Carpe Diem Disaster
A marked man inspects his future.18 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word flash fiction story, Carpe Diem Disaster, has the correct word count and busts me up with ta classic tattoo goof. Crap Die! Seize the Day!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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This one-hundred-word flash fiction story, Carpe Diem Disaster, has the correct word count and busts me up with ta classic tattoo goof. Crap Die! Seize the Day!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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That tattoo parla should be shut down before there are other errors! Other reviewers have suggested remedial additions such as Crap Diet, which is another story in itself.
Thanks for reviewing this Bill. cheers, LM
Comment from PoemsOfDD
LisaMay, you got a chuckle out of me for this amusing 100 word flash fiction. Very clever. I enjoyed the suspense of wanting to know how it ends... and then I was left entertained. Thank you and good luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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LisaMay, you got a chuckle out of me for this amusing 100 word flash fiction. Very clever. I enjoyed the suspense of wanting to know how it ends... and then I was left entertained. Thank you and good luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 20-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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Thanks for reviewing this DD. I enjoyed writing it but ended up feeling sorry for the yacht, never going anywhere. The poem got an equal 2nd place in the contest.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, at least Bill was close...sorta.
He could'a tatted CARP DIET on the guy's arm and everyone would have thought it was some sort of obscure fishing reference. That would come with a lotta questions, and who needs that?
Poor guy. He'll be spending lots of money now on Revlon cover up foundation.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Well, at least Bill was close...sorta.
He could'a tatted CARP DIET on the guy's arm and everyone would have thought it was some sort of obscure fishing reference. That would come with a lotta questions, and who needs that?
Poor guy. He'll be spending lots of money now on Revlon cover up foundation.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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What a coincidence you mention about Carp... I was toying with that as an outcome too, but then I decided to give the poor chap a crap life rather than a fishy one. (Actually, Bill has shares in Revlon; he puts a lot of business their way.)
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That figures, lol.
Comment from judester
You have captured a glimpse of someone with wind no longer in their sails. Using the word 'dejectedly, was just perfect and the reader slumps along with him at the inevitable typo. Bravo, judester
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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You have captured a glimpse of someone with wind no longer in their sails. Using the word 'dejectedly, was just perfect and the reader slumps along with him at the inevitable typo. Bravo, judester
Comment Written 18-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much for this great response to my poem. I thought for a while what was the best word to use and I'm pleased you agree that 'dejectedly' catches the slump moment.
Comment from Stephen Force
You have captured the essence of a day in a losers life. Or more importantly you have captured the essence of what makes this marked man a loser. and done it in one hundred words. great job!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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You have captured the essence of a day in a losers life. Or more importantly you have captured the essence of what makes this marked man a loser. and done it in one hundred words. great job!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Yes, the guy shouldn't have got up that day. But then, if he'd stayed home, the roof might have collapsed on him.
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Mia Twysted
Tattoo gone bad. This is a good piece that shows what someone goes through when deciding to get that first tattoo. Then to have it go bad. I hope they know a good cover up artist.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Tattoo gone bad. This is a good piece that shows what someone goes through when deciding to get that first tattoo. Then to have it go bad. I hope they know a good cover up artist.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Wouldn't it be awful! Not something I would ever chance. Thanks for your review Mia.
Comment from LIJ Red
In USN service school, tattoos were the rage in 1965. My cube neighbor came in with a wall-eyed hula girl and his pal with a red leg the size of a ham, oozing pus, so I stayed blank...excellent flash fiction...
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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In USN service school, tattoos were the rage in 1965. My cube neighbor came in with a wall-eyed hula girl and his pal with a red leg the size of a ham, oozing pus, so I stayed blank...excellent flash fiction...
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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What spectacularly gross images! very off-putting and no wonder you remained un-inked. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Imagine a tattooist who can't spell! With disastrous results for all his customers, this made me smile and once it's permanent, nothing can change it! He he he, a fun write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Imagine a tattooist who can't spell! With disastrous results for all his customers, this made me smile and once it's permanent, nothing can change it! He he he, a fun write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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I am glad it wasn't me, but then, it would never be me because i abhor tattoos. Thanks for seeing the fun in this poem.
Comment from JudyE
Haha. I never did like tattoos. I wonder what your poor character will do now? The sudden decision to get up and do something is portrayed well by the language in the beginning. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Haha. I never did like tattoos. I wonder what your poor character will do now? The sudden decision to get up and do something is portrayed well by the language in the beginning. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Even more reason not to like them. I can't stand them either. I guess he'll be wearing long sleeves from now on, or else, as another reviewer suggested, he could get an additional couple of letters to Crappy Diet or Scrap Diet.
Comment from WryWriter
LOL! Your poem's "I" should have listened to his/her Deja vu. I found this work most amusing. I count 100 words as per writing prompt. Good job!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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LOL! Your poem's "I" should have listened to his/her Deja vu. I found this work most amusing. I count 100 words as per writing prompt. Good job!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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I am pleased this poem appealed to you. Thanks so much for reviewing it.
