Haiku (rain drop falls)
Haiku Poem - 3rd Place18 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
I like the words to your poem the message was to the point-those were some clever lines my friend.
This is what I call a food for thought Poem.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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I like the words to your poem the message was to the point-those were some clever lines my friend.
This is what I call a food for thought Poem.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Thank you Cookie. I always appreciate your thoughtful comments. Blessings to you :-) ~DD
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It was my pleasure, have a nice day.
Cookie
Comment from Pam (respa)
-The syllable count is good.
-A well written haiku, DD,
with a good topic.
-The imagery is effective
and creates a picture of
the drop making ripples appear.
-You effectively use them as
a symbol of change.
-The satori line is good
and has a good message.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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-The syllable count is good.
-A well written haiku, DD,
with a good topic.
-The imagery is effective
and creates a picture of
the drop making ripples appear.
-You effectively use them as
a symbol of change.
-The satori line is good
and has a good message.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Thank you Pam for taking the time to review my haiku poem. I appreciate your thoughtful and thorough comments. Blessings to you. ~DD
Comment from rspoet
Hello DD,
This is an excellent, interesting haiku and entry for the contest
with good connection in present tense between the first two lines
One never knows where those ripples will go.
A little variation on Basho's frog.
Well done
Best wishes
Robert
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Hello DD,
This is an excellent, interesting haiku and entry for the contest
with good connection in present tense between the first two lines
One never knows where those ripples will go.
A little variation on Basho's frog.
Well done
Best wishes
Robert
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Thank you Robert for taking the time to review my Haiku poem. Basho?s frog is welcome anytime. Have a wonderful weekend. ~DD
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi DD,
This is a lovely poem and a great contest entry. Reading your verse evokes imagery of the image often seen, with ripples expanding outward in water. Thanks for sharing and good luck. Jan :-)
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Hi DD,
This is a lovely poem and a great contest entry. Reading your verse evokes imagery of the image often seen, with ripples expanding outward in water. Thanks for sharing and good luck. Jan :-)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Thank you Jan. I appreciate your comments on my haiku poem. Thanks also for the good luck wishes. Have a wonderful weekend. ~DD
Comment from humpwhistle
There is a splendid, undisputable truth in your haiku.
A single drop creates ever-expanding ripples of change.
I know the rules are prone to change, but I was taught the correct title would be: haiku (one fluid drop) Perhaps I'm out of touch?
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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There is a splendid, undisputable truth in your haiku.
A single drop creates ever-expanding ripples of change.
I know the rules are prone to change, but I was taught the correct title would be: haiku (one fluid drop) Perhaps I'm out of touch?
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Thank you Lee for taking the time to review my haiku poem. I appreciate your comments and observation on the title. No, you are not out of touch. I unfortunately had posted incorrectly waaaay past midnight and have since corrected my error and tweaked the haiku somewhat. Thank you again. ~DD
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This could be about spring or any season as we see a change there is an obvious chain of events, I enjoyed your neat Haiku wrapping it all up in so few word, love, Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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This could be about spring or any season as we see a change there is an obvious chain of events, I enjoyed your neat Haiku wrapping it all up in so few word, love, Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Thank you Dolly. I appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku poem and welcome your comments. Have a blessed weekend. ~DD
Comment from 24chas
This was a good write, DD. I really liked the imagery of it and the deep message under the ripples. The artwork really completed the presentation. Nice job.
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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This was a good write, DD. I really liked the imagery of it and the deep message under the ripples. The artwork really completed the presentation. Nice job.
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Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much 24chas. Your comments are much appreciated. I am pleased it gave a good imagery (as intended) without the artwork. ~DD
Comment from Irish Rain
So true.
What a lovely haiku.
Sort of like the butterfly
wings...they flutter,
and something across the
world is changed.
Beautiful truth!
Blessings...
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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So true.
What a lovely haiku.
Sort of like the butterfly
wings...they flutter,
and something across the
world is changed.
Beautiful truth!
Blessings...
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Thank you Irish Rain. I always appreciate your supportive comments. Blessings to you. ~DD
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Have a great weekend!
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You too : -) ~DDx
