Comment from Mark D. R.

Excellent

I'm OK with your title, but had you time "King Slaps Me Five!" might have been an alternative.

IMHO, these short verses, for the future, should be centered as text. Increasing the font size in advanced editor is another possibility.

The King of Beasts is not quite licking his chops, but snoozing his whiskers LOL

Good luck in contest

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019

It was lucky enough to find this cool picture .. I guess if he had been literally licking his mouth the game would have been over .

.it makes more sense he was pretending to be in a lazy mood and stuck out a paw asking a ... Give me five.... For fun.

I agree with you I should have centred the text but I was just too tired ..I posted late.

Your title is not bad ..but I try to avoid repeating the same words that are already in the poem , specially one so short ..

Thanks for sharing !

Comment from Lance S. Loria

Good

Great artwork with the lion. 5-3-5 lune poem but your second line is over at four syllables. Try to change it as soon as possible to stay in the contest. Good luck.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019

Thanks Lance for advising me .. I couldn't come up with anything else but a king ..but I think it goes alright.

I don't even understand why I didnt notice "lion " was two syllables ..

Thanks for the positive review!

Ciao!