Renaissance of Enchantment
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Chapter Four, Part 2"It was their world long before our existence...
19 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
Since I live in Memphis, the ending is a true cliff hanger. I like that woman already and that there are more and more mystical qualities showing up in the story. Super! :-)
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Since I live in Memphis, the ending is a true cliff hanger. I like that woman already and that there are more and more mystical qualities showing up in the story. Super! :-)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Aaaah, yes, our Memphis (USA) is named for a much older place in the Old World.... ;) Yvette
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a surprise guest, Memphis. I would like to know how she got into the picture so I'll read on. What a disaster this has turned out to be after a death of a loved one.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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What a surprise guest, Memphis. I would like to know how she got into the picture so I'll read on. What a disaster this has turned out to be after a death of a loved one.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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She is certainly a surprise... :)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
There is no need to answer all of these reviews. I am just catching up. Just delete them all.
Well, /Memphis promises to rile things up a bit more. Lovely girls usually do.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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There is no need to answer all of these reviews. I am just catching up. Just delete them all.
Well, /Memphis promises to rile things up a bit more. Lovely girls usually do.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Yep!!
Comment from Sankey
Still churning out the interesting reading that is definitely from out of this world in a lot of ways. Only one tiny little question as to error or? as Lyca's tatt(oo?)ed arms
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Still churning out the interesting reading that is definitely from out of this world in a lot of ways. Only one tiny little question as to error or? as Lyca's tatt(oo?)ed arms
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Fixed! ;) Thank you for the catch!! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from JudyE
Nothing to suggest here or comment on but I've been reading all the episodes to try to understand the story and learn about the characters. I've a way to go yet. :)
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Nothing to suggest here or comment on but I've been reading all the episodes to try to understand the story and learn about the characters. I've a way to go yet. :)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Hope you get caught up by the weekend!! :) ;) LOL! My goal is to have the next installment ready... take care, Lady Judy! ;) Yvette
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I think I'm there now.
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Hey!! Where did your new pic go?? It's back to the other one now...?
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I don't know. I thought it hadn't changed. I didn't actually see the new one. I'll have a look tomorrow. It's late here now and I'm just off to bed.
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It was a 'close-up' with more color in your shirt and the background (what little could be seen of it)...
Have a good night, ma'am -- sweet dreams! ;) :)
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Yvette,
A very interesting chapter. I love your use of the dialect, and the action you've packed into the scene which allowed us to see the characters have their 'discussion.'
Looking forward to how this new character will 'fit in,'
~MP~
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Hi, Yvette,
A very interesting chapter. I love your use of the dialect, and the action you've packed into the scene which allowed us to see the characters have their 'discussion.'
Looking forward to how this new character will 'fit in,'
~MP~
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Hey there, MP! :) Yep, more about Miss Memphis tomorrow (hopefully!). :) ;) Thanx for the review on this one -- always appreciate your stopping in! :) ;) Take care! Yvette
Comment from Ms. Snyder
And so did you leave Ms. Memphis off of the author's notes intentionally? The pointed eared Memphis (striking blonde beauty). I am waiting for Kato's reaction to this woman (he, he, he). I might just get jealous! Also, I didn't realize this but I now know I can put Factotum as an actual position on my resume. My last full-time position was as an actual Factotum! Crazy but you actually have given a summed up description to my work that I didn't know existed! Double Cheers! I loved this chapter a lot! It had my favorite in it (briefly) and also it was wayyyyy too short! More, please! Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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And so did you leave Ms. Memphis off of the author's notes intentionally? The pointed eared Memphis (striking blonde beauty). I am waiting for Kato's reaction to this woman (he, he, he). I might just get jealous! Also, I didn't realize this but I now know I can put Factotum as an actual position on my resume. My last full-time position was as an actual Factotum! Crazy but you actually have given a summed up description to my work that I didn't know existed! Double Cheers! I loved this chapter a lot! It had my favorite in it (briefly) and also it was wayyyyy too short! More, please! Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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I did, I did! :) :) You shall get a bit more on her (and more!!) tomorrow, I think. Grades were turned in last evening and I'm slowly digging out of the hole that my "New Writing Online" messages put me in -- I'm 'bout done there and now I'm on these!! :) ;) So glad you're enjoying...and I promise you a big surprise about Kato tomorrow as well (though you should have figured out at least the first part of it with this one....) And, yes! You may add it to your resume! :) ;) :) Thanx so much for keeping up, ma'am -- you're awesome! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Lord, Yvette!
Your imagination knows no bounds... and that, Friend, is a very good thing! I finished reading this chapter, and all I could say to myself was, "Damn! This is one jampacked chapter!" It's got dialogue = which I just loved, personality, characterization, plot, and of course, a cliff hanger! The description of Demetrius' apparel as he "flowed silently into the kitchen" = writing from an individual who surely knows "her stuff" about 18th century garb. Loved it!
Keep it coming!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Good Lord, Yvette!
Your imagination knows no bounds... and that, Friend, is a very good thing! I finished reading this chapter, and all I could say to myself was, "Damn! This is one jampacked chapter!" It's got dialogue = which I just loved, personality, characterization, plot, and of course, a cliff hanger! The description of Demetrius' apparel as he "flowed silently into the kitchen" = writing from an individual who surely knows "her stuff" about 18th century garb. Loved it!
Keep it coming!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Oh, gosh! I feel like I'm so far behind -- I do apologize for the tardiness of my response...exams were last week and grades were due yesterday....and I just got through my 'New Writing Online' messages! :) ;) Buried is a good word! ;) But I'm so very glad you enjoyed it -- my crazy characters all become special to me and I try to make them that way to everyone else! ;) :) So, the fact that you really are enjoying this just tickles a little part of me -- I get excited when I read reviews like yours!! ;) ;) Thank you, thank you! ;) ;) Now that the 'end of the quarter' is done and Spring Break is only a week away, I'm really hoping to get some more writing done! ;) I've got the next part of this about ready to go, though, so look for it sometime tomorrow! ;) ;) Thank you, again, Lady D, and have a great evening! :) Yvette
Comment from Loren .
Hi, Yvette. Since I just jumped in mid-stream, I'm in no way qualified to speak to how the plot of this story in unfolding. However, I can say I like the way you are bringing life, shape and color to you various characters via the use of dialogue, occasional tag lines and scene descriptions. Did stumble over the Irish dialect, but I guess it's like when you don't quite hear what someone has just said and need to ask them (or someone near by) "What? Glad to see you included a cast of characters - wish more writers would do the same. Only suggestion thus far, is that a synopsis be given of what's going on. It sounds like you've an outline handy to steady the course of your book. Good job! James
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Hi, Yvette. Since I just jumped in mid-stream, I'm in no way qualified to speak to how the plot of this story in unfolding. However, I can say I like the way you are bringing life, shape and color to you various characters via the use of dialogue, occasional tag lines and scene descriptions. Did stumble over the Irish dialect, but I guess it's like when you don't quite hear what someone has just said and need to ask them (or someone near by) "What? Glad to see you included a cast of characters - wish more writers would do the same. Only suggestion thus far, is that a synopsis be given of what's going on. It sounds like you've an outline handy to steady the course of your book. Good job! James
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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First, I do apologize for the tardiness of my response...exams were last week and grades were due yesterday! :) ;) Thanx for dropping in on this one, Loren -- glad you enjoyed this one. Please feel free to click over to my portfolio and read the previous chapters (you know, if the weather is awful and you have some coffee that needs to be consumed - LOL! ;) ;) And, about that synopsis --- it gets really involved with a Fantasy write like this one and the space they give you for it on the entry page is really, really small -- couldn't even fit a synopsis of one of the 'places of action' when I tried...sorry. :) :) Take care out there, and, again, it's great to hear from you again! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. There are always more surprises after someone died as what we could imagine. Most of the surprises are not very pleasant either and everyone seems troubled by these new developments.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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A very well-written chapter. There are always more surprises after someone died as what we could imagine. Most of the surprises are not very pleasant either and everyone seems troubled by these new developments.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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So glad you're hanging in there, Sandra -- your reviews are always good to read!! ;) ;) Take care and thanx for dropping by! ;) ;) Yvette
