The Dream
The morning after.....66 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
"The Dream" "The morning after" are great ways to introduce this lovely rhyming romantic poem. Whether it happened in your dream alone, or in reality the night before, the sentiment is still well written and puts me in your place, if only for a fleeting moment. The flow, the rhymes, the choice of words, all are well done. Although I love it all, the third stanza particularly spoke to me. The lines, "my thoughts - they had no sleep;" and "never had I known before that gentle hands could reach so deep" are my favorite lines of this wonderful poem. I love the double meaning of the word "deep" and it resonates with me, from past memories of mine. This is very well written and meaningful as well. Thank you for sharing this moving, touching poem with me.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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"The Dream" "The morning after" are great ways to introduce this lovely rhyming romantic poem. Whether it happened in your dream alone, or in reality the night before, the sentiment is still well written and puts me in your place, if only for a fleeting moment. The flow, the rhymes, the choice of words, all are well done. Although I love it all, the third stanza particularly spoke to me. The lines, "my thoughts - they had no sleep;" and "never had I known before that gentle hands could reach so deep" are my favorite lines of this wonderful poem. I love the double meaning of the word "deep" and it resonates with me, from past memories of mine. This is very well written and meaningful as well. Thank you for sharing this moving, touching poem with me.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much, Jesse! It is absolutely my favorite of all my work so far! I am so happy that it touches you and appreciate your heartfelt comments so much! xoxo
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Hello Diana
You have good reason to be proud of your accomplishment with this work. I am happy you appreciate my review, and I am so glad I read your piece. You are very welcome. Have a nice weekend.
Jesse
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Thank you sincerely! Enjoy your weekend also!
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I will. And, you're welcome.
Jesse
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a poem where the rhyme has been well-used to keep a feeling of tenderness and romance. It reads extremely well, with the words rolling easily off the tongue. Congratulations on a job well-done, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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This is a poem where the rhyme has been well-used to keep a feeling of tenderness and romance. It reads extremely well, with the words rolling easily off the tongue. Congratulations on a job well-done, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you very much! I appreciate that you enjoyed! xoxo
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Diana: great rhymes and visions of your dream. You were
close throughout the night with your love. I like the fire to
my candlelight line. Sweet music to listen to. You paint
memories with your words. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Diana: great rhymes and visions of your dream. You were
close throughout the night with your love. I like the fire to
my candlelight line. Sweet music to listen to. You paint
memories with your words. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for stopping by and reading it! It?s what I wrote many years ago but I think it?s my favorite of everything I?ve ever done! I?m so happy that you enjoyed it! xoxo
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is so poignant. Waking to the remembrance of loving is so special. I am not sure, here, if you remember parts of a dream or if you actually remember the night before, being loved. Any which way your description is lovely and your portrayal is beautifully done.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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This is so poignant. Waking to the remembrance of loving is so special. I am not sure, here, if you remember parts of a dream or if you actually remember the night before, being loved. Any which way your description is lovely and your portrayal is beautifully done.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thanks for stopping to read it! This is one of the reasons I love being a poet because you can take and encounter and really develop the deeper meanings behind those encounters! Appreciate your kind review! xoxo
Comment from Darlene Franklin
what a beautiful poem celebrating the emotional underlining of physical lovemaking. Touching and giving play on deepest emotions. I love the last line, "I still remembered loving you."
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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what a beautiful poem celebrating the emotional underlining of physical lovemaking. Touching and giving play on deepest emotions. I love the last line, "I still remembered loving you."
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thanks so much! This is my favorite work for sure! Appreciate your kind review! xoxo
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You're welcome.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
A positively lovely romantic piece of writing. I remember feeling like this. It is so sublime and it's moments like this that you never want to end. Just now for me, the lessons are different, but Diana you write beautifully and it is pure joy to read or in this case it feels like to drink from your cup of bliss. Well done and good luck.
xoxo debs
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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A positively lovely romantic piece of writing. I remember feeling like this. It is so sublime and it's moments like this that you never want to end. Just now for me, the lessons are different, but Diana you write beautifully and it is pure joy to read or in this case it feels like to drink from your cup of bliss. Well done and good luck.
xoxo debs
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much! This is one I wrote many years ago and was inspired by someone who I loved deeply but the timing wasn?t right for us back then. We kept in touch now and then over the years and thankfully we reconnected through emails and a phone call a few months before he passed a few years ago. He had never seen any of these that he inspired before then but I was able to finally share them with him. I?ve loved others, but this person really touched me at my core. Thank you for your kind words! xoxo
Comment from Ogden
I liked everything except the surprise ending. Not the melancholy of the outcome, itself, but, the experience supposedly being a dream, seems to me to be contradicted (by thoughts having no sleep). ??
The imagery, and importantly for the contest, the rhyming, are excellent.
Don
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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I liked everything except the surprise ending. Not the melancholy of the outcome, itself, but, the experience supposedly being a dream, seems to me to be contradicted (by thoughts having no sleep). ??
The imagery, and importantly for the contest, the rhyming, are excellent.
Don
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Well it truly wasn?t a dream, it?s just that since the person had to go and I had to fall asleep it was a very emotional morning waking up and remembering our night together! Really appreciate that you enjoyed it and thank you so much for leaving me feedback! xoxo
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You're very welcome, Diana.
(Are you going to change the title to
"It Wasn't Truly a Dream") ? :o)
Don
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Haha!!!
Comment from lyenochka
Marvelous overall presentation. And your poem is touching on many levels from the gentle meter and rhyme and the sense of longing of a deep love that is gone. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Marvelous overall presentation. And your poem is touching on many levels from the gentle meter and rhyme and the sense of longing of a deep love that is gone. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Appreciate your input! I think this is my favorite work! xoxo
Comment from sunnilicious
Wish and wait for dreams to come true. The unconsciousness brings up the times we've lost... And we waste the mornings to reflect. That was a refreshing dreamy romantic poem. Well thought out. Clear and creative visual imagery created. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice work.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Wish and wait for dreams to come true. The unconsciousness brings up the times we've lost... And we waste the mornings to reflect. That was a refreshing dreamy romantic poem. Well thought out. Clear and creative visual imagery created. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice work.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much! I sincerely appreciate that you stop to read and that you offered such awesome feedback on it! xoxo
Comment from Dihalia
I liked your poem. I liked the rhymes. I liked how you described simply the emotions of love. Thanks for the video. It really emphasized your writing.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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I liked your poem. I liked the rhymes. I liked how you described simply the emotions of love. Thanks for the video. It really emphasized your writing.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for stopping to read it! I love you honey because he just has a way of expressing emotions that are so hard to put into words! Appreciate that you enjoyed it! xoxo
