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Do Not Tell Me Yet

Yet another brother with cancer

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Comment from Mary Ann McPhedran
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A well written item which is displayed with good imagery and story line. I enjoyed reading ,but only one little problem, the colour is too dark and makes it hard to read. Thank you for sharing. Mary Ann.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
    Thank you for reading. I agree the color is to dark. I was just looking at that the other day. There is a part 2
Comment from Mary Ann McPhedran
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A well written item which is displayed with good imagery and story line. I enjoyed reading ,but only one little problem, the colour is too dark and makes it hard to read. Thank you for sharing. Mary Ann.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
    Thanks for reading.
Comment from Ricky1024
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"Don't Tell Me Yet"
Was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
...
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    I did write a part two to this. I am happy to report that My brother is recovering. Hopefully, he will stay free of cancer.
Comment from tfawcus
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Having gone through this trauma with one brother, I can well imagine your reaction to this, the second time. Your poem speaks volumes with its balance of grief and hope. Wishing you and your family well. Tony

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
    Thank you for reading. I did write a part 2.
    Currently, my brother is doing well, despite having most of his stomach removed. I pray he will continue to heal. Thank you for your thoughtful words.
Comment from Nowhereman1
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Thank you for sharing such a intimate poem. Loss is hard but i am glad you are so strong. The poem flowed really well and was easy to follow along. I enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    I wrote another piece as a part 2.

    I think he is actually going home today. There have some complications but okay overall.

    Thank you for your prayers
Comment from Barbaraj1
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This is a sad poem but one that is well done. I lost my sister, but
she went quickly. I know that I never stop thinking of her and still grieve.
I think of her every day.
I started to write poetry right after she died. My first poem was about her.
You must have hope.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    Read part 2 to see how a little piece of my families life spills out.
Comment from Gloria ....
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Hi there. What a beautiful photograph of you and your brother. My older brother died from cancer, not long ago and many friends too so I can feel your grief in your well written and heartfelt verse.

This is a fine tribute to him and to cancer survivors as well.

Many thanks to you for sharing. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    I actually wrote a part 2.
    My brother had a major surgery. Lots of complications but may be discharged today.

    So many thanks to the many writers on Fanstory.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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Hello Flyaway, your prose poem is so moving. It brings tears to my eyes because I lost my brother in April and I know how you must be feeling. It's awful! Treatment has changed in 20 years since your brother died. Your other brother has the advantage of new developments in treatment and you have to believe he will pull through. Your writing is lovely. Two pieces stand out 'We have been living under a shadow, jumping through grey hoops of emotion. Yes, you have cancer. Once again, we will all fight and believe that God is good.' And - Please, remember to live--I have no more goodbyes to give. If that time should ever come, I will walk quietly away, taking a hike among the tall Vermont trees that you so loved.

I'll pray with you flyaway for your brother's recovery - be brave - warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    I did write a ?Part 2. Don?t tell me yet?.

    Many heartfelt thanks to the writers on Fanstory.

    My brother is being released today. Still a long recovery, but he will live.
Comment from harmony13
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The author's words are heartfelt, hopeful and creative. Thank you for
the author's notes - they convey hope as your poem does. The
poem flows and connects well. The artwork is great. It compliments
the theme and words of this poem.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    My brother came through his surgery.

    I actually think he is being discharged today.

    I wrote a part 2 to the original writing to finish the story.

    Think you for your comments.
Comment from Willosa
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How brave and generous you are to write and post your personal thoughts and fears for your brother. Most of us question why these things happen to us and ours and find no answer that satisfies. Hold on tight to your faith and your belief that he will beat the odds. I sincerely hope you get to take that hike through the tall Vermont trees holding your brothers hand. Blessings and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    I actually think my brother is being discharged today.

    I did write a part 2 to the original writing to finish the story. ( part 2: Do not tell me yet)

    I have been so thankful for the heartfelt comments from the writers on Fanstory.