Renaissance of Enchantment
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Comment from Heather Knight
I love this sentence: the usual Kato enthusiasm evident in all of his actions.
This comment about the beds is also very funny: "But he cannot drive yet, and these beds will only encourage strange dreams."
The names you use are very interesting and original.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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I love this sentence: the usual Kato enthusiasm evident in all of his actions.
This comment about the beds is also very funny: "But he cannot drive yet, and these beds will only encourage strange dreams."
The names you use are very interesting and original.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your review, Maria -- have a wonderful day! :)
Comment from susand3022
Did you do this for me??? I wasn't expecting to see your name up on my message board my Lovely Busy Lady of the South with the Grand Family... wow... your title just grew exponentially! LOL I love this story and I love you for putting up a chapter for me!!! Now, get back to your busy life young lady! I'll see you when I see you... then you can put up a chapter every other day! :) :) :)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Did you do this for me??? I wasn't expecting to see your name up on my message board my Lovely Busy Lady of the South with the Grand Family... wow... your title just grew exponentially! LOL I love this story and I love you for putting up a chapter for me!!! Now, get back to your busy life young lady! I'll see you when I see you... then you can put up a chapter every other day! :) :) :)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Nah -- you have no idea how much I miss my writing... I might have to start getting 'choosy' on my reviews or limit my time or something (at least til summer) because I never want any of this to become a 'chore'... but with life getting crowded, I'm starting to feel like that sometimes... The mad tornado of 'end of year' begins this coming weekend when we travel to watch my middles son's thesis defense ... then the youngest's grad banquet plus his first art show of the year ... then the oldest's law school grad ... then we gotta 'move' the older ones.... UGH!! CRAZINESS!! :) :) I've got the one part of the next chapter that I will post either today or tomorrow after work... then it might be IT til the end of May! :( :( Little things here and keeping in touch with you and few others, but.... like I said, lurking in the shadows.. :) :) LOL! :) Take care up there, Beautiful Friend! :) Yvette :)
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Will do, and like I said... good luck with such an itinerary!!! Have a little fun and don't forget to take lots of pictures! You know there will be summer poetry about it all! :)
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, the earlier characters will join with these characters soon. I like the sense of excitement and anticipation that Kato has with Addy coming to live with them.
I don't know if these characters were always there or not:
"Image of �???�??�?�¢??Delightful Southern House Plans�???�??�?�¢?? "
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Ah, the earlier characters will join with these characters soon. I like the sense of excitement and anticipation that Kato has with Addy coming to live with them.
I don't know if these characters were always there or not:
"Image of �???�??�?�¢??Delightful Southern House Plans�???�??�?�¢?? "
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Thanx for stopping by on this one, Helen -- I did go in and remove that graffiti -- you know, that little gnome adds more EVERY TIME you open an edit and re-save! :) :) So glad you caught that before it even got more out of control!! :) :) Take care and have a great remainder of the week! :) Yvette
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Hi Yvette, Like in GOT (Game of Thrones) "Winter is coming" their catchphrase you could steal it and make it the ominous "Summer is coming" LOL Okay MRW and CQ - you have given me big smiles and laughs just before bed - it was the perfect size chapter before I am heading off to la-la land - yes I love my Kato!!! I have adored him (the character has been my favorite) from the very beginning! Okay I will look for the next one, but I have one to post too - so maybe we will get them out around the same time. Let us hope and Beautiful Teacher I know you are swamped! I realize this is going to be one of the busiest times of any of the year ends for you - so if you get it out or if you don't I am not going to bug you because this is going to be a time for you to just take in and enjoy!! So no pressure from me. I really enjoyed this chapter! Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Hi Yvette, Like in GOT (Game of Thrones) "Winter is coming" their catchphrase you could steal it and make it the ominous "Summer is coming" LOL Okay MRW and CQ - you have given me big smiles and laughs just before bed - it was the perfect size chapter before I am heading off to la-la land - yes I love my Kato!!! I have adored him (the character has been my favorite) from the very beginning! Okay I will look for the next one, but I have one to post too - so maybe we will get them out around the same time. Let us hope and Beautiful Teacher I know you are swamped! I realize this is going to be one of the busiest times of any of the year ends for you - so if you get it out or if you don't I am not going to bug you because this is going to be a time for you to just take in and enjoy!! So no pressure from me. I really enjoyed this chapter! Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this short one -- the next one (much longer) may be my last until toward the end of May -- life's about to get insane in my world (see other review) so, Maggie's story will have to be completely developed in my blonde brain and I'll 'spit it all out' come June! :) ;) Take care! :) Yvette
Comment from Sandra Montanino
I can tell you put a lot of thought into telling your story. I'm sorry I wasn't here for the first part. But I can see you are weaving an intricate tale. In one sentence you said, "Peadar seemed to..." In another, you said, "Peadar shut his eyes and became introspective." It seemed that you changed from the story not being in his POV, to the story being in his POV. Anyway, I think you did a great job! Keep it up.
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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I can tell you put a lot of thought into telling your story. I'm sorry I wasn't here for the first part. But I can see you are weaving an intricate tale. In one sentence you said, "Peadar seemed to..." In another, you said, "Peadar shut his eyes and became introspective." It seemed that you changed from the story not being in his POV, to the story being in his POV. Anyway, I think you did a great job! Keep it up.
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Thanx for stopping by for a review on this one, Sandra -- I appreciate your time and input! ;) :) I know I mentioned it in my author notes, but you are welcome to go back and catch up by diving into my portfolio... should be right there toward the beginning! :) :) But, I tell you a secret, when I post the next installment (the first part of chapter 6), I'm gonna add some points to every previous chapter so if you want to take the weekend to do your 'catch up' you'll be able to get some real reviewing points for EVERY ONE of the 'back writes'. ;) :) ;) Thanx again for dropping by and have a great week ahead! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Debbie Pope
Wow! Look at that list of characters, Yvette. I anticipate all of them entering back into the story soon. As you say, this should get interesting. Each of your posts, this one in particular, help me to understand the characters a little more. You make them more personable. I must admit that I still get them confused.
It's a great chapter. I saw nothing to correct except in the following paragraph.
Peadar shut his mouth and became introspective for a few seconds. He shook his head and seemed to shrug off their input, but he didn't argue as he began unpacking the bags of supplies and linens. In fact, he did say anything else.
Is there not a word missing from the last sentence? I'm so tired, I'm not even sure.
Hope you are not working too hard at school. Talk to you soon.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Wow! Look at that list of characters, Yvette. I anticipate all of them entering back into the story soon. As you say, this should get interesting. Each of your posts, this one in particular, help me to understand the characters a little more. You make them more personable. I must admit that I still get them confused.
It's a great chapter. I saw nothing to correct except in the following paragraph.
Peadar shut his mouth and became introspective for a few seconds. He shook his head and seemed to shrug off their input, but he didn't argue as he began unpacking the bags of supplies and linens. In fact, he did say anything else.
Is there not a word missing from the last sentence? I'm so tired, I'm not even sure.
Hope you are not working too hard at school. Talk to you soon.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Hey there, MQ -- thank you SO MUCH for those stars, ma'am! :) And thanx for that heads up on the missing "not" in that sentence -- was one of those cases that once its on paper and you (as the author) know what should be on the page, your brain just puts it smoothly in there like it really existed.... when, of course, it doesn't!! :) ;) I think there's always some of those in there! ;) ;)
I know you must be exhausted at this point ... did y'all make the trek to Texas yet? Sorry, usually I'm really good with everyone's schedule but the next few weeks I'm gonna be lucky to keep up with my immediate family's (and I'm thinking this used to be easier when we were younger, wasn't it?! LOL!). I hope your mom is doing well these days, too -- will she be staying home with your husband or is your husband gonna travel with your daughter and you stay home?
You just be sure in all the madness to take care of you because you are the common denominator in all this and, as I tell my students with respect to that 'table' that is the line in a fraction: with nothing in the denominator, the table can't hold up anything!! ;) ;) Take care, MQ, and have a great week! :) Yvette :)
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Thank you for your thoughtful message. I'm actually not going to Texas yet. Taylor leaves with a car full in two days. I leave for Spain in a week. She comes back for graduation and takes a uhaul truck back. We will follow with another truck. I just have to have her packed because she doesn't have time to do it. My brother in law is going to live in our house and take care of Mom. This trip has been planned for a year, and when we agreed to let Mom stay with us, they agreed to watch her for three weeks. So all my writing has been instructions for my brother in law. 20 pages of them. Hopefully I can write on the ship. I can't wait.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Yvette,
This is a delightful chapter you have penned, my friend. I love the ending especially. I am coming in mid-story, so I'm not exactly sure what is happening, but your story is well written.
One question:
""I donnt know much, but I do know they like fun, ya kin?""
Is "donnt" part of this dialect? It is not famiar to me.
Thanls for a fun read my friend.
Jan :-)
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Hi Yvette,
This is a delightful chapter you have penned, my friend. I love the ending especially. I am coming in mid-story, so I'm not exactly sure what is happening, but your story is well written.
One question:
""I donnt know much, but I do know they like fun, ya kin?""
Is "donnt" part of this dialect? It is not famiar to me.
Thanls for a fun read my friend.
Jan :-)
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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LOL! Yeah, that was supposed to be a double 'o' not a double 'n'... thanx for catching that for me, ma'am!! :) ;) Glad you enjoyed this one and thanx for keeping up with Maggie and the crazy gang! :) :) Yvette
