Damsel Spring
a sonnet41 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This is lovely. You have captured the spirit of Spring in a lovely young lass. I can picture in my mind the beauty of spring as you describe it. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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This is lovely. You have captured the spirit of Spring in a lovely young lass. I can picture in my mind the beauty of spring as you describe it. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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I am so pleased you could envision Spring as i described her. Many thanks for your very kind praise. Rod
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sonnet about the damsel that brings us Spring is always welcome when old man Winter is done with his winds and colds and leaves the scene.
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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A very well-written sonnet about the damsel that brings us Spring is always welcome when old man Winter is done with his winds and colds and leaves the scene.
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Yes, indeed. Spring has finally arrived and I am hoping she will linger. Thank you for sharing my sonnet, Sandra. Rod
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a lovely poem in its tribute to Spring - since the form is not one I am comfortable in assessing, I offer my critique as to the beauty of the verse, its even rhyme and stunning presentation. I wish the writer the best with this contest entry...
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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In my opinion, a lovely poem in its tribute to Spring - since the form is not one I am comfortable in assessing, I offer my critique as to the beauty of the verse, its even rhyme and stunning presentation. I wish the writer the best with this contest entry...
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank you very much for sharing DAMSEL SPRING, and for your very kind praise. Rod
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You are very welcome indeed, Rod - a simply beautiful poem...Eve
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Rod, this is a lovely sonnet. Perfect iambic pentameter and good abab rhyme. Good turn in the third stanza and I particularly like your final couplet. Such lovely content in this contest piece. Good luck - warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Hi Rod, this is a lovely sonnet. Perfect iambic pentameter and good abab rhyme. Good turn in the third stanza and I particularly like your final couplet. Such lovely content in this contest piece. Good luck - warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank you very much for sharing DAMSEL SPRING, Dorothy. I am thrilled you enjoyed meeting her. Rod
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent sonnet displaying great creativity and choice of wording in portraying spring as a woman with a certain personality. Thanks for sharing your unique writing! No way to suggest improving it.
Bill
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Excellent sonnet displaying great creativity and choice of wording in portraying spring as a woman with a certain personality. Thanks for sharing your unique writing! No way to suggest improving it.
Bill
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank you so much, Bill, for the high praise of DAMSEL SPRING and that wonderful galaxy of tears. She certainly does have a capricious nature this month around here. Rod
Comment from Cybertron1986
A vibrant description of a character that portrays a mysterious beauty of both life and somewhat fantasy. I can see the picture coming to life with each of her footsteps as you described. Beautifully expressed and presented.
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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A vibrant description of a character that portrays a mysterious beauty of both life and somewhat fantasy. I can see the picture coming to life with each of her footsteps as you described. Beautifully expressed and presented.
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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I am so pleased I could bring Damsel Spring to life for you. Many thanks for sharing and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Michele Harber
You do an excellent job, through metaphor and description, of painting vivid images, and the picture you chose fully fits Spring as you've described her. I particularly enjoyed that your poem touched on various senses, your comparison between Spring and Old Man Winter, and your simile comparing Spring to "a sea-bound sailor." Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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You do an excellent job, through metaphor and description, of painting vivid images, and the picture you chose fully fits Spring as you've described her. I particularly enjoyed that your poem touched on various senses, your comparison between Spring and Old Man Winter, and your simile comparing Spring to "a sea-bound sailor." Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank you so much, Michele, for your very kind praise of Damsel Spring. She was fun to personify. Rod
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It showed!
Comment from Gail Denham
Nicely done. And so true. We had a couple 80s temp - then rain - and it's promised for a week. Oh well. we prob. need it. For some reason, "old man winter was a surly guest" this year. Cold every night - piles of snow - had to get roof raked twice. Not global warming that's for sure.
Good job.
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Nicely done. And so true. We had a couple 80s temp - then rain - and it's promised for a week. Oh well. we prob. need it. For some reason, "old man winter was a surly guest" this year. Cold every night - piles of snow - had to get roof raked twice. Not global warming that's for sure.
Good job.
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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And I thought we had a bad winter. Thank you for sharing DAMSEL SPRING, Gail, and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! This is such a beautiful and lyrical sonnet! I loved the personification of Spring as a capricious young maiden. She certainly is unpredictable - warm and sunny on moment and cold and rainy the next. I'm hoping you'll do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Wow! This is such a beautiful and lyrical sonnet! I loved the personification of Spring as a capricious young maiden. She certainly is unpredictable - warm and sunny on moment and cold and rainy the next. I'm hoping you'll do well in the contest!
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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I am delighted you like how I personified Spring, lyenochka. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore the sentiments in your sonnet Rod and I drifted into the wonderful spring you brought to my eyes. Line seven is not in meter, would suggest the following:
"A childlike laugh, delightedly she claps"
Love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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I adore the sentiments in your sonnet Rod and I drifted into the wonderful spring you brought to my eyes. Line seven is not in meter, would suggest the following:
"A childlike laugh, delightedly she claps"
Love Dolly x
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Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank you so much for sharing my sonnet, Dolly. I am delighted you enjoyed it and appreciate your critique. Rod
