This Time - That Time 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Mildred's Idea"Third book in the time travel trilogy
29 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Visceral Me is a tad disappointed. I wanted blood and guts AND humiliation for that reprehensible louse of a human. I'm going to trust that "plans change" and that "things have to adapt accordingly." xo
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Visceral Me is a tad disappointed. I wanted blood and guts AND humiliation for that reprehensible louse of a human. I'm going to trust that "plans change" and that "things have to adapt accordingly." xo
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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I'm not saying a word!! :)) Just that I'm hoping you will enjoy his ending. xxxx
Comment from Treischel
A good start with the kitchen scene and the kids. A touch of humor with Michael wanting to see Mildred'a brains. A very domestic scene with hand washing, cleaning up, hanging cloths, biscuit eating, and weight discussions. And minor scoldings.
Both Mildred and you know how to keep us waiting.
An intriguing thought about the time warp. Ah, a ghost haunting the Admiral is a cool idea. Yes, resigning would be a better avenue than confession for him.
Another excellent chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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A good start with the kitchen scene and the kids. A touch of humor with Michael wanting to see Mildred'a brains. A very domestic scene with hand washing, cleaning up, hanging cloths, biscuit eating, and weight discussions. And minor scoldings.
Both Mildred and you know how to keep us waiting.
An intriguing thought about the time warp. Ah, a ghost haunting the Admiral is a cool idea. Yes, resigning would be a better avenue than confession for him.
Another excellent chapter.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this part, Tom, even after the promotion had ended. I really appreciate your lovely comments and I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Big hugs, my friend, Sandra xx
Comment from Rhonda Skinner
Great chapter. I loved the kids' behavior and the resolution the adults came to.
There was one sentence that seemed liked it had a tense change: I'd just have to wait until Mildred explains (explained) her idea this (in the) evening.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Great chapter. I loved the kids' behavior and the resolution the adults came to.
There was one sentence that seemed liked it had a tense change: I'd just have to wait until Mildred explains (explained) her idea this (in the) evening.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much, Rhonda. I've fixed that error, I'm so pleased you spotted it. I'm also glad you enjoyed the children's antics, lol. It's amazing what you can pick up listening to your grandchildren!! Big hugs my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from wordsfromsue
I hear the logic in their plan, but I honestly wonder if The Toad would willingly give up his position?
They'll really have to scare the ego out of him.
Interesting plan... I can't wait to see how it plays out!
Another good chapter, Sandra. :-)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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I hear the logic in their plan, but I honestly wonder if The Toad would willingly give up his position?
They'll really have to scare the ego out of him.
Interesting plan... I can't wait to see how it plays out!
Another good chapter, Sandra. :-)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much, Sue! The Toad will be hard to break, but he hasn't come up against Ver and Mildred!! Watch this space. Thank you for the golden stars, my friend. Big hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very good chapter, Sandra,
with the family all together.
-I like how Mildred hams up her
bit about her idea and not
revealing anything in the beginning.
-She is anxious to see the children, and
doesn't have to wait too long, as they
are so pleased to see her, too.
-There is a bit of concern over
Ann's remark about weight, but
it is soon explained, and there
is a sense of relief from everyone.
-Mildred has a few questions about
how long she had been gone, and
finally reveals her idea about the
Vice Admiral, tying in what she
remembered about Lady Ann and Gladys.
-This is quite clever on her part, and there
seems to be agreement that getting the
V. Admiral to resign from the military
is a good one, and Mildred wouldn't
have to do anything drastic.
-It sounds like a good plan, and one that
will make for a very interesting chapter!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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-A very good chapter, Sandra,
with the family all together.
-I like how Mildred hams up her
bit about her idea and not
revealing anything in the beginning.
-She is anxious to see the children, and
doesn't have to wait too long, as they
are so pleased to see her, too.
-There is a bit of concern over
Ann's remark about weight, but
it is soon explained, and there
is a sense of relief from everyone.
-Mildred has a few questions about
how long she had been gone, and
finally reveals her idea about the
Vice Admiral, tying in what she
remembered about Lady Ann and Gladys.
-This is quite clever on her part, and there
seems to be agreement that getting the
V. Admiral to resign from the military
is a good one, and Mildred wouldn't
have to do anything drastic.
-It sounds like a good plan, and one that
will make for a very interesting chapter!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Pam, it's so nice that you thought Mildred idea was clever. It needed a bit of tweaking from Veronica, but the idea was sound. Now they have to put it into action. That will be fun! Thank you so very much for the 6 stars, my friend, I really appreciate them. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the review and stars, my friend. The idea was sound, and now we will wait to see how it all plays out! Good job with the chapter.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Excellent chapter!
It's nice to learn that there are children who actually listen to their teachers.
(even if the parents don't)
What happened to my sharp, perceptive Veronica, she's is a little slow in this chapter.
Doesn't see the connection between Gladys and Lady Ann?
Why even someone from the states understands what Mildred is thinking.
Though V does redeem herself later.
Getting the VA to resign may be trickier than they think.
Maybe threatening to expose him as a murderer or even as a traitor.
We'll see what Sandra can cook up in the next chapter.
These family scenes are very well done and add to the novel's allure.
Looking forward to the ghostly encounter.
Robert
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Hello Sandra,
Excellent chapter!
It's nice to learn that there are children who actually listen to their teachers.
(even if the parents don't)
What happened to my sharp, perceptive Veronica, she's is a little slow in this chapter.
Doesn't see the connection between Gladys and Lady Ann?
Why even someone from the states understands what Mildred is thinking.
Though V does redeem herself later.
Getting the VA to resign may be trickier than they think.
Maybe threatening to expose him as a murderer or even as a traitor.
We'll see what Sandra can cook up in the next chapter.
These family scenes are very well done and add to the novel's allure.
Looking forward to the ghostly encounter.
Robert
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Poor Veronica, she had a bad headache! LOL. It won't be easy, he's a really nasty piece of work. But, Ver can be just as hard at times, especially knowing her family could disappear on her if she doesn't stop him. Thank you so much for the lovely review, and the golden stars! Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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Maybe they could convince the VA's superior
that he is going to betray the country or is mentally unsound.
Just a thought.
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Hmm, there's a thought!! And that one isn't even in my notes! :)))
Comment from giraffmang
Another very good instalment here, Sandra. Seems like they have concocted a plan, amongst the normalcy of life. lol
Formatting is a little wonky in places here. Some paragraphs are left justifies and others indented.
Don't be silly, of course, you can't see Aunty Mildred's brain,- this is a peculiar one as most grammar programmes will regard your sentence as spot on. However, there is no need for of course to have a following comma as it's an intrinsic part of what follows
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Another very good instalment here, Sandra. Seems like they have concocted a plan, amongst the normalcy of life. lol
Formatting is a little wonky in places here. Some paragraphs are left justifies and others indented.
Don't be silly, of course, you can't see Aunty Mildred's brain,- this is a peculiar one as most grammar programmes will regard your sentence as spot on. However, there is no need for of course to have a following comma as it's an intrinsic part of what follows
G
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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You're right about the grammar checks, Gareth, MS Word has it as an error when I leave that comma out of, 'of oourse,' but I agree with what you are saying and have now taken it out again, even though I'm getting the red error line underneath. It doesn't sound right with one there. I've checked over the formatting and corrected that as well. Thank you so much for the lovely review, my friend. (even though you didn't review my long story!! I'll forgive you!) :)) Big hugs, my friend. xxxx Sandra
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It's on my list. lol
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I'll doubly forgive you then!! LO. I'm going to lengthen it with more action in the Indian camp. I want to make it around 10 - 12000 like the first book was. But I'll leave it for a while as I'm going to finish this novel and then I have 'Eric and the Pharaohs' coming next. This is going to be my last novel. (I think) xxx
Comment from royowen
Veronica, James and Mildred are trying to figure out how to get Admilak Pembroke out the picture and out of the admiralty, but short of killing him, what other method can they use? And, then they think of Gladys, or at least Veronica pretending she's Gladys' ghost, saying she'll haunt him till he gets out of the admiralty. This should be fun Sandra, well dine, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Veronica, James and Mildred are trying to figure out how to get Admilak Pembroke out the picture and out of the admiralty, but short of killing him, what other method can they use? And, then they think of Gladys, or at least Veronica pretending she's Gladys' ghost, saying she'll haunt him till he gets out of the admiralty. This should be fun Sandra, well dine, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Oh, Yes! We will have lots of fun with that part. LOL. Thank you so much for another lovely review, Roy. I'm so pleased you approve of their new plan! I really couldn't see our Mildred murdering anyone. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Nor I Sandra,
Comment from Gail Denham
Well, I'm sure glad that Mildred made it - I had doubts. Another satisfying part of the story, altho Mildred's idioms and speech aren't that far out. She could even use a bit more speech oddities. I like them - it helps define her character for sure. Her "I reckon" sounds more U.S. than English to me."
I have a few "nits" only and they're small -- "we both turned to look at her with bated breath." that sentence stopped me - could it be "we both turned to look at her. I held my breath." better broken up I think - and if you're in one viewpoint, you (the author) don't know what he's doing under his breath or something like that.
Another place was "it was probably more in the reality" - that stopped me, not sure if that's the right way to say it.
These are very small "nits" - great going. I think it would be fun to put more of the "regular" folk's language in Mildred's speech.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Well, I'm sure glad that Mildred made it - I had doubts. Another satisfying part of the story, altho Mildred's idioms and speech aren't that far out. She could even use a bit more speech oddities. I like them - it helps define her character for sure. Her "I reckon" sounds more U.S. than English to me."
I have a few "nits" only and they're small -- "we both turned to look at her with bated breath." that sentence stopped me - could it be "we both turned to look at her. I held my breath." better broken up I think - and if you're in one viewpoint, you (the author) don't know what he's doing under his breath or something like that.
Another place was "it was probably more in the reality" - that stopped me, not sure if that's the right way to say it.
These are very small "nits" - great going. I think it would be fun to put more of the "regular" folk's language in Mildred's speech.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Hi Gail, I've replied to you three times and somehow deleted each one of them. So in case it happens again, thank you so much for another lovely review. I know what you mean about Mildred, but she has been like this all through the three books, so it's impossible to change her now. Although, in the second book the characters had very strong dialects. It was based in 1846.
Thanks again, Gail. :)) Sandra xx
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I enjoyed the story - was just a "nit" picked is all. Good luck with the book. It's intriguing
Comment from Artasylum
This is another fine write... Sandra... Looking forward... yours, diana
"Alright, you two. Michael, don't speak with your mouth full," I scolded before turning to Ann. "Too many sweet things aren't good for you, your teacher's right. But you also need some sugar to replenish all the energy you're using. You have tennis lessons, and you go swimming every week. You're always running around doing something." I looked at my normal, slim, fit daughter and frowned. I could understand the teacher mentioning this because there were too many overweight children, but I didn't want Ann changing her eating habits. As far as I was concerned, she was already eating a balanced, healthy diet.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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This is another fine write... Sandra... Looking forward... yours, diana
"Alright, you two. Michael, don't speak with your mouth full," I scolded before turning to Ann. "Too many sweet things aren't good for you, your teacher's right. But you also need some sugar to replenish all the energy you're using. You have tennis lessons, and you go swimming every week. You're always running around doing something." I looked at my normal, slim, fit daughter and frowned. I could understand the teacher mentioning this because there were too many overweight children, but I didn't want Ann changing her eating habits. As far as I was concerned, she was already eating a balanced, healthy diet.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Diane, for another lovely review. Big hugs, :)) Sandra xx
