Your Warm Stethoscope
10-word poem (also 5-7-5)14 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good entry for the 10 word poem contest.
I enjoyed the play on words here which utilizes the restriction of the word count by getting the reader to think beyond. A nice little cheeky end line too. Well done and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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This is a good entry for the 10 word poem contest.
I enjoyed the play on words here which utilizes the restriction of the word count by getting the reader to think beyond. A nice little cheeky end line too. Well done and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thanks for your review. I like that you call it cheeky... those innocent games we played in younger days.
Comment from Bill Schott
This ten-word poem, Your Warm Stethoscope, has the required word count and assumes that the children's game has advanced as well as the doctor / patient relation.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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This ten-word poem, Your Warm Stethoscope, has the required word count and assumes that the children's game has advanced as well as the doctor / patient relation.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Aah, the innocence of those childhood games, now perverted to inappropriate touching and court cases.
Comment from Chip Kuzborski
I like this sexy, playful romp of a poem that says grown ups should never stop playing games, especially ones that tickle one's fancy! I wrote a "tickle" poem this weekend as well. Must be springtime springing. Congrats on placing, fun entry, LisaMay!
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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I like this sexy, playful romp of a poem that says grown ups should never stop playing games, especially ones that tickle one's fancy! I wrote a "tickle" poem this weekend as well. Must be springtime springing. Congrats on placing, fun entry, LisaMay!
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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I reviewed your tickle poem... I liked it, and your ode not taken too. We are heading into autumn down here, getting colder.
Thanks for your good wishes.
Comment from LG Wolfe
HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!
Ticking your fancy indeed.
Not much to say than you've brought me a good giggle tonight.
Hope you won or will win this competition. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!
Ticking your fancy indeed.
Not much to say than you've brought me a good giggle tonight.
Hope you won or will win this competition. Well done.
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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It's lagging behind at the moment... being beaten by better offerings.
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from DragonSkulls
Haha. Great little write for this contest, author. Plus, made it a -5-7-5 on top of it. That's worthy of a vote in by book. Have a great rest of your weekend. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Haha. Great little write for this contest, author. Plus, made it a -5-7-5 on top of it. That's worthy of a vote in by book. Have a great rest of your weekend. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Thanks. Looks like mine will be well down in the voting.
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Well, it's one up higher now. You never know how these people will vote sometimes.
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As we learn to our disappointment sometimes. Like you with only 12 reviews for big bucks.
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Lol. Yeah, like I'd ever really waste enough money to try something like that. I don't need their reviews that much. Haha. Join one contest, move onto the next. That's my theory. Sometimes it's disappointing a,d sometimes, I expect it. Haha
Comment from Lance S. Loria
If it tickles your fancy then I wonder where the stethoscope is being placed. LoL. Cute poem. Good ten word count. No edits or adjustments necessary.
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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If it tickles your fancy then I wonder where the stethoscope is being placed. LoL. Cute poem. Good ten word count. No edits or adjustments necessary.
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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mmmmm, not telling!! Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
This opens up all kinds of thoughts within my head (LOL). You have crafted a very imaginative and fun 10 word poem. Your choices of font color/style and color scheme were excellent. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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This opens up all kinds of thoughts within my head (LOL). You have crafted a very imaginative and fun 10 word poem. Your choices of font color/style and color scheme were excellent. Best wishes!
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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You have a 'naughty thought' mind! The innocent fun of kids playing doctors and nurses is a childhood memory. These days there'd be court cases and counselling.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Professionals and experts can use their tools effectively but at ease, others may find the tools funny; well said, well done. Write to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Professionals and experts can use their tools effectively but at ease, others may find the tools funny; well said, well done. Write to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Thanks for reviewing. We played as kids, inventing doctor and nurses scenarios.
Comment from victor 66
Isn't it true, that all young children go through this rite of passage? I just remember so many, many years ago... playing doctor with the girl next door. She was older than me and there were certain rules. 1. I could check her heart beat, but it had to be on her shoulder. 2. No removal of clothing. 3. If her mother appeared, I was to run like hell, because her mother had a tendency to be mean. Those were very innocent, pleasant memories that your 10 word poem brought to mind. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Isn't it true, that all young children go through this rite of passage? I just remember so many, many years ago... playing doctor with the girl next door. She was older than me and there were certain rules. 1. I could check her heart beat, but it had to be on her shoulder. 2. No removal of clothing. 3. If her mother appeared, I was to run like hell, because her mother had a tendency to be mean. Those were very innocent, pleasant memories that your 10 word poem brought to mind. Best wishes.
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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I liked your recollections of you and the girl next door. Sensible rules for self-preservation. When I played with the boy next door, who was older than me, I broke a finger wrestling him off me. He was definitely overdoing his bedside manner, not so innocent.
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Well, it's too bad that when you were wrestling the boy next-door that he wasn't the one who got the broken finger. I'm sure that would've made some impression. And it's not just the idea but the young man should have understood the word "no". What it is, is a lack of respect for someone who should've known that you were someone special. I hope things went better in your later relationships. Take care.
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Thanks for your lovely response. In my life I went from broken finger to a succession of broken hearts.
Comment from susand3022
Dear Author, I adore this 10-word 5-7-5 poem! I think it's just darling! It reminds me of when I was little and we had little doctor kids with all the bits and bobs. Well, now I have a real stethoscope... I can guarantee that it's not warm! LOL
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Dear Author, I adore this 10-word 5-7-5 poem! I think it's just darling! It reminds me of when I was little and we had little doctor kids with all the bits and bobs. Well, now I have a real stethoscope... I can guarantee that it's not warm! LOL
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Oooooh the curse of the cold stethoscope!
Thanks for your nostalgic review...back in innocent times.
