A Sum of the Parts
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Comment from Diana L Crawford
What a great way to have poets introduce themselves to the community! I love how you creatively put yours together! Your poem rhymes well and flows smoothly. And including your love of writing makes for an awesome ending! Good luck with your contest!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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What a great way to have poets introduce themselves to the community! I love how you creatively put yours together! Your poem rhymes well and flows smoothly. And including your love of writing makes for an awesome ending! Good luck with your contest!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Diana! I appreciate this review very much. I love it when reviewers are this kind of specific because it helps to know what parts of a piece 'connected' with them.
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Well if we can?t expound on the piece what says its actually been read! I love the contests created on this site because it is always fresh and new to my eyes and heart!
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I could not agree more (on both counts)!!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This piece is well-written and descriptive, making excellent use of specific
details. Yes, a sense of humor is a great gift from God. He knew we would need one.
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This piece is well-written and descriptive, making excellent use of specific
details. Yes, a sense of humor is a great gift from God. He knew we would need one.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Ohhh, did He EVER!! I'm eternally grateful!
Thanks for the very helpful and encouraging review.
Comment from Hitcher
I don't have much time for schemers and wingers either, life is too short to give them any air time : )) Happy and healthy is how we all want to stay is it not ?. Good look with your little bio poem my blue-green eyed friend.
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I don't have much time for schemers and wingers either, life is too short to give them any air time : )) Happy and healthy is how we all want to stay is it not ?. Good look with your little bio poem my blue-green eyed friend.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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You are welcome! Thank you for this lovely review!
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Excellent rhyme and a very readable and understandable poem. By the way, I was a redhead, but I'm now 81 and completely gray, right down to
my beard. Good work.
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Excellent rhyme and a very readable and understandable poem. By the way, I was a redhead, but I'm now 81 and completely gray, right down to
my beard. Good work.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Well, as long as we're being so candid here, Willie, were it not for Nice 'N Easy, I'd be completely gray, too. And, thanks to tweezers, I don't have a beard.
Thanks for the terrific review. I love it.
Comment from Yvon
Yes it takes a lot to put together a person or poem for all that matters. God gives us many gifts and one of them is definitely humor. Stay happy and healthy and keep spreading joy.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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Yes it takes a lot to put together a person or poem for all that matters. God gives us many gifts and one of them is definitely humor. Stay happy and healthy and keep spreading joy.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Yvon.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
With the exception of the first two lines of the first stanza, I can fully identify with your poem. I'm particularly fond of the second stanza. In fact, I might be the second stanza. Your rhyme and meter are great. It was easy and fun to read. The best meter of a poem is one that you don't have to reconsider the meter while you're reading. Yours was flawless. It's an excellent piece. -Robert-
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With the exception of the first two lines of the first stanza, I can fully identify with your poem. I'm particularly fond of the second stanza. In fact, I might be the second stanza. Your rhyme and meter are great. It was easy and fun to read. The best meter of a poem is one that you don't have to reconsider the meter while you're reading. Yours was flawless. It's an excellent piece. -Robert-
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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From you, king of meter and rhyme, that review means the world...especially since a couple of other reviewers felt mine were off in the second stanza. (I guess 'alacrity' is a new word for them...)
So thank you, Robert. I appreciate this very, very much.
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You're welcome. Sometimes the syllable count and the meter of the verse can be a little different. What means the most to me is the flow. If it sounds "smooth" but the syllable count is 1-2 off, it keeps the meter in tact. I am just an untrained poet but I know what I like and I know how words do, or should, sound together. I have been criticized here for little picky things and the first thing I do is go look at the critics work. LOL I like your poem.
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We think alike. I did that and immediately felt better. lol
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I love the message of the poem, and I especially like the last stanza. Unfortunately, I stuttered over the word "alacrity" in the second stanza, and I had to read the stanza several times.
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I love the message of the poem, and I especially like the last stanza. Unfortunately, I stuttered over the word "alacrity" in the second stanza, and I had to read the stanza several times.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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Okay. Thanks for the feedback.
Comment from Michele Harber
What a fun poem, and an excellent use of the Bio writing prompt. You've provided a lot of information about yourself, and injected a bit of humor with your parenthetical comments. Your poem has a nice, smooth flow, and your rhymes are well chosen.
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What a fun poem, and an excellent use of the Bio writing prompt. You've provided a lot of information about yourself, and injected a bit of humor with your parenthetical comments. Your poem has a nice, smooth flow, and your rhymes are well chosen.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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Thanks very much!
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You're very welcome!
Comment from victor 66
This was a very humous and fun poem to read. I believe it behooves people to be decisive. Make a decision, live with the decision you made, and then shut up about it. It's a done deal. Good luck in the Bio contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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This was a very humous and fun poem to read. I believe it behooves people to be decisive. Make a decision, live with the decision you made, and then shut up about it. It's a done deal. Good luck in the Bio contest.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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Well put, Victor! Thank you!
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You are most welcome, mystery writer.
Comment from Habib Oke
Great composition. I like the poem. it's simple and concise. However I don't think it's necessary to put any part of the line in brackets. Just remove the bracket and make it a part of the real lines. Again I want you to look at the statement "I find them a bore." I think it's grammatically wrong. It's better written as *I find them boring*. The n the word G-d what does it mean? You are trying to pass a message through your poem so make every word clear.
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Great composition. I like the poem. it's simple and concise. However I don't think it's necessary to put any part of the line in brackets. Just remove the bracket and make it a part of the real lines. Again I want you to look at the statement "I find them a bore." I think it's grammatically wrong. It's better written as *I find them boring*. The n the word G-d what does it mean? You are trying to pass a message through your poem so make every word clear.
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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okay.
