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Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "St. Louis Chapter 6 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
15 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ha. "Dad" had me confused, but then that's probably because it's a lot of distraction between chapters here, on FS, we forget certain details when following a story, or at least I do.
Well done, Barbara.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Ha. "Dad" had me confused, but then that's probably because it's a lot of distraction between chapters here, on FS, we forget certain details when following a story, or at least I do.
Well done, Barbara.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Oh so true. It would be easier if I could post the who thing at once. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome -- my pleasure!
Comment from SLMorrical
First I want to say the picture adds to this chapter. A dead mouse is sending a message. Logan is now more than ever is happy to be her bodyguard. This is getting interesting. I like a detective story with a love story. This flows well and I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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First I want to say the picture adds to this chapter. A dead mouse is sending a message. Logan is now more than ever is happy to be her bodyguard. This is getting interesting. I like a detective story with a love story. This flows well and I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. I feel a good romance needs to actually have a plot. LOL
Comment from tfawcus
Nice tension being developed in this chapter and an interesting phone call at the end to pique the interest. I like the way you are building McKenzie's character. It's not easy being a woman in a man's world.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Nice tension being developed in this chapter and an interesting phone call at the end to pique the interest. I like the way you are building McKenzie's character. It's not easy being a woman in a man's world.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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No it's not and she tries to over compensate and it only gets her in trouble. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from light
Great chapter, Barbara. I like the pace, a little at a time. Logan is trying to keep his place, but is having a hard time with it. Mac is getting a little more trusting of Logan. Looking forward to next chapter.
Elaine
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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Great chapter, Barbara. I like the pace, a little at a time. Logan is trying to keep his place, but is having a hard time with it. Mac is getting a little more trusting of Logan. Looking forward to next chapter.
Elaine
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
How lovely to have your granddaughter with you, enjoy her while you can. I'm finding it hard to keep up with mine! lol. This was a really great chapter, Barbara, it had everything a good detective story needs, plus, I reckon there might be a bit of a romance starting one day in the future! I want to know who is sending out these awful messages to Mac, and does it have anything to do with Megan's murder? I will have to wait and see. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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How lovely to have your granddaughter with you, enjoy her while you can. I'm finding it hard to keep up with mine! lol. This was a really great chapter, Barbara, it had everything a good detective story needs, plus, I reckon there might be a bit of a romance starting one day in the future! I want to know who is sending out these awful messages to Mac, and does it have anything to do with Megan's murder? I will have to wait and see. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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I know who's doing it and why but I can't tell you. DARN!! Thank you for the kind review.
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LOL!!! That is so mean!!
Comment from Ben Colder
I think I like the way you let the reader see the expressions on the characters face .
Biting his lip. Logan set his jaw. I have never used this expressions before but interesting.
She is being targeted looks like.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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I think I like the way you let the reader see the expressions on the characters face .
Biting his lip. Logan set his jaw. I have never used this expressions before but interesting.
She is being targeted looks like.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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She is being targeted. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
Yum! Dead rat. Why not munch on that for a healthy breakfast treat??? I'm not too sure I would be so hungry after seeing that, to be honest. Yuck!
One small note:
1.) "Is there a safe place she can keep her car(?)
Thanks!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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Barbara,
Yum! Dead rat. Why not munch on that for a healthy breakfast treat??? I'm not too sure I would be so hungry after seeing that, to be honest. Yuck!
One small note:
1.) "Is there a safe place she can keep her car(?)
Thanks!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the catch. I have made the change. I appreciate the review.
Comment from 24chas
Great chapter, Barbara. I'm glad Mac is letting Logan help out with her safety. I'd be scared to death if i were Mac. Whoever is doing it is getting more brazen and is pushing hard. Can't wait for the next chapter. Have fun with your granddaughter!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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Great chapter, Barbara. I'm glad Mac is letting Logan help out with her safety. I'd be scared to death if i were Mac. Whoever is doing it is getting more brazen and is pushing hard. Can't wait for the next chapter. Have fun with your granddaughter!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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I am having a blast with my granddaughter. I've never gotten to spend so much time with her. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tootsie55
A great, creepy chapter again. You still do as good as in all your previous stories. I love your style of course. Thanks again keep up the good work. Good picture you found. Yuck!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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A great, creepy chapter again. You still do as good as in all your previous stories. I love your style of course. Thanks again keep up the good work. Good picture you found. Yuck!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
So. McKenzie receives mail, and it's a dead rat, she's fortunate to have a good adoptive dad in Bill Abbot, but she's getting a bit ticked off with Logan, being very.closely shadowing and caring for her like he does, of course it's more than what appears, he's in love with her. Although the reason for their relationship has almost been forgotten, in the malaise of circumstance, well done Barbara, great episode, blessings , Roy
Typo : Then proceeded (the) down the sidewalk,
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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So. McKenzie receives mail, and it's a dead rat, she's fortunate to have a good adoptive dad in Bill Abbot, but she's getting a bit ticked off with Logan, being very.closely shadowing and caring for her like he does, of course it's more than what appears, he's in love with her. Although the reason for their relationship has almost been forgotten, in the malaise of circumstance, well done Barbara, great episode, blessings , Roy
Typo : Then proceeded (the) down the sidewalk,
Comment Written 02-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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I will get on that wayward 'the'. Thank you for pointing it out.
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Well done
