Reviews from

clever mortician

senryu contest

26 total reviews 
Comment from IndianaIrish
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Congrats on your contest win, Janet. Loved the humor in your poem and it made me smile. I voted for your entry and I'm excited it was yours!
Smiles,
Karyn

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
    Thank you Karyn. I appreciate your encouragement and support. You have helped me in many ways on our Poets Corner.

    It is so exciting that our book goes on sale today. yay!!! Can't wait to get a copy.

    Smiles to you.
    Janet
Comment from Gail Denham
Excellent
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I'd sure vote on this one - oops - forgot to vote. I like this - and glad you won. Such a clever play on words and subject. Imagination reigns supreme. When we first moved to a small town in Central Oregon, our small Lutheran congregation met in the front part of the mortuary. I had so much fun at school..."and then in the middle of the service we heard a noise from the back room. A coffin opening." Guess that's why I became a writer?

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Thank you for your encouraging review. I can see why you were inspired to become a writer.

    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from sfharper
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Now that is funny in a true groaner style. I love the photograph. I wondered about a glass coffin until the last line, so you had me. I found it fun and easy to read, enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Thank you for your encouraging review. So glad you enjoyed it.
    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from Bill Schott
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This senryu, Clever Mortician, formatted in a 5-7-5 framework, uses this double entendre in a way that makes the need of a mirror to check for breath unnecessary.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Thank you for your encouraging review. So glad you enjoyed it. You're right - no need for a mirror to check for breath. haha
    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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Nooooo. You did NOT go here. HAHAHAHAHAHA. You have no shame. But you sure did give me an excellent laugh here. Good luck in the contest. I bet this one will shine. xo

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Thank you Rachelle for your encouraging review. So glad you enjoyed it. It did win which is rare for me. :))))))
    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from Debra White
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Hello :)
I really enjoyed your senryu.
A clever play on words.
Effective use of alliteration.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Thank you for your encouraging review. So glad you enjoyed it. It did win which is rare for me. :))))))
    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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What a clever poem. I am curious regarding the picture. Is that a beetle?
I have a deep interest in the Sexton Beetle. The beetle that moves dead animals in the woods and lays its eggs upon. Your play on words is magnificent!

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Thank you Raffaelina for your encouraging review. So glad you enjoyed it.
    The picture is actually some crystal goblets. I couldn't find a glass coffin picture (imagine that) haha

    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from Debbie Pope
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Clearly, this is a good entry. Or, should I say a sick entry. What a sick idea for people to want to see the remains. Ever sicker though, perhaps the mortician is trying to give the remains a good view of the funeral.
Even your artwork is mesmerizing. This is a great entry, not just good.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Thank you Debbie for your encouraging review. So glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate your support.
    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from LisaMay
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Your poem is a very clever play on words. That mortician is clearly one step ahead. Other funeral parlours wooden want to change their mahogany coffins.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Thank you Lisa May for your encouraging review. So glad you enjoyed it. Loved your play on words review. :)))))
    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from fm wright
Excellent
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Truly a clever poem! I like how you used the last line. It flows well and certainly fits this format.
It also reads well as a humorous poem. I certainly like it and have found nothing that needs changing. Best of wishes in the contest with this entry!

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Thank you for your encouraging review. So glad you enjoyed it. It did win which is rare for me. :)))))
    Blessings
    Janet
reply by fm wright on 18-Mar-2019
    I'm glad it won. Not that i had anything to do with it, but I did vote for it, as i thought it the best of those offered.