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haiku (rain bounces like coins)

(FanStory haiku contest)

16 total reviews 
Comment from LG Wolfe
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Congratulations on your placement in the contest. This was a worthy entry and I'm pleased you did well. You've made an economic statement along with an incredibly visual poem.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
    Thanks for your comments. I felt I had written a good one, but one never really knows what others' response will be... or the quality of other entries.
Comment from LyndaS
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This is very cool. A perfect marriage of art and words. I love the connection of the redemptive character of both water and money. Both can save you, eh? Contest rules..check. Well written Haiku..check. Killer art..check. Well done girl! Lynda

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
    Thanks for reviewing, Lynda. In this farming context, water+life=money
Comment from Kerry Robinson
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Hello there, my friend, this is a great Haiku with an awesome picture to pair with it. Good luck! Enjoy your weekend! ~Kerry

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Thanks for reviewing, Kerry. I hope your weekend is going well too.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This haiku, Rain Bounces Like Coins, presented as a 5-7-5, sees the sad irony in get life giving rain after the lives needing it are lost.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Thanks for your review Bill. Farming is such a tough life.
Comment from Rmocruz
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Your syllable count is correct to haiku format.
This appropriate nature theme is well penned.
The message is clearly presented. The artwork
you selected complements your writing.
A well crafted, worthy contest entry, best wishes.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    Thank you for your reassuring comments. Much appreciated.
reply by Rmocruz on 12-Apr-2019
    You're welcome Lisa, my pleasure.
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Your Haiku gives us a sense of a midwestern farmer's plight in a drought situation, both agriculturally and financially. Either one can plow them under.

Do like your raindrop-coin bouncing image.

Your text and its background colors are perfect for your verse and selected illustration.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    Nice review, thank you for that. My background is Australian, so I have seen at first hand the devastating effects of drought on the rural sector.
reply by Mark D. R. on 12-Apr-2019
    Yes Lisa, this past year, your country has seen extremely hot weather situations, which affects your flora, fauna, and inhabitants.

    Mark

    P.S. maybe I shared this with you already: but my current Albany, NY home is almost 180 degrees away from your Albany in southwestern Australia. Maybe I will become your 'poetry cobber'. LOL. I guess my 'midwestern' locale reference can apply to your 'Down Under' too.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    I'm very happy to have a poetry cobber! Nice idea. I am an Aussie but i live in NZ now. It's a skinny landmass so we don't have a "mid-west" here... that would put you on top of the Southern Alps and therefore no drought. NZ has the image of being a green country but there are certain areas that are susceptible to drought conditions. And flooding. Weather patterns are changing.
reply by Mark D. R. on 12-Apr-2019
    lisa

    My wife and her hiking buddies were in your skinny landmass in August. The pictures taken were green on both islands!

    mark
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    I hope they had a lovely time.
reply by Mark D. R. on 12-Apr-2019
    Lisa,

    They did.

    your Christchurch poem was outstanding and it deserved its win!

    my own attempt got good reviews but was only in my 575 style, "Tribute to Christchurch Victims" - favor me your look at the same.

    thanks!

    mark
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    Thanks for praising my Chch poem. I was really pleased it won.
    I checked your Tribute and reviewed it.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
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LisaMay, this is a good entry for the haiku poem contest.
It offers two sides of the coin. A farmer now bankrupt from lack of rain and the rain now falling to quench the thirst of the land....too late. I like it! Well done and best of luck in the competition. ~DD

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    Thanks for this review DD, 'm glad you picked up on both sides of those bouncing coins.
Comment from HealingMuse
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Hi Lisa,

Oooooh, this is a terrific write, my friend. Our farmers are in dire straits, from drought, flooding and those idiotic tariffs. Farmers are going bankrupt in droves every day! So I really appreciate that you are bringing awareness to their plight in this release, because the corporate-controlled mainstream media certainly isn't covering these issues. Very nicely written with a great image. Thanks for sharing. Jan :-)

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
    Our farmers are still our backbone, we all have to eat, and certainly don't get the support or voice they deserve. I do not know much about USA agriculture, but even here in NZ we are subject to policies which puts town against country sometimes. Over the years, I have seen the terrible ravages of drought in Australia. And then there is the fact that weather patterns are changing, internationally, and more will be affected by drought and flooding as you point out.
Comment from 24chas
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This was a great read, LisaMay. I love the flow of this one, which is pretty amazing considering this is a haiku. The message in it is multi-layered as well. Great job.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
    Thank you so much Chas.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written haiku. The rain is always welcome after a hot and dry day even when we are not a farmer we welcome the coolness the rain brings.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
    I appreciate your review Sandra.