internet. Fia
Comment from Patty Palmer
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It amazes me how you can get an entire picture from a little handful of words. Some people I can't figure out what they are trying to say. All I see is a bunch of words and if it does say something if I have to decipher it then I guess I don't care enough to work that hard. lol But your poem I could tell what you were talking about without having to rack my brain.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
    Thanks Patricia for a wonderful review and comments. O yes I can relate to. I've read some 5-7-5 poems of which I thought what do they mean? I've no clue what they are trying to say. So glad with your review. Anyway it was clear!! Fia
reply by Patty Palmer on 14-Jun-2019
    You're very welcome! And when I come to those little poems or even longer poems with the words I don't understand, I pass by because I can't review what I don't understand
    Patty
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
    So do I, Patty. You are right. Fia