Getting To Know the Team
A 'Someone Else' Contest Entry13 total reviews
Comment from Gail Denham
Oh my stars - you did that so smoothly and it was a fine read. Caught on quick about Gordy even before the menu - but that came through nicely. Good job. You deserve a high mark in the ratings with this one. Good job.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Oh my stars - you did that so smoothly and it was a fine read. Caught on quick about Gordy even before the menu - but that came through nicely. Good job. You deserve a high mark in the ratings with this one. Good job.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Thank you for your review and wonderful comments, Gail -- they are so very appreciated. Glad you enjoyed the Team! :) ;)
Comment from Artasylum
It seems to me that you had a good time being someone else... a fun romp...
And the damn alarm was still going off! I leapt out of the bed, heading toward the deafening sound, and I stumbled over a large dog. At least I hoped it was a dog. The animal took that moment to stand up, throwing off my balance in the dark, and I pivoted in the direction of the alarm, only to fall against a small table.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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It seems to me that you had a good time being someone else... a fun romp...
And the damn alarm was still going off! I leapt out of the bed, heading toward the deafening sound, and I stumbled over a large dog. At least I hoped it was a dog. The animal took that moment to stand up, throwing off my balance in the dark, and I pivoted in the direction of the alarm, only to fall against a small table.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for your review, Diana -- always enjoy hearing from you! :)
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh, how I wish I sixth star for this EXCEPTIONAL story! So complete in every way - the development of the characters in such a creative -no, INGENIOUS- way. This was tender and deep and just plain perfect. I think this is the best story I have read yet on this site. I can't imagine it won't be the front-runner. But whether it takes the prize or not, this is a memorable piece (for all the right reasons.) xo
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Oh, how I wish I sixth star for this EXCEPTIONAL story! So complete in every way - the development of the characters in such a creative -no, INGENIOUS- way. This was tender and deep and just plain perfect. I think this is the best story I have read yet on this site. I can't imagine it won't be the front-runner. But whether it takes the prize or not, this is a memorable piece (for all the right reasons.) xo
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful comments and virtual six, Rachelle -- it is greatly appreciated! :) ;) Have a wonderful evening out there! ;)
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I've never written "you're welcome!" with more gusto in my entire almost-two-months on this site. I think you're immensely talented. xo
Comment from S.M.E.Schultz
This had me in tears ...hilarious and touching ! Changing the font type and colour made it very easy to follow the characters. I was confused at first because you introduced yourself in the first dialogue as "BOB" and really your attitude was that of a guy or very ruthless woman. Very good characterization and smooth introduction of backstories.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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This had me in tears ...hilarious and touching ! Changing the font type and colour made it very easy to follow the characters. I was confused at first because you introduced yourself in the first dialogue as "BOB" and really your attitude was that of a guy or very ruthless woman. Very good characterization and smooth introduction of backstories.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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I really don't think I introduced the main character as 'Bob' .... I went back and looked again, but that was the President of her company ....? If you have the time, I'd appreciate it if you'd let me know if you think I should re-phrase something there in that paragraph toward the very beginning.... I want to make sure it's clear! :) ;) Thank you so much for your review and I am so very glad you enjoyed! :) ;)
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Oh, I got it...re-read with different emphasis. Maybe if you'd said, "Call me Bob..." but could just be my reading skills lol, but I loved it!
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I'll go back and take a look at it then...thanx so much for the second set of eyes!! :) ;)
Comment from Catmusings
A very entertaining story and well written. I was swept away by the story of that ambitious woman (didn't notice her name anywhere) manager who is suddenly in Gordy's body. Powerful way to show that she doesn't know anything about her team members at all and she realizes how selfish and arrogant she's been. It gives her the insight into others' lives as we really never know what the other person's life is like, do we? She appreciates what a great team she has and stays after all.
And she sees that Gordy is brilliant, despite his disability. That part touched me as I'm always rooting for the underdog who is overlooked, misunderstood and downtrodden. Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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A very entertaining story and well written. I was swept away by the story of that ambitious woman (didn't notice her name anywhere) manager who is suddenly in Gordy's body. Powerful way to show that she doesn't know anything about her team members at all and she realizes how selfish and arrogant she's been. It gives her the insight into others' lives as we really never know what the other person's life is like, do we? She appreciates what a great team she has and stays after all.
And she sees that Gordy is brilliant, despite his disability. That part touched me as I'm always rooting for the underdog who is overlooked, misunderstood and downtrodden. Well done!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Oh, hooray! You just made my weekend with your lovely comments, Catmusings-- I am so glad you enjoyed 'The Team'! :) :) Thanx for the review and have a wonderful remainder of the weekend! :) ;)
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You have a great weekend, too!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I don't have a clue who wrote this but I must say Bravo! I was completely drawn into the drama of it all. I loved the characters and the plot. I think it is a winner and wish you the best of luck! Nancy:)
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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I don't have a clue who wrote this but I must say Bravo! I was completely drawn into the drama of it all. I loved the characters and the plot. I think it is a winner and wish you the best of luck! Nancy:)
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Oh, Nancy, you just made my weekend with your lovely comments -- I am so glad you enjoyed 'The Team' -- thanx for the review and have a wonderful remainder of the weekend! :) ;)
Comment from Shirley McLain
Loved the story. It was active and kept me reading all the way through. Your character is strong with good dialogue. I didn't see a thing to recommend for correction. Have a good day. Shirley
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Loved the story. It was active and kept me reading all the way through. Your character is strong with good dialogue. I didn't see a thing to recommend for correction. Have a good day. Shirley
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Thank you for your review, Shirley -- much appreciated. :)
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I dont normally read long stories like this but I was sucked in and I loved this. You did a great job and it's a reminder to think of what others are going through. I think she made the right decision
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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I dont normally read long stories like this but I was sucked in and I loved this. You did a great job and it's a reminder to think of what others are going through. I think she made the right decision
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Oh, I am really glad that you were 'sucked in' to read about 'The Team' -- so good to hear that you enjoyed it! :) :) Thank you for your review today -- it is much appreciated! :) ;)
Comment from LaFrance
What an excellent story. It was a very creative and very long and complete story. Yet it was pleasing to read of the character becoming a man. Good read.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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What an excellent story. It was a very creative and very long and complete story. Yet it was pleasing to read of the character becoming a man. Good read.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Oh, LaFrance, you just made my weekend and probably next week as well -- thank you for those lovely stars!! :) So glad you enjoyed 'The Team' -- thanx for the review! :) ;)
Comment from Nancy O'Connor1
Intesting story, but confusing especially about the gender issue and the main character's name and the children??? It is like trying to solve a puzzel and I don't want to problem solve when I am reading for pleasure. You are a good writer and use words in an interesting way, Good luck and keep at it.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Intesting story, but confusing especially about the gender issue and the main character's name and the children??? It is like trying to solve a puzzel and I don't want to problem solve when I am reading for pleasure. You are a good writer and use words in an interesting way, Good luck and keep at it.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Thank you for your review. The main character is never given a name and the children? I'm not even sure what children you are referring to... I appreciate your time.
