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The Potentate Plummets

A moral fable repurposed for our times.

8 total reviews 
Comment from HealingMuse
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ROFLMAO!

This is a great write, with a great moral lesson. Sounds like teflon humpty falling off his wall. LOL

You have crafted a great contest entry here. Best of luck in the booth.

Thanks for sharing,

Jan

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
    You will have to explain what this means please: ROFLMAO!
    I do not live in the States so I miss out on a lot of news and opinion and have to make up my own. You are totally accurate about teflon humpty and the wall; what a farce, an easy target for morality jibes.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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You did NOT go here. Oyyyy! You shameless, hilarious mystery writer, you! Well, I'm going to stop reading any more. You get my vote because it is EVERYTHING a fable is supposed to be, plus so very much more. I'm out of six stars, so I'm going to put my money where my mouth is and promote this one because I want to be sure others get a good laugh today, too. Good luck. If you don't win this contest, the fix must be in; that's all I can say on that subject.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
    Yep, that's me. Shameless. I do so very much appreciate your personal boost of this story... it has stepped up the 2nd as of this hour so I owe you much credit for that.
Comment from mmonaghan777
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Hahahahahaha!!! That was good! I couldn't figure out which way it was going and I was angry at the potentate but they always get their comupens. (my word)

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
    I'm glad you got a chuckle for the day. The old saying "ride goeth before a fall" has many true examples.
    Thanks very much for reviewing.
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
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This was an adorable fable. How clever of you to come up with it! Loved the moral of the story. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. You should do very well!

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
    Thank you for reviewing and your supportive comments. I have noticed that very few people vote in these contests. I try to involve myself in voting for all the booths even though i might not have entered, just to support the other writers.
    (Living in Hawaii must be nice ... very scenic. I've never been but it certainly appeals.)
reply by Stephanie Launiu on 20-Feb-2019
    Yes, I try to vote in every contest if I can. And I don't have time to enter most of them, but I learn just by reading what others post. Yours was especially funny though. Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
    It seems that we have a similar attitude to contests Stephanie. I love reading how other writers respond to a topic. I am an artist and i enjoy seeing exhibitions where different artists paint the same scene; everyone is so individual.
Comment from Debra White
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Oh this is good!
Great wit and humour and what a very clever moral to end your story.
I do enjoy word play :)
I hope that when the Potentate fell from his lofty throne, he didn't make a mess of his hair....hmm
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
    Gee, could we be thinking of the same person??
    Thanks so much for reviewing my moral tale.
reply by Debra White on 17-Feb-2019
    Seems we could be!
    You?re welcome :)
Comment from JanPerry
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I haven't heard of a potentate. Surely to build a grass house wouldn't work.

I've seen the hay barns and houses. They are the cheapest to buy on earth. The hay is kept tight by tying together to look like bricks. They have no air so are fire resistant. Plaster is laid on each side.
It sounds like a preposterous fable to me.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
    That's the great thing about reviewing other writers... we learn new stuff.
    I am glad you got the point that it is a preposterous fable. When I poke fun I don't take things too literally.
Comment from JudyE
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Oh yeah! Way to go! That is very clever. I wondered what was going to happen. He had to be riding for a fall. A very clever, funny piece. I suppose he ended up with grass stains on his fabulous clothes. Good luck with this.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
    Yes, he got a 'grassy arse', thank you. (No Mexicans were harmed)
Comment from djsaxon
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Awesome. Really well crafted and the cynic in me is obliged to give you a standing ovation. The moral is classic cleverness. Absolutely made my day after wading through and refusing to review highly paid crap. Thank you. My Sunday is already complete. Cheers - DJ

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
    And you have made my day! Thank you so much for being on the same wave length as me. There sure is a lot of wading to do.