Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 458 "Ice Lions"Small and Specialty Poems
10 total reviews
Comment from damommy
This is an awesome photo. Another one of your talents. Your Dandizette flows so smoothly and the rhyming is strong yet subtle. You did a fantastic job with this. I don't think it will become a popular form. We simply try to make a challenge in week in Potlatch Poetry.
Sorry I'm so late reviewing. I just returned from a week in hospital.
Yvonne
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
This is an awesome photo. Another one of your talents. Your Dandizette flows so smoothly and the rhyming is strong yet subtle. You did a fantastic job with this. I don't think it will become a popular form. We simply try to make a challenge in week in Potlatch Poetry.
Sorry I'm so late reviewing. I just returned from a week in hospital.
Yvonne
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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Thank you Yvonne.i agree I won't become popular, but I always love a new form challenge.
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I'm finding that becoming popular on here is a lot of silliness. It's all a popularity / numbers game. I've decided to do what I like, appreciate reviews from people like you, and enjoy myself. Outside FanStory, all that stuff doesn't mean a thing. 8-)
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Bravo on such a difficult Rhyme scheme. It is much to early in the morning for me to understand , but I will say I like the poem, it made a lot of sense and I enjoyed the form. Well done Tom. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
Bravo on such a difficult Rhyme scheme. It is much to early in the morning for me to understand , but I will say I like the poem, it made a lot of sense and I enjoyed the form. Well done Tom. Nancy:)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
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Thank you Nancy. I am getting the cobwebs out myself, with a hot cup of coffee. Cheers!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Dandizette poem and an excellent photo to illustrate the topichildren of the ice lions that seem to wait patiently in the cold in hope to find prey.
Typo in description line
Dadizette(Dandizette)
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
A very well-written Dandizette poem and an excellent photo to illustrate the topichildren of the ice lions that seem to wait patiently in the cold in hope to find prey.
Typo in description line
Dadizette(Dandizette)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
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Thank you Sandra. Ill fix that.
Comment from 24chas
This was a good write, Treischel. The photo was really nice and your words told a creative and unique story. The piece had a good flow and rhythm to it. Nice job.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
This was a good write, Treischel. The photo was really nice and your words told a creative and unique story. The piece had a good flow and rhythm to it. Nice job.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
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Thank you so mush 24Chas, for your astute observations and review.
Comment from His Grayness
Certainly a great investment of rare and uncommon work here so very well presented in all dimensions and surely not leaving any repairs or adjustments to this fine work in any way whatsoever! my thanks for a really fine read! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
Certainly a great investment of rare and uncommon work here so very well presented in all dimensions and surely not leaving any repairs or adjustments to this fine work in any way whatsoever! my thanks for a really fine read! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
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Thank you Vance. Good to hear from you. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Pantygynt
I looked at this form and I can't say I liked it. I could not see that it had any real utility as far as enhancing the poem is concerned. That is of course not a criticism of you but of the form. Form for form's sake in my opinion.
'dain'?
I had to look this up because I think you meant 'deign'. I looked it up in Merriam Webster too in case there was an American spelling, but I am afreaid not.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
I looked at this form and I can't say I liked it. I could not see that it had any real utility as far as enhancing the poem is concerned. That is of course not a criticism of you but of the form. Form for form's sake in my opinion.
'dain'?
I had to look this up because I think you meant 'deign'. I looked it up in Merriam Webster too in case there was an American spelling, but I am afreaid not.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
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Thank you Jim, You came to my rescue again as I do mean deign, but forgot how to spell it, No wonder I couldn't find it in the dictionary, I was looking under da.I agree with you about the form.
Comment from robyn corum
Tom,
I see ONE lion - though I would never have seen it at all if you hadn't said something. *smile* Where was this photo taken, my friend? You don't mention that and it seems kind of important. You don't see stuff like this very often!!
The poem was really COOL! hahahahahaha For real, though. Great descriptions and a lot of imagination. I enjoyed!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
Tom,
I see ONE lion - though I would never have seen it at all if you hadn't said something. *smile* Where was this photo taken, my friend? You don't mention that and it seems kind of important. You don't see stuff like this very often!!
The poem was really COOL! hahahahahaha For real, though. Great descriptions and a lot of imagination. I enjoyed!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
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Thank you Robin. It was taken up on Lake Superior in the winter, just north of Duluth. Glad you saw at least one.
Comment from RodG
I like how you use both the poem and the photo to inspire the reader's imagination. As we visualize frozen lions, we also think of wizards' spells which might have put them there. Young readers will like this because of the mysticism and the rhyme. Rod
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
I like how you use both the poem and the photo to inspire the reader's imagination. As we visualize frozen lions, we also think of wizards' spells which might have put them there. Young readers will like this because of the mysticism and the rhyme. Rod
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
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Thank you RodG. You may be right about children. Thanks for stopping by for a read. I am pleased you liked it.
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Always a pleasure. Rod
Comment from patcelaw
Tom, this is a lovely work. As for seeing the lions in the picture, that I cannot do because of my vision problems, I do well to see even the words of poems and writings. It is always a struggle for me to read and review. Your poem is well written in the format and I wish you the best in publishing your book.
Patricia
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
Tom, this is a lovely work. As for seeing the lions in the picture, that I cannot do because of my vision problems, I do well to see even the words of poems and writings. It is always a struggle for me to read and review. Your poem is well written in the format and I wish you the best in publishing your book.
Patricia
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
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Thank you Patricia. I just had Cataract Surgery on both eyes. The fog has no been lifted and nowI can drive at night again, and see the words on the TV screen.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is an amazing photo, Tom, and you have written the perfect poem to compliment it. I can see the three lions easily, and I can also understand why you would write a more sinister poem to go with it. I really enjoyed reading it and will watch out for your animated book when you publish it. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
That is an amazing photo, Tom, and you have written the perfect poem to compliment it. I can see the three lions easily, and I can also understand why you would write a more sinister poem to go with it. I really enjoyed reading it and will watch out for your animated book when you publish it. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
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Thank you Sandra. I am most pleased you read and liked it.