Little Poems
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Comment from Pantygynt
This form seems very appropriate for expressing regret at a sudden passing. The repetitions, and reversals that continue rto express the same feeling somehow reflect the mental confusion that affects the survivors when this sort of thing occurs.
My sympathies for your loss in this instance.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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This form seems very appropriate for expressing regret at a sudden passing. The repetitions, and reversals that continue rto express the same feeling somehow reflect the mental confusion that affects the survivors when this sort of thing occurs.
My sympathies for your loss in this instance.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Thank you Jim. That is very kind of you . Yes, I thought the same about the format. Its reps and reversals we're what drew me for this.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Atrina poem in honor of your brother Richard who died suddenly and unexpectedly. We cannot say when our time will be up. We have to live daily as if it is our last day. If not said before, I am sorry to hear about your loss.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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A very well-written Atrina poem in honor of your brother Richard who died suddenly and unexpectedly. We cannot say when our time will be up. We have to live daily as if it is our last day. If not said before, I am sorry to hear about your loss.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Thank you Sandra. I appreciate your review and kind comments
Comment from Sugarray77
Excellent job on the execution of the Atrina form. It seems very complicated, but a good puzzle to figure out too. Well done and thanks for sharing this with us.
Melissa
P.S. - My condolences on the death of your brother.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Excellent job on the execution of the Atrina form. It seems very complicated, but a good puzzle to figure out too. Well done and thanks for sharing this with us.
Melissa
P.S. - My condolences on the death of your brother.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Thank you Sugarray.
Comment from Sally Law
A beautiful poem and tribute to your brother. I am deeply sorry for your loss. Your style of poetry, the Atrina, is unique. I am mostly a short works writer, but dabble in poetry. I just wrote a rhyming poem for the contest. Very well done.
All my best,
Sally :+)
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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A beautiful poem and tribute to your brother. I am deeply sorry for your loss. Your style of poetry, the Atrina, is unique. I am mostly a short works writer, but dabble in poetry. I just wrote a rhyming poem for the contest. Very well done.
All my best,
Sally :+)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Thank you Sally. I'm glad you liked it. I appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from damommy
I'm so sorry for your loss. I loss two dear ones recently, one my mother. You did a great job with the atrina form. Perfect as I'd expect from you. Your brother was a good-looking man, and yes, he looks unlikely for this to happen.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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I'm so sorry for your loss. I loss two dear ones recently, one my mother. You did a great job with the atrina form. Perfect as I'd expect from you. Your brother was a good-looking man, and yes, he looks unlikely for this to happen.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Thank you damommy, I miss him a lot. He was my best friend growing up.
Comment from Artasylum
Hey Treischel... this is truly sad and my condolences to you and your family... It is cute (girl observance) that he no longer wanted to be a Dick... I love his mustache/beard architecture... yours, diana
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Hey Treischel... this is truly sad and my condolences to you and your family... It is cute (girl observance) that he no longer wanted to be a Dick... I love his mustache/beard architecture... yours, diana
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Thanks again for a review with a touch of humor and a kind observation.
Comment from patcelaw
I am sorry you have see the death of siblings, I know how that is. I had 6 older siblings and now I am the oldest along with my twin brother. Our older siblings all passed before their 75 birthdays.
I enjoyed the poem in the format. Blessings for a good week.
Patricia
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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I am sorry you have see the death of siblings, I know how that is. I had 6 older siblings and now I am the oldest along with my twin brother. Our older siblings all passed before their 75 birthdays.
I enjoyed the poem in the format. Blessings for a good week.
Patricia
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thank you Patricia. Sorry for your losses as well. We certainly grew up when families were larger than today.
Comment from royowen
My younger brother like yours passed away a couple of years ago now, he had cancer, he was alone, separated from his wife, but still friends, so I know what you mean, he was 69, I still have two brothers and a sister.surviving, I miss him. A beautifully written tribute to him, Tom, the second of these in two days, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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My younger brother like yours passed away a couple of years ago now, he had cancer, he was alone, separated from his wife, but still friends, so I know what you mean, he was 69, I still have two brothers and a sister.surviving, I miss him. A beautifully written tribute to him, Tom, the second of these in two days, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thank you Roy. Sorry for your losses as well.
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Bless you Tom
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow, Treischel, a difficult form to follow here and yet you've created a beautiful tribute to your brother within its definitions -- wonderfully written! :) ;) Thank you for sharing your talent with us and thank you, too, for sharing a bit of Richard with all of us!;);)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Wow, Treischel, a difficult form to follow here and yet you've created a beautiful tribute to your brother within its definitions -- wonderfully written! :) ;) Thank you for sharing your talent with us and thank you, too, for sharing a bit of Richard with all of us!;);)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thank you Y M Roger. I appreciate your comforting words.
