The French Letter
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27 total reviews
Comment from kiwisteveh
Well, that livens up the plot a bit!
Your writing is smooth and error-free as usual and this chapter is short and to the point, perhaps making the explosive ending more shocking.
I have been keeping up with your yarn and I do have a few points I'd like to make about the book as a whole, but they'd better wait for another day as I have work tomorrow.
Steve
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Well, that livens up the plot a bit!
Your writing is smooth and error-free as usual and this chapter is short and to the point, perhaps making the explosive ending more shocking.
I have been keeping up with your yarn and I do have a few points I'd like to make about the book as a whole, but they'd better wait for another day as I have work tomorrow.
Steve
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Steve. Appreciated. I imagine that this is going to take quite a bit of re-working. It's serial nature is making it meander all over the place. I probably should have started with a more rigid plot outline.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image for the chapter, Tony.
-You really stepped the game up on this one.
-Brown has some rather secretive and
ominous sounding tasks for Charles.
-I am surprised he is going through all
of this, especially when he had to
relinquish his passport, and he is
getting 5 grand for the mission.
-You would think he would be
a bit suspicious; it is a rather
Bondesque assignment.
-Poor Charles doesn't get a chance
to discuss the paintings, and worst
of all, has to deal with the
consequences of Gaston's death.
-That was a huge surprise.
-It makes me wonder why,
and how it will impact Charles.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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-Good image for the chapter, Tony.
-You really stepped the game up on this one.
-Brown has some rather secretive and
ominous sounding tasks for Charles.
-I am surprised he is going through all
of this, especially when he had to
relinquish his passport, and he is
getting 5 grand for the mission.
-You would think he would be
a bit suspicious; it is a rather
Bondesque assignment.
-Poor Charles doesn't get a chance
to discuss the paintings, and worst
of all, has to deal with the
consequences of Gaston's death.
-That was a huge surprise.
-It makes me wonder why,
and how it will impact Charles.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Many thanks, Pam, for your ongoing support, very kind words and for the sixth star. Charles does seem to have been a bit naïve. I hope it doesn't get him into trouble that I can't get him out of!
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You are very welcome and deserving, Tony. I hope you can help Charles out, too! If you can't, I don't know who can!
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony
My my, now we have really entered serious territory.
Remind me never to accept any package from Australia.
If it were me, I would never have taken the package in the first place
No x-rays certainly meant no paintings.
Poor Charles, he seemed like such a level-headed guy.
And the five thousand pounds, that will weigh on his conscious,
if not evidence in his trial, assuming he gets it.
No Diplomatic Passport, no position as P. A. to the Air Attaché.
Charles is in deep stuff here. His only hope is an author named Fawcus.
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Hello Tony
My my, now we have really entered serious territory.
Remind me never to accept any package from Australia.
If it were me, I would never have taken the package in the first place
No x-rays certainly meant no paintings.
Poor Charles, he seemed like such a level-headed guy.
And the five thousand pounds, that will weigh on his conscious,
if not evidence in his trial, assuming he gets it.
No Diplomatic Passport, no position as P. A. to the Air Attaché.
Charles is in deep stuff here. His only hope is an author named Fawcus.
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Many thanks, Robert, for your review of The Queen's Messenger, and for the sixth star. I'm not sure that I haven't written myself into deep trouble with this one. I hope I can find a way to save Charles from himself.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, he could have been blown up! This is a chilling tale with a horrific twist in it. Explosives are not to be carried in cases unwittingly! Your story is well written as always, interesting and hard hitting. You created some great imagery here, albeit dastardly and criminal, always a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Oh my goodness, he could have been blown up! This is a chilling tale with a horrific twist in it. Explosives are not to be carried in cases unwittingly! Your story is well written as always, interesting and hard hitting. You created some great imagery here, albeit dastardly and criminal, always a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Dolly. Glad this gave you a blast - in a manner of speaking!
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Comment from Shirley McLain
This was a very good chapter to read and so full of action it kept my eyes glued to the page until I finished it. I do have a suggestion for you. You tend to use extra words such as "that". Go through your chapters looking for extra words you do not need. If you read the sentence and it still reads clear without the word then remove it. I hope this helps. Have a great evening. Shirley
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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This was a very good chapter to read and so full of action it kept my eyes glued to the page until I finished it. I do have a suggestion for you. You tend to use extra words such as "that". Go through your chapters looking for extra words you do not need. If you read the sentence and it still reads clear without the word then remove it. I hope this helps. Have a great evening. Shirley
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thanks both for your review and your advice, Shirley. I?ll engage in another ?that? hunt.
Comment from diamondbogle
I thought this was very well written and flowed nicely. I like how it gives enough to the imagination to. I don't feel like I was stuck in the authors point of view but rather my own, if that makes sense.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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I thought this was very well written and flowed nicely. I like how it gives enough to the imagination to. I don't feel like I was stuck in the authors point of view but rather my own, if that makes sense.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thanks, diamondbogle. That?s high praise indeed.
Comment from kiwijenny
Oh my goodness . I'm glad you didn't post your nefarious picture...not your picture obviously but of Arnoux
It's sad that these days in French classyou have to learn
Il y a eu un attentat terroriste! A terrorist bombing! Take cover!"
Good chapter..sad old world
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Oh my goodness . I'm glad you didn't post your nefarious picture...not your picture obviously but of Arnoux
It's sad that these days in French classyou have to learn
Il y a eu un attentat terroriste! A terrorist bombing! Take cover!"
Good chapter..sad old world
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Terrorist bombings seem to have become a sad fact of life these days. As you say, a sad world where such things can happen.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
> Don't worry about it, I've got a million of them... Chuckle!
> I was trying to think how to translate the Spanish of the Portuguese name of that restaurant and all I could figure out it would be is maybe "wishing where it's at?" is all I got out of it.
>I wish somebody would give me something and say, "Here take $5000 and give this package to somebody." I think first of it was US currency and then say yes.
> But you got me on the bombing and now that updated the intrigue to about 80%.
>That's right, who would want Gaston like Humpty Dumpty and blown to pieces. Chuckle!
> I wonder when you going to tell us?
> Thanks for sharing, Tony, take care and have a good one.
Alx
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Cheers, Tony;
> Don't worry about it, I've got a million of them... Chuckle!
> I was trying to think how to translate the Spanish of the Portuguese name of that restaurant and all I could figure out it would be is maybe "wishing where it's at?" is all I got out of it.
>I wish somebody would give me something and say, "Here take $5000 and give this package to somebody." I think first of it was US currency and then say yes.
> But you got me on the bombing and now that updated the intrigue to about 80%.
>That's right, who would want Gaston like Humpty Dumpty and blown to pieces. Chuckle!
> I wonder when you going to tell us?
> Thanks for sharing, Tony, take care and have a good one.
Alx
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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I appreciate the review, Alx. It looks as if Charles is beginning to get into hot water. I hope he can look after himself. Thanks very much for the sixth star.
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After reading your last line he goes and almost gives himself blown up. Geez!
I look forward you're very welcome.
Alx
Comment from Mastery
Yet another brilliant chapter, my friend. I love the "hook" at the end. Although I am not too sure of using the "nondescripted character of Mister Brown. I understand adding the element of mystery with that but it certinly limits what the guy looks like to our imaginations.
Opinion only of course. Good job, Tony. Bob
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Yet another brilliant chapter, my friend. I love the "hook" at the end. Although I am not too sure of using the "nondescripted character of Mister Brown. I understand adding the element of mystery with that but it certinly limits what the guy looks like to our imaginations.
Opinion only of course. Good job, Tony. Bob
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Bob. Brown was deliberately the faceless civil servant. A type rather than a character. Part of the machine.
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It is effective, Tony. :) Bob
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter and the real reason for the secretive events are revealed to be explosives that was delivered and not paintings as was portrayed. Never trust someone who wants you to deliver secret packages.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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A very well-written chapter and the real reason for the secretive events are revealed to be explosives that was delivered and not paintings as was portrayed. Never trust someone who wants you to deliver secret packages.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thanks for continuing to follow this somewhat involved story. Appreciated!
