Truth and Fantasy
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9 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great free verse Trisha about a plane flight and the colours and sights outside the window. Well used alliteration to enhance descriptions. I enjoyed this flight with you,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
Great free verse Trisha about a plane flight and the colours and sights outside the window. Well used alliteration to enhance descriptions. I enjoyed this flight with you,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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Im glad! I appreciate your complimentary review
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from rama devi
This is quite compelling! I like the surreal quality of overlapping imagery.
I LOVE popcorn clouds--so imaginative!
One spag (Earth should be capped when used as a proper noun--a place):
The e(E)arth became a watery abyss
Love this line:
Darkness spread in eerie sheets
I also applaud all the inventive personification, like here:
Below me buildings ran away
and here:
Clouds smiled and hurried by
and here:
Calm became trampled by feet
POTENT, unique and memorable lines:
As man's bird lowered down
The world became a bigger place
Thought provoking and highly original poem. Congrats!
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
This is quite compelling! I like the surreal quality of overlapping imagery.
I LOVE popcorn clouds--so imaginative!
One spag (Earth should be capped when used as a proper noun--a place):
The e(E)arth became a watery abyss
Love this line:
Darkness spread in eerie sheets
I also applaud all the inventive personification, like here:
Below me buildings ran away
and here:
Clouds smiled and hurried by
and here:
Calm became trampled by feet
POTENT, unique and memorable lines:
As man's bird lowered down
The world became a bigger place
Thought provoking and highly original poem. Congrats!
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. The nit was corrected.im really glad you enjoyed this poem
Hugs, Trisha
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Hugs to you Trisha! :)
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Have a wonderful day
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You too!
Comment from Debbie Pope
Trisha, this may be my favorite of your poems. You wrote the poem that I have often tried to write about the unearthly experience of flying. I like "darkness spread in eerie sheets" and "time and space became blurred, melting into fantasy."
This is a beautiful poem, Trisha. I wish that I had a six star rating for this worthy poem.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
Trisha, this may be my favorite of your poems. You wrote the poem that I have often tried to write about the unearthly experience of flying. I like "darkness spread in eerie sheets" and "time and space became blurred, melting into fantasy."
This is a beautiful poem, Trisha. I wish that I had a six star rating for this worthy poem.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Your complimentary review is worth more to me than a green star,thank you
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from June Sargent
We went away last month and the flight was peaceful and enjoyable as long as we were up with the clouds. Once we landed, however, the noise and chaos at the airport was a cold splash of reality. I could relate to this piece. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
We went away last month and the flight was peaceful and enjoyable as long as we were up with the clouds. Once we landed, however, the noise and chaos at the airport was a cold splash of reality. I could relate to this piece. Nicely done.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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Thank you June, I have flown over 100,000 miles and it got progressively more chaotic. The real peace is in a flight with no drunks, aggressive people, or screaming children. The airport is another story. I appreciated your review.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well, as one who has worked on her pilot's license as well as flown A LOT for work, I will say that your first stanza ROCKS, Trisha!! :) ;) Not that the rest isn't cool as well, but I absolutely love that description of take-off!! :) So glad you enjoyed your flight and that you took the time to share your excitement and even trepidation with all of us! ;) ...."man's bird lowered down"... Great job! ;) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
Well, as one who has worked on her pilot's license as well as flown A LOT for work, I will say that your first stanza ROCKS, Trisha!! :) ;) Not that the rest isn't cool as well, but I absolutely love that description of take-off!! :) So glad you enjoyed your flight and that you took the time to share your excitement and even trepidation with all of us! ;) ...."man's bird lowered down"... Great job! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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Glad your enthusiasm of my penning still holds a place for you LOL I always enjoy your reviews
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your free verse contest entry, Bucketlist. The picture is super and a perfect choice for your well-chosen words that describe the flight of the plane well. I could envision this as I read it. Good job and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
I enjoyed your free verse contest entry, Bucketlist. The picture is super and a perfect choice for your well-chosen words that describe the flight of the plane well. I could envision this as I read it. Good job and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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I really appreciate your review. I?m only really beginning to feel more comfortable with free verse. So with your talented record, I am doubly happy you enjoyed reading it.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem about flying in an airplane let us feel like birds high in the air. When the airplane starts descending we realize it is only a manmade bird.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
A very well-written free verse poem about flying in an airplane let us feel like birds high in the air. When the airplane starts descending we realize it is only a manmade bird.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thanks so much for your positive review
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This reminds me of all my plane trips I have had recently and how I hate flying! You make it sound romantic, exciting and full of fun, I wish I felt the same, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
This reminds me of all my plane trips I have had recently and how I hate flying! You make it sound romantic, exciting and full of fun, I wish I felt the same, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you, thats a wonderful comment. I flew to England every summer for eight years, and always preferred terra firm-a.There are too many negatives nowadays to enable relaxation. It can be very stressful.
Hugs, Trisha
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Comment from rspoet
Hello Trisha,
You're written a wonderful free verse poem for the contest
with excellent imagery of the time and space between
as the metal bird rises in the sky.
It is a eerie feeling and strange thought that something that large
can be lifted by wind beneath the wings.
Excellent picture to match your words
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
Hello Trisha,
You're written a wonderful free verse poem for the contest
with excellent imagery of the time and space between
as the metal bird rises in the sky.
It is a eerie feeling and strange thought that something that large
can be lifted by wind beneath the wings.
Excellent picture to match your words
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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I am honored that you read my poetry and enjoyed it, You have so many reviewers who enjoy your talent. I appreciate your complimentary review,
Hugs, Trisha