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Comment from Patty Palmer
The poem makes one think about how visions the lord is there for forgiveness no matter who you are. No one is exempt from things not going as they hoped or planned.
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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The poem makes one think about how visions the lord is there for forgiveness no matter who you are. No one is exempt from things not going as they hoped or planned.
Comment Written 21-May-2019
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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God Bless you and Thank You for your time to read and review this poem offering. I Greatly Appreciate your insight and input.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An unusual acrostic and there was one line that could not make sense of: 'Only judgements are always never free?' Do you mean: "only judgements are never free?' I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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An unusual acrostic and there was one line that could not make sense of: 'Only judgements are always never free?' Do you mean: "only judgements are never free?' I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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It's meant to emphasize God is truely the Only one who can Judge us and we tend to forget that. Blessings for your Time and Review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A unique offering for the acrostic contest -- VISIONS is certainly a great topic! ;) ;) I would suggest, perhaps aligning your font on the left so that the reader can easily see your 'acrostic spelling' ... to have it so well noticed is part of the wonder...but your centering does not allow the eye to 'repeat' the word in its vision each time you start a new line. Also, I think the capitalization throughout is very distracting and breaks up any rhythm that could have been found in your words because the reader is focused on the reasons for the capitalization rather than what you are saying with the words.... I think the fact that you have written this in first person is really cool and it gives the testimony here all that much more weight - great job! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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A unique offering for the acrostic contest -- VISIONS is certainly a great topic! ;) ;) I would suggest, perhaps aligning your font on the left so that the reader can easily see your 'acrostic spelling' ... to have it so well noticed is part of the wonder...but your centering does not allow the eye to 'repeat' the word in its vision each time you start a new line. Also, I think the capitalization throughout is very distracting and breaks up any rhythm that could have been found in your words because the reader is focused on the reasons for the capitalization rather than what you are saying with the words.... I think the fact that you have written this in first person is really cool and it gives the testimony here all that much more weight - great job! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you for the Suggestions and Review,
I Welcome, Consider, and Appreciate all suggestions and comments. I placed the first letter in VISIONS in bold as a Highlight, the offset is meant to create separation of emphasized non-capitalized words within the message. Blessings to you for your review and Time.
