Renaissance of Enchantment
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Chapter Three, Part 4"It was their world long before our existence...
17 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
WOW...I think all the rest of the chapters deserve a six. Alas, we are allowed so few. This was definitely riveting and expertly presented. The tension is building quickly. I may have read more chapters than planned today. lol
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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WOW...I think all the rest of the chapters deserve a six. Alas, we are allowed so few. This was definitely riveting and expertly presented. The tension is building quickly. I may have read more chapters than planned today. lol
Comment Written 25-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Okay, so you just made my entire week -- what a wonderful thing to say!! ;) I am so very glad they're keeping you company as you get caught up, Janet -- take care and thanx!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Diana L Crawford
So good! I can hardly put it down! Now I understand how Maggie fits into the picture! Intriguing story to say the least and your writing g superb in detailing the story! I love it. I'll be back again to read more! Hmm... canine tooth, oh my Demetrius must be a... well I won't spoil it for myself. Haha. xoxo
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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So good! I can hardly put it down! Now I understand how Maggie fits into the picture! Intriguing story to say the least and your writing g superb in detailing the story! I love it. I'll be back again to read more! Hmm... canine tooth, oh my Demetrius must be a... well I won't spoil it for myself. Haha. xoxo
Comment Written 22-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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You are so awesome, Diana!! THANK YOU!! How are the store shelves up there? This craziness has to end soon (or I might go crazy before you!). Everything I do has been (is being) converted to online... see? High School students can't afford to lose ground so we're plowing forward with YouTube and more... but what a hassle!! ;) Just give me a good ole fashion classroom any day!! ;) You take care and I promise we'll be laughing at this some day!! ;) Yvette :)
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Still scarce TP but frozen section and meats restocked a bit this morning but that won?t last long. Produce better and bread good for moment. I can?t tell you when last time I shopped on a Thursday morning was! Haha! I?m going out now to help teach my gg son how to play T-ball so at least I?ll be active haha! Sending love and prayers!! xoxo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Are they fighting over the estate? This woman was just laid to rest....oh the vicious lady who appeared out of no where sure can have a tone of vengeance, can't she?
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Are they fighting over the estate? This woman was just laid to rest....oh the vicious lady who appeared out of no where sure can have a tone of vengeance, can't she?
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Oh, she's trouble all right.....
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
There is no need to answer all of these reviews. I am just catching up. Just delete them all.
The plot continues to thicken. The keg is lit and smoldering.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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There is no need to answer all of these reviews. I am just catching up. Just delete them all.
The plot continues to thicken. The keg is lit and smoldering.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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LOL! :)
Comment from Sankey
Wow! Very dramatic. Accurate portrayal of evil for sure. This gets more and more interesting as we progress. One wonders just what Marguerite is getting herself into. No spags.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Wow! Very dramatic. Accurate portrayal of evil for sure. This gets more and more interesting as we progress. One wonders just what Marguerite is getting herself into. No spags.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Thank you so very much!! ;) ;) So glad you're enjoying! ;)
Comment from JudyE
Well, this chapter is very different. I must say you have a great imagination!
I picked up a few points:
The both of them raised their eyes to focus on the figures approaching along the front walk - delete 'the'
he had less than nothing to say to this dark bitch tonight as his anger brewed inside of him - delete 'of', maybe even 'of him'
He breathed in and out to control his arousal the female's scent physically induced - maybe 'the arousal' rather than 'his arousal'
its hair on end along its spine as it bared its rows of sharp teeth - maybe 'it bared rows of sharp teeth'
and anyone who dares provide safe harbor to your kind against us will pay dearly - I might have made it 'and anyone who dares provide safe harbor against us to your kind will pay dearly'
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Well, this chapter is very different. I must say you have a great imagination!
I picked up a few points:
The both of them raised their eyes to focus on the figures approaching along the front walk - delete 'the'
he had less than nothing to say to this dark bitch tonight as his anger brewed inside of him - delete 'of', maybe even 'of him'
He breathed in and out to control his arousal the female's scent physically induced - maybe 'the arousal' rather than 'his arousal'
its hair on end along its spine as it bared its rows of sharp teeth - maybe 'it bared rows of sharp teeth'
and anyone who dares provide safe harbor to your kind against us will pay dearly - I might have made it 'and anyone who dares provide safe harbor against us to your kind will pay dearly'
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Added to the file, ma'am -- so good to have you having my back, yeah? :) ;) Take care, Lady Judy, and enjoy the week ahead! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Yvette,
Ooooh - intriguing story here, my friend. And exceptionally well written, as always. Nothing here to suggest improving upon.
As I am coming in mid-story, I really appreciate your author notes.
You have done a great job with Demetrius's unique dialect.
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Hi Yvette,
Ooooh - intriguing story here, my friend. And exceptionally well written, as always. Nothing here to suggest improving upon.
As I am coming in mid-story, I really appreciate your author notes.
You have done a great job with Demetrius's unique dialect.
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Thanx so much for dropping in on this one, Jan -- it is definitely getting interesting! ;) ;) Thanx for keeping up with our folks here -- take care, Jan, and know that you are appreciated, friend! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written interesting chapter. When it gets dark all the animals and creatures of the dark seem to crawl out of their hiding places and waste non time to take over control.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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A very well-written interesting chapter. When it gets dark all the animals and creatures of the dark seem to crawl out of their hiding places and waste non time to take over control.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this installment Sandra - and so very appreciative for your keeping up with the story! ;) ;) Take care over there! :) :) Yvette
Comment from royowen
As I figured there is something supernatural going on here. Duh! Peader is confronted by a witch of Hecate order, but cannot enter the refuge, because of Rosemary's wards guarding the place. I love the appearance of Demetrius, and then his disappearance after. But I wonder why the visit from the witch. Well done, I've never read anything quite like this, with great characters. Yvette, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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As I figured there is something supernatural going on here. Duh! Peader is confronted by a witch of Hecate order, but cannot enter the refuge, because of Rosemary's wards guarding the place. I love the appearance of Demetrius, and then his disappearance after. But I wonder why the visit from the witch. Well done, I've never read anything quite like this, with great characters. Yvette, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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thanx for dropping by on this one, Roy -- you know, I like to keep your life interesting!! ;) ;) So good to hear from you as it's been a heckuva week round here - ugh!! ;) ;) Thanx for keeping up with the story -- shooting for Monday on the next installment....but, at this rate, that is certainly not a promise! ;) ;) Take care over there! ;) Yvette :)
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Well done
Comment from susand3022
Longer... too long??? really????? Come on!!! I only just got started Yvette and I have to stop... again!!! I can't take this!!!! I have an idea for those of us who just want to read this at our leisure... Just go ahead and drop all of the chapters at once... then promote one a week for those who have to read in serial form! I don't want to have to wait to see what happens next!!!! It's like having to wait for Jean Auel! LOL
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Longer... too long??? really????? Come on!!! I only just got started Yvette and I have to stop... again!!! I can't take this!!!! I have an idea for those of us who just want to read this at our leisure... Just go ahead and drop all of the chapters at once... then promote one a week for those who have to read in serial form! I don't want to have to wait to see what happens next!!!! It's like having to wait for Jean Auel! LOL
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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You so funny -- you have to remember, though, that I only have so much of this written already....it is still a work in progress so, there's only so much that's there until the next time I have a block of time (or the strong desire to break away from all this teaching stuff! lol!) to write some more. I am shooting for Monday on the next installment....but, at this rate, that is certainly not a promise! ;) ;) Take care! ;) Yvette :)
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It's almost March honey!!! Hang in there! April vacation is just around the corner!!! If they make you too crazy, send the little peons home with a shitload of homework for break!!!!! LOL
