Renaissance of Enchantment
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Chapter Three, Part 3"It was their world long before our existence...
17 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
Super chapter. I really like Koko--hope he does not turn out to be a bad guy. You never know about those things until there is a major revelation. Demetrius is something else entirely...just do not know what. Yet. :-)
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Super chapter. I really like Koko--hope he does not turn out to be a bad guy. You never know about those things until there is a major revelation. Demetrius is something else entirely...just do not know what. Yet. :-)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Oh, you're right..... you just never know... ;) :) :) Wink, wink. And what lovely stars, Janet -- that was a great pick-me-up for the gray, drizzly day over here!! ;) So glad you're enjoying and THANK YOU again! ;) Yvette
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
So glad that Maggie's name was not mentioned but finding out that is who they are searching for. I hope they find her so she can at last have some property she can call home and her own.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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So glad that Maggie's name was not mentioned but finding out that is who they are searching for. I hope they find her so she can at last have some property she can call home and her own.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Yep... :) :)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
There is no need to answer all of these reviews. I am just catching up. Just delete them all.
Demetrius definitely has something up his sleeve and it wil be interesting to watch this develop.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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There is no need to answer all of these reviews. I am just catching up. Just delete them all.
Demetrius definitely has something up his sleeve and it wil be interesting to watch this develop.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Hmmm... dark, mysterious Demetrius... ;)
Comment from Sankey
More queer goings-on still getting a handle on these apparent "possessors" of the Refuge if I am not wrong. no spags and still got me in there. FS wants more blurb as usual.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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More queer goings-on still getting a handle on these apparent "possessors" of the Refuge if I am not wrong. no spags and still got me in there. FS wants more blurb as usual.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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LOL! :) Understood about the blurb... thanx! ;)
Comment from JudyE
This is getting really interesting.
Just one suggestion:
Stephen and his team think they have located a young lady that fits just about all of our search criteria living in The Bronx - I might have written this as 'Stephen and his team think they have located a young lady living in The Bronx that fits just about all of our search criteria'
Cheers
Judy
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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This is getting really interesting.
Just one suggestion:
Stephen and his team think they have located a young lady that fits just about all of our search criteria living in The Bronx - I might have written this as 'Stephen and his team think they have located a young lady living in The Bronx that fits just about all of our search criteria'
Cheers
Judy
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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You are too awesome, Lady Judy! :) Thank you, THANK YOU! :) Yvette
Comment from Teresa Alford
Another good chapter. I may have missed one or so before. It. I will go back and catch up. I don't want to miss a thing. Thanks for writing. TA. ";-)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Another good chapter. I may have missed one or so before. It. I will go back and catch up. I don't want to miss a thing. Thanks for writing. TA. ";-)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Be sure to catch up, TA -- would love to have you along for the ride! ;) ;) Thanx for the review on this part! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Got to love a guy with the name Demetrius who has mind control! A whole another layer for sure - so leaving Huntsville for the Bronx I hope? I am going to go crazy looking through my inbox for word of the next chapter it's like crack!!! Please publish this book!!! Do a series of these characters backgrounds cause they are cool on their own for sure!!! That is when you have some time. Lol okay I'll leave you alone - you have spring break to look forward to - and graduation first I know! It's really good though! Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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Got to love a guy with the name Demetrius who has mind control! A whole another layer for sure - so leaving Huntsville for the Bronx I hope? I am going to go crazy looking through my inbox for word of the next chapter it's like crack!!! Please publish this book!!! Do a series of these characters backgrounds cause they are cool on their own for sure!!! That is when you have some time. Lol okay I'll leave you alone - you have spring break to look forward to - and graduation first I know! It's really good though! Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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You have no idea what this review means to me, Fonda -- the fact that you enjoyed enough to read through all of the posts and still want more...just wow! Thank you so much for the 'shot in the arm' this morning! ;) ;) And, you are funny with the backgrounds... you know, in my mind, they already have their own complete backstories that brought them here so, who knows? If this actually gets popular, it's definitely something that would just be a matter of time to find to them! ;) :) I'm hoping to get another installment out by Wednesday, so keep an eye out -- Not crack, mind you, but much, MUCH more mysterious and mind-altering! ;) :) Just you wait... :) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
Demetrius is a sweetheart. I wonder what will happen to Marguerite's dad for abandoning her at an orphanage and getting a receipt for a child. Can't wait to read your next post Yvette. I saw it in my messages. thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Demetrius is a sweetheart. I wonder what will happen to Marguerite's dad for abandoning her at an orphanage and getting a receipt for a child. Can't wait to read your next post Yvette. I saw it in my messages. thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Demetrius without question is my favorite...not sure if the author's supposed to have a fav, but he's mine! :) And, without letting too much out of the bag, I want to thank you for being the first to pick up on something in this one...thanx so much for reading, sir!! ;) :) Hope y'all are having less rain over there...pretty sure we'll wash away by the end of the week over here - LOL! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from aryr
A good binding chapter Yvette, it starts the tying together of Marguerite's life and that of the 'refuge'. This also shows that life should really get interesting for all those involved. This was well done, it had a comfortable reading flow while still maintaining a sense of mystery. Very enjoyable to read and follow.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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A good binding chapter Yvette, it starts the tying together of Marguerite's life and that of the 'refuge'. This also shows that life should really get interesting for all those involved. This was well done, it had a comfortable reading flow while still maintaining a sense of mystery. Very enjoyable to read and follow.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I sure hope it gets interesting! ;) :) Thank you so much for the wonderful review and your encouraging comments, ma'am -- so good to hear your take on things! ;) :) Have a great week! ;) ;) Yvette
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You are so welcome
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Yvette,
Great conversation in the bar. I think we learned a great deal about the characters of Geoffrey and Demetrius in the exchange.
a few notes:
'Geoffrey noticed Koko's countenance was back to hiswarm usual presence...' The modifier is in the wrong order, should be usual warm.
' No emotion in Demetrius' voice this time. None.' The first sentence is a fragment. Are you doing this to emphasize the point?
'"Anyway, it seems there were clerical errors+, and then a missing agent and caseworker and, well, they have no actual record of -" Missing comma in a compound sentence.
'The cold+, menacing tone in Demetrius' voice had returned.' The comma is missing from between the coordinating adjectives.
'Of course+, he would give that information to Demetrius.' Missing comma after an introductory phrase.
I'm enjoying the storyline and I look forward to the next chapter,
~MP~
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Hi, Yvette,
Great conversation in the bar. I think we learned a great deal about the characters of Geoffrey and Demetrius in the exchange.
a few notes:
'Geoffrey noticed Koko's countenance was back to his
' No emotion in Demetrius' voice this time. None.' The first sentence is a fragment. Are you doing this to emphasize the point?
'"Anyway, it seems there were clerical errors+, and then a missing agent and caseworker and, well, they have no actual record of -" Missing comma in a compound sentence.
'The cold+, menacing tone in Demetrius' voice had returned.' The comma is missing from between the coordinating adjectives.
'Of course+, he would give that information to Demetrius.' Missing comma after an introductory phrase.
I'm enjoying the storyline and I look forward to the next chapter,
~MP~
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thanx for the review and the helpful notes, MP -- much appreciated. Glad you are enjoying so far. :) :) Yvette
