Adventures at Daydream Lake Resort
Paddling your own canoe can be difficult.9 total reviews
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Excellent LisaMay,
I really enjoyed the story and I also agree with the perception that not every woman is cut out for housework. Whether your an athlete or a writer, sometimes cleaning can be offputting as a whole. I lived around someone with OCD, so I just do the bare minimums. Keep the toilets and showers clean, vacuum occasionally. I keep my bedroom tidy, and dishes out of the sink. Other than that - I don't care if there is clutter or dust on occasion. I really don't go hog wild over scrubbing every spec of dirt off the floor either. I love all the language you used. I also love the references you make and the way you present Maggie's thoughts. VIRTUAL SIX for me. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Excellent LisaMay,
I really enjoyed the story and I also agree with the perception that not every woman is cut out for housework. Whether your an athlete or a writer, sometimes cleaning can be offputting as a whole. I lived around someone with OCD, so I just do the bare minimums. Keep the toilets and showers clean, vacuum occasionally. I keep my bedroom tidy, and dishes out of the sink. Other than that - I don't care if there is clutter or dust on occasion. I really don't go hog wild over scrubbing every spec of dirt off the floor either. I love all the language you used. I also love the references you make and the way you present Maggie's thoughts. VIRTUAL SIX for me. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Hey what a terrific review! Thanks so very much. There is a lot of me in that Maggie character's attitudes (no wonder she is so nice hahah)
I am with you on the housework front.... I do the vacuuming mainly by hand... just pick up the lumps! As long as the house isn't life-threatening then there is always somethimg better to do. The OCD would be hard to be around for sure.
All the best, LM xx
Comment from Rachelle Allen
What a fun read this was! You kept it interesting with your descriptions, and your characters were excellent, as well. And, Romantic that I am, I liked the happily ever after ending. Good luck in the contest. You have my vote. xo
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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What a fun read this was! You kept it interesting with your descriptions, and your characters were excellent, as well. And, Romantic that I am, I liked the happily ever after ending. Good luck in the contest. You have my vote. xo
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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Well... they get married (unfortunately most of the wedding guests got food poisoning) and go to NZ for the Coast to Coast event... , he drowns, she falls off a cliff, the poet chokes on a golf ball, the Indian couple get trampled by a sacred cow back home. The mother-in-law is a psychotic harridan and was going to murder the young man anyway. Hmmm.. not so sure about happily ever after. Do you think I should rewrite the sequel I had in mind??
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Wow. I popped over to read the contest entries for judging-- not expecting much, truthfully. Shocked as I read your piece, soooo well written, perfectly paced and toned and offering a fabulous climax and satisfying conclusion.
Marvelous job, you!! I hardly expect any others to touch the hem of this garment. Much luck!!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Wow. I popped over to read the contest entries for judging-- not expecting much, truthfully. Shocked as I read your piece, soooo well written, perfectly paced and toned and offering a fabulous climax and satisfying conclusion.
Marvelous job, you!! I hardly expect any others to touch the hem of this garment. Much luck!!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Thanks so much for your generous review, Robyn. I am about to check them out myself so will be interested to see what is on offer. There are so many good writers though, and the voting is hit and miss I feel.
Comment from moongirlwriter
A nice twist to a great ending. So interesting how life takes a turn when we learn more about people. So glad Maggie learned early to add up the score and decided where she didn't want to be. She sounds lovely. There are a couple of places, one with dialogue that need grammatical attention but I'm sure if you read it out loud. . .you'll discover them. This story flows along nicely. Well-written.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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A nice twist to a great ending. So interesting how life takes a turn when we learn more about people. So glad Maggie learned early to add up the score and decided where she didn't want to be. She sounds lovely. There are a couple of places, one with dialogue that need grammatical attention but I'm sure if you read it out loud. . .you'll discover them. This story flows along nicely. Well-written.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thanks for the heads-up on some clunky dialogue... I'll revisit it and read aloud. Sometimes just leaving a piece for a few days then having another look makes the awkward parts jump out like they didn't before.
Another reviewer suggested this could be part of an extended story, continuing with the characters through to Maggie's and Andrew's wedding and beyond.... I could put things about NZ in the story, where they went for their honeymoon.
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So many possibilities.
Comment from WryWriter
This story is absolutely fantastic. I really enjoyed reading it. Perhaps these characters would be a start to a romance novel? Lengthen the experiences and have the ending a marriage to the chef? You have a novel here...just make a middle. LOL!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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This story is absolutely fantastic. I really enjoyed reading it. Perhaps these characters would be a start to a romance novel? Lengthen the experiences and have the ending a marriage to the chef? You have a novel here...just make a middle. LOL!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Woweee! Thanks so much for the glowing review and your suggestion of lengthening it to be a novel. I was concentrating my efforts on making an interesting story, so was a bit close to the action to see what you can see: its potential for further development.
Comment from Anne Mabley
This is a well written story. It is the type of circumstances that many women can relate to. It can be hard when you can paddle your own canoe. I'm glad it shows a happy ending to not compromising.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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This is a well written story. It is the type of circumstances that many women can relate to. It can be hard when you can paddle your own canoe. I'm glad it shows a happy ending to not compromising.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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hello Anne,
thanks for your generous review. I wanted to keep Maggie as a strong character. That Ken had no empathy... he had to go.
I agree with you that paddling your own canoe makes most guys either feel threatened or just leave you to get on with it alone, rather than paddling alongside... or they want to take over and capsize your boat.
I didn't want Maggie to be a stereotype rebound situation, looking like she could only exist if she had a man, but I made Andrew such a great fit for her it was natural for them to get together, plus he really appreciated her right from the start.
Comment from Sugarray77
I liked your story and all of the unique things you included in it. It is very well written with flair for dramatic dialogue. Great job on this and good luck in the contest.
Melissa
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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I liked your story and all of the unique things you included in it. It is very well written with flair for dramatic dialogue. Great job on this and good luck in the contest.
Melissa
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much for these supportive comments Melissa. I am glad you mention the dialogue as that is something I am trying to explore in my writing.
Comment from kiwijenny
Cool cool cool story . I,liked how two completely different people can look at a thing and come to such different conclusions...I also think Maggie could be the better writer because she loves people
Well,penned
God bless
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Cool cool cool story . I,liked how two completely different people can look at a thing and come to such different conclusions...I also think Maggie could be the better writer because she loves people
Well,penned
God bless
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much for your review Jenny.
I wanted to show how different perspectives can be misleading if empathy is lacking.
I was a bit cruel to poets by making Ken one when he is so lacking in empathy. I wanted him to be a very different character to lovely Maggie... she shouldn't have been with him in the first place so I am very glad I invented the chef for her.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Dear Anonymous Author,
Thank you for sharing this charming tale of how things can turn upside down. Your entry for the Honeymoon contest is well-written, and you've told a complete story with a proper beginning, middle, and end.
I wish you luck in the contest,
~Mustang Patty~
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Dear Anonymous Author,
Thank you for sharing this charming tale of how things can turn upside down. Your entry for the Honeymoon contest is well-written, and you've told a complete story with a proper beginning, middle, and end.
I wish you luck in the contest,
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thanks for the review. I tried to concentrate on the story-telling aspect of the situations, linking them to actually make a continuous story. It could have been a series of small stories, but I went for the longer one.
