Renaissance of Enchantment
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Chapter Five, Part 2"It was their world long before our existence...
18 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
A good connective chapter. I never had a bagel until I moved to New York in the early 1960s. And I do like authentic grits. I have time to read one more chapter tonight. I hope that Twilight will not disappear from the story. Just saying. :-)
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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A good connective chapter. I never had a bagel until I moved to New York in the early 1960s. And I do like authentic grits. I have time to read one more chapter tonight. I hope that Twilight will not disappear from the story. Just saying. :-)
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Oh, no, Twilight belongs to Maggie... whether she realizes it or not. ;) :)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I hope that the journey that they will experience will be a thrill of a lifetime. I'm so glad that things have worked out for them...now it's to get use to the new surroundings at The Refuge.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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I hope that the journey that they will experience will be a thrill of a lifetime. I'm so glad that things have worked out for them...now it's to get use to the new surroundings at The Refuge.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Oh, it'll be a thrill all right! ;) :)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
There no need to answer all my reviews. I am catching up on this story and making a little money. The story is very interesting.
Love the large black font!
Children like to balk!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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There no need to answer all my reviews. I am catching up on this story and making a little money. The story is very interesting.
Love the large black font!
Children like to balk!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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They certainly do at that!! ;)
Comment from JudyE
Just a general comment as I've now read at least three episodes one after the other. You use 'snort/snorted' a lot which is okay but perhaps an alternative occasionally might be good.
Just one more small thing:
Maggie could feel the excitement building inside of her again - I'd delete 'of'
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Just a general comment as I've now read at least three episodes one after the other. You use 'snort/snorted' a lot which is okay but perhaps an alternative occasionally might be good.
Just one more small thing:
Maggie could feel the excitement building inside of her again - I'd delete 'of'
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Thanx, again, .... in the Doc! ;) ;) Yvette
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Another word that comes up a lot is huff/huffing/huffed. Just sayin'.
Comment from F. Wehr3
I enjoyed this chapter, Yvette. So, I take it that Maggie and Addy are going to the refuge? To be with the others? I'm still learning all of your characters, there's so many, but I like your interactions. The only real critique is to put actions of characters with their dialogue.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2019
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I enjoyed this chapter, Yvette. So, I take it that Maggie and Addy are going to the refuge? To be with the others? I'm still learning all of your characters, there's so many, but I like your interactions. The only real critique is to put actions of characters with their dialogue.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 29-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2019
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Thanx, Russell, for your review and critique. :) :) Have a great day! :)
Comment from Bill Pinder
That is funny, making fun of grits. That is one unusual food that I like since I grew up in the south. Sounds like an excellent book. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2019
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That is funny, making fun of grits. That is one unusual food that I like since I grew up in the south. Sounds like an excellent book. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2019
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Wow, Bill -- thanx so much for stopping in on this one, sir! :) :) Have a great day! :)
Comment from Heather Knight
Very natural, well written dialogue.
I find Lars interesting, but I'm surprised he still has any clients considering the way he behaves.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Very natural, well written dialogue.
I find Lars interesting, but I'm surprised he still has any clients considering the way he behaves.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Thank you for stopping in with Maggie's story, Maria -- much appreciated. :) ;) Yvette
Comment from lyenochka
Yay! We're back to Maggie and Addy. I can relate to these characters. And you've covered the northern prejudices about the south so well. I had to laugh at the "bagel" comment because I grew up in Hawaii and when I went to the mainland for college, a friend was shocked I didn't know what a bagel was. That was in 1976. She made me bagels!
The characters' personalities came through well in the dialogue. The only thing that I needed more visual help was when they were saying goodbye to the old gang. It felt like they were going down a reception line. Were they all gathered in the hallway?
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Yay! We're back to Maggie and Addy. I can relate to these characters. And you've covered the northern prejudices about the south so well. I had to laugh at the "bagel" comment because I grew up in Hawaii and when I went to the mainland for college, a friend was shocked I didn't know what a bagel was. That was in 1976. She made me bagels!
The characters' personalities came through well in the dialogue. The only thing that I needed more visual help was when they were saying goodbye to the old gang. It felt like they were going down a reception line. Were they all gathered in the hallway?
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Thank you, thank you, Helen, for being so supportive of my crazy fantasy -- my husband's family is from Michigan and I've always marveled at the jokes (that you know are rooted in 'more') that folks up there used to toss around 'for fun'! :) ;) But hey, I can joke with the best of 'em....LOL! ;) :) She was really just listing off all the folks you've already seen/heard of 'til now that they know there in New York....none of them were there at the time except Sir Ed and Scully. :) :)
You have a great week and I'm shooting for another ... different ... installment for the saga tomorrow. :) ;) Take care! :) Yvette
Comment from Debbie Pope
This chapter gets my top rating for sure. I've just out six stars is all. I love that Lars is still ranting about the South. He had to throw in the comment about the grits and the guns. The South still has some identity of its own for sure.
I'm getting attached to Addy with all of his giggling. Still hope some folks, or cats, follow Maggie to Alabama. Guess I will find out soon.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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This chapter gets my top rating for sure. I've just out six stars is all. I love that Lars is still ranting about the South. He had to throw in the comment about the grits and the guns. The South still has some identity of its own for sure.
I'm getting attached to Addy with all of his giggling. Still hope some folks, or cats, follow Maggie to Alabama. Guess I will find out soon.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Hey there, MQ -- sorry I'm so far behind -- having trouble kicking myself in the butt and getting going! :) ;) Thanx for this -- my husband's family is from Michigan and I've always marveled at the jokes (that you know are rooted in 'more') that folks up there used to toss around 'for fun'! :) ;) But hey, I can joke with the best of 'em....LOL! ;) :) Hope the packing is still going well -- been thinking 'bout you...just get through today and I can breathe in the morning! :) :) Be sure to check in on the contests and jump in mine if you have time! :) ;) Take good care and I'll check in tomorrow -- Yvette :) ;)
Comment from Winslow
Dear Y M Roger,
Well written. I like the scene in the diner where the dough is flying around. LOL Good dialogue. It seems Maggie is a take charge kind of gal. I hope that Addy does well with the move to Alabama. You have set up the reader well in terms of the obstacles and problems that Maggie will have to confront and solve.
Cheers,
Winslow
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Dear Y M Roger,
Well written. I like the scene in the diner where the dough is flying around. LOL Good dialogue. It seems Maggie is a take charge kind of gal. I hope that Addy does well with the move to Alabama. You have set up the reader well in terms of the obstacles and problems that Maggie will have to confront and solve.
Cheers,
Winslow
Comment Written 25-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Wow, Winslow -- so good to hear from you on this part -- would love to have you along if you feel inclined to take time to catch up! :) ;) Either way, I do so appreciate your taking a look at this and letting me know your thoughts -- I do so appreciate that! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful week! :) ;) Yvette :)
