The Longest Day
Low on provisions.40 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Sorry I missed this one. However, it was a finely composed short story that easily lead the reader down a deceptive path. Only to be found craving the Kool-Aid, Oreos and bologna sandwiches at the end. Great read and well done on your place. ~DDx
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Sorry I missed this one. However, it was a finely composed short story that easily lead the reader down a deceptive path. Only to be found craving the Kool-Aid, Oreos and bologna sandwiches at the end. Great read and well done on your place. ~DDx
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thank you, DD. It means so much that you are catching up with me today. I appreciate the excellent review and kind comments of my childhood based story.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
Comment from dragonpoet
This sounds like an army during the Civil War or other early war. Then you see in the end it is just very imaginative children playing hard who need a lunch break.
Well done. Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing.
Joan
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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This sounds like an army during the Civil War or other early war. Then you see in the end it is just very imaginative children playing hard who need a lunch break.
Well done. Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing.
Joan
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thank you dear Joan. I appreciate the excellent review and kind well wishes. It was a lot of fun.
Sending you my best today, as always,
Sal xo
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Any time, Sally.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
Comment from Loren .
If, for nothing else to congratulate you for this submission, but for also the unexpected smile it brought to my face. I think the photo helped lead me on the wrong path of where this article might lead. But I can surely identify with the bravado and sense of urgency of the main character. Loren
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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If, for nothing else to congratulate you for this submission, but for also the unexpected smile it brought to my face. I think the photo helped lead me on the wrong path of where this article might lead. But I can surely identify with the bravado and sense of urgency of the main character. Loren
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to review my contest entry, Loren. I am so pleased you enjoyed it.
All my best to you and yours,
Sally :+)
Comment from moongirlwriter
Sisters are the BEST! To the rescue! Love this fun read, it made me laugh. We played war in the garage (piled high with stuff and a great place to hide) with rubber bands and slingshots. The best to you with this piece.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Sisters are the BEST! To the rescue! Love this fun read, it made me laugh. We played war in the garage (piled high with stuff and a great place to hide) with rubber bands and slingshots. The best to you with this piece.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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I am so sorry for the long delay in my response, dear moon girl writer. I so appreciate you and the excellent review of my contest entry.
Sending you my nest from the shore,
Sally xo
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Comment from Diana L Crawford
So cute! It brings back memories of when I used to play army with my brother and his friends too! I never was one to necessarily play with the girls and play dolls and it was way more fun with the boys! It's sad to know that a lot of children aren't encouraged to go out and play wonderful make-believe games like that and are stuck on video games and iPads and miss out on that wonderful fun and exercise! Congrats on contest! xo
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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So cute! It brings back memories of when I used to play army with my brother and his friends too! I never was one to necessarily play with the girls and play dolls and it was way more fun with the boys! It's sad to know that a lot of children aren't encouraged to go out and play wonderful make-believe games like that and are stuck on video games and iPads and miss out on that wonderful fun and exercise! Congrats on contest! xo
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Dear Diana, it was so good of you to pull up my contest entry and review it today. I am so glad you enjoyed it. I love Flash Fiction Contests. These short pieces are hard to execute, but a lot of fun.
All my best,
Sal xo
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I?m very sure they are but you have quite a way with words and a beautiful way of expressing an idea!
Comment from Artasylum
Sally what a great little ditty you have here I love your sweet point of view and am very happy she found provisions and love the good ending to your story... yours, di
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Sally what a great little ditty you have here I love your sweet point of view and am very happy she found provisions and love the good ending to your story... yours, di
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you, di. It was so good of you to check out my contest entry and leave such kind comments. I appreciate it very much.
Sending my best to you as always,
Sally xo
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xo back Sally!
Comment from A. Willow Bends
O.K., I thought I was in a real war zone here. Ah! The good ole days. Do children even go out and play anymore? This is a WHOLE story in such short parameters. Fantastic! Love it!
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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O.K., I thought I was in a real war zone here. Ah! The good ole days. Do children even go out and play anymore? This is a WHOLE story in such short parameters. Fantastic! Love it!
Wendy
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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It was a real war zone in the backyard! My brothers and boys cousins were really going at it with water balloons. Thanks so much for the excellent review and insightful comments. I?m always glad when I can say...I gotcha!
Always my best, dear Wendy,
Sal xo
Comment from Kathleen Washnis
This is a great flash fiction story! You are so gifted in writing! Love the ending with the Kool-aid, Oreo cookies and bologna sandwiches! You fooled me till the end!
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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This is a great flash fiction story! You are so gifted in writing! Love the ending with the Kool-aid, Oreo cookies and bologna sandwiches! You fooled me till the end!
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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My attempt to lead you on to the very end worked! So glad you like. I enjoyed this flash fiction. Easy on my eyesight, too. Thank you for the excellent review, dear Kathleen.
Always my best,
Sal xo
Comment from Ulla
Hahahaha, Sally, yeah, that serves you right. But this time it was your sister who came to the rescue! You had me fooled there, thinking we were talking about real war, and then it turns out to be war games. Great stuff. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Hahahaha, Sally, yeah, that serves you right. But this time it was your sister who came to the rescue! You had me fooled there, thinking we were talking about real war, and then it turns out to be war games. Great stuff. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you, Ulla dear. I like these little short pieces are so much fun for me. I love to lead my readers on a little bit. So glad you enjoyed it.
Always my best to you and yours,
Sally xo
Comment from djeckert
Well done, As I read , I wondered where your story was headed. ( being that it was under the title if humoe fiction) I wasnt at all expecting your left turn there. Nice .Blessings to you
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Well done, As I read , I wondered where your story was headed. ( being that it was under the title if humoe fiction) I wasnt at all expecting your left turn there. Nice .Blessings to you
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Thanks you, D. I?m pleased it gotcha. It?s hard to fool you. Thanks for stopping by for a little fun.
All my best,
Sal ;+)
