The French Letter
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great chapter Tony. The scene opening scene as they fed each other the oysters was very sensual, written really well, great descriptions, felt like I was a peeping Tom for a moment.LOL Really well done with this one,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Great chapter Tony. The scene opening scene as they fed each other the oysters was very sensual, written really well, great descriptions, felt like I was a peeping Tom for a moment.LOL Really well done with this one,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Many thanks for your review, Valda, and for the sixth star. Much appreciated. Glad you were entertained by this chapter. All the best, Tony.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is an interesting chapter, Tony. You did a good job detailing it. I like the conversation between Helen and Charles. Helen seems to know more than she lets on. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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This is an interesting chapter, Tony. You did a good job detailing it. I like the conversation between Helen and Charles. Helen seems to know more than she lets on. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Many thanks for your review, Jan. Much appreciated. Glad you were entertained by this chapter. All the best, Tony.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Tony, this is a wonderful chapter. I've been quite busy the last few days, so I nearly missed it. I'm sure glad I didn't. The oyster scene between Charles and Helen is superbly written. Very sensual. I still have a funny feeling when it comes to Helen. But we shall see. I might be wrong. Now onto the next chapter. All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Hi Tony, this is a wonderful chapter. I've been quite busy the last few days, so I nearly missed it. I'm sure glad I didn't. The oyster scene between Charles and Helen is superbly written. Very sensual. I still have a funny feeling when it comes to Helen. But we shall see. I might be wrong. Now onto the next chapter. All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Many thanks for your review, Ulla. Much appreciated. Glad you were entertained by this chapter. All the best, Tony.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
I always enjoy the scenes with Helen and Charles and these don't disappoint.
The suggestive scene with the oyster is top notch, since the rest of the novel follows this style, it's best to continue it.
I see you've altered a more torrid scene since my first reading. Now a dream-like sequence; invulnerability or the exact opposite?
I like this better, but it lacks a bit of the panache of the oyster scene.
Interesting tell all paragraph, I told her about M16...
The truth will set you free, or put you in imminent danger,
we shall see which comes to be.
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Hello Tony,
I always enjoy the scenes with Helen and Charles and these don't disappoint.
The suggestive scene with the oyster is top notch, since the rest of the novel follows this style, it's best to continue it.
I see you've altered a more torrid scene since my first reading. Now a dream-like sequence; invulnerability or the exact opposite?
I like this better, but it lacks a bit of the panache of the oyster scene.
Interesting tell all paragraph, I told her about M16...
The truth will set you free, or put you in imminent danger,
we shall see which comes to be.
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Glad you?re still being entertained by Charles and Helen. It?s good fun writing their parts. Charles?s honesty might be a double edged affair. We shall see.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Another good chapter, Tony, that shows
a special bond between Charles and Helen.
-It doesn't have any resemblance to the previous
negative feelings that may have
resulted because of Jeanne.
-You use effective imagery to show us
even the small details, like
sharing the oysters in the beginning.
-You include a bit of levity when
Charles encounters Madame Bisset.
-You end the chapter well with the
conversation between Helen
and Charles about Kayla.
-Each was surprised that the
other knew so many details.
-You end the chapter well by continuing
to show the bond between Helen and Charles.
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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-Another good chapter, Tony, that shows
a special bond between Charles and Helen.
-It doesn't have any resemblance to the previous
negative feelings that may have
resulted because of Jeanne.
-You use effective imagery to show us
even the small details, like
sharing the oysters in the beginning.
-You include a bit of levity when
Charles encounters Madame Bisset.
-You end the chapter well with the
conversation between Helen
and Charles about Kayla.
-Each was surprised that the
other knew so many details.
-You end the chapter well by continuing
to show the bond between Helen and Charles.
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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The relationship between Charles and Helen seems to be back on an even keel, but appearances can sometimes be deceptive. There are still issues to be resolved between them that may take more than a night of passion to resolve.
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Thanks for sharing, Tony. I am sure they have a lot to work out.
Comment from victortouche
Jesus H. Mumble
This is...so outstanding,
I can hardly believe it.
"a lascivious moment, to relish its
briny taste, before biting into the
soft flesh..."
I think I was panting at the end of that.
I am completely serious about the following
statements. I don't believe I have EVER
read better writing. Period. I have read writing
I have enjoyed similarly.
This piece is about way too much worldly
knowledge and savoire faire.
You have learned things about life and women
I seldom see in males.
Zum gesundheit.
Doug
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Jesus H. Mumble
This is...so outstanding,
I can hardly believe it.
"a lascivious moment, to relish its
briny taste, before biting into the
soft flesh..."
I think I was panting at the end of that.
I am completely serious about the following
statements. I don't believe I have EVER
read better writing. Period. I have read writing
I have enjoyed similarly.
This piece is about way too much worldly
knowledge and savoire faire.
You have learned things about life and women
I seldom see in males.
Zum gesundheit.
Doug
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Very many thanks for this most affirming review, Doug, and for your award of six stars. Both much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Tony,
I thoroughly enjoyable addition to the story here as Charles comes clean with Helen. I wonder if she is as totally forthcoming as he is though...
Anyway, a lot of playfulness in this which read very nicely indeed.
G
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Hi Tony,
I thoroughly enjoyable addition to the story here as Charles comes clean with Helen. I wonder if she is as totally forthcoming as he is though...
Anyway, a lot of playfulness in this which read very nicely indeed.
G
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Thanks,G. Appreciate the sixer. This one went through several rewrites. Glad you enjoyed it. Tony.
Comment from Gloria ....
A wonderfully romantic chapter, Tony. The thought of the snake shedding skin shows just the right amount of proper thought rather than only oysters and champagne.
I think you handled the love scene most adeptly with the intro of spent shells strewn mingling in with the behind the door.
Very tastefully written with all the proper buttons touched ever so lightly an wrapped up in delicious croissants.
Enjoyed greatly.
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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A wonderfully romantic chapter, Tony. The thought of the snake shedding skin shows just the right amount of proper thought rather than only oysters and champagne.
I think you handled the love scene most adeptly with the intro of spent shells strewn mingling in with the behind the door.
Very tastefully written with all the proper buttons touched ever so lightly an wrapped up in delicious croissants.
Enjoyed greatly.
Gloria
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Lovely review, Gloria. I substantially rewrote parts of this chapter this morning, changing the emphasis from the physical to the emotional. You?re the first person to have reviewed the revised version. I?m thrilled to hear that it worked well for you. Most affirming. The sixth star added extra sparkle! All the best, Tony.
Comment from Treischel
The shirt and snake skin analogy was delightful. You make oyster eating very seductive.An excitingly racy chapter.
I'd be a bit shook up by that fierce death threat.
Nice touch meeting Madame Bisset, showing a bashful blush.
A nice casual coffee conversation. A pleasant read and closure.
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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The shirt and snake skin analogy was delightful. You make oyster eating very seductive.An excitingly racy chapter.
I'd be a bit shook up by that fierce death threat.
Nice touch meeting Madame Bisset, showing a bashful blush.
A nice casual coffee conversation. A pleasant read and closure.
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Many thanks for reviewing this chapter, Tom. I made a few changes to it this morning, shifting the emphasis more on the emotional and less on the physical. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from JudyE
Another great write and again I'm out of sixes. I honestly don't believe I use six before it shows I have none but I guess I must do.
Two very small points:
lingering in a lipstick stained glass. - lipstick stained should be hyphenated
Several hours later she stirred restlessly and threw a negligent arm out, rousing me from my sleep - I'm not an expert on commas but I think there should be one after 'later'.
Cheers. Judy
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Another great write and again I'm out of sixes. I honestly don't believe I use six before it shows I have none but I guess I must do.
Two very small points:
lingering in a lipstick stained glass. - lipstick stained should be hyphenated
Several hours later she stirred restlessly and threw a negligent arm out, rousing me from my sleep - I'm not an expert on commas but I think there should be one after 'later'.
Cheers. Judy
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Many thanks for reviewing this chapter, Judy, and for picking up the spags. I made a few changes to it this morning, shifting the emphasis more on the emotional and less on the physical. Best wishes, Tony.
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I reread this and pick up a couple of points:
I held it there for a lascivious moment to relish the briny taste before biting into the soft flesh to release its sweet, metallic flavour. - 'to relish' then 'to release' - maybe make the latter 'releasing'
As soon as I swallowed, she picked up another oyster between her fingers. - maybe delete 'oyster'?
Slurping it into her mouth, she bit fiercely into the adductor muscle - I think it is 'abductor muscle'
A few hours before dawn, Helen stirred restlessly and threw a negligent arm out, - maybe 'threw out a negligent arm'.
Confident in the new depth of our new relationship, - two 'new's here in close proximity.
I think your revision has improved it. Cheers. Judy
