When We Fell In Love
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your 575 poem, Melissa. Good job on its style--the syllable count is correct per line. The picture is great, too. I hope this is biographical. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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I enjoyed your 575 poem, Melissa. Good job on its style--the syllable count is correct per line. The picture is great, too. I hope this is biographical. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much, Jan.
Melissa
Comment from MissMerri
Yes!! You've described it perfectly! (Have we met?) I do like this 5-7-5 very much and think it is a great vote-magnet. It is poetic and real and imaginative all at once. Nice work, and I hope I'm right about the votes. MM
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Yes!! You've described it perfectly! (Have we met?) I do like this 5-7-5 very much and think it is a great vote-magnet. It is poetic and real and imaginative all at once. Nice work, and I hope I'm right about the votes. MM
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much, Adonna. I wanted to give a nod to Valentines Day and thought this contest might do the trick. I do appreciate the read and review.
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a delightful, loving poem. This could be on a Hallmark Valentine's Day card. I would buy it. It is the truth as well. When you first fall in love, it does feel like the earth is shaking.
Good job.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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What a delightful, loving poem. This could be on a Hallmark Valentine's Day card. I would buy it. It is the truth as well. When you first fall in love, it does feel like the earth is shaking.
Good job.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much!
Comment from sfharper
Falling in love on the 4th of July? lol, I get your meaning well, good use of the 5-7-5 format, good imagery in the poem and good affects on the senses. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Falling in love on the 4th of July? lol, I get your meaning well, good use of the 5-7-5 format, good imagery in the poem and good affects on the senses. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much for the review.
Comment from JudyE
This really spoke to me. This doesn't feel contrived at all as some of the set syllable poems sometimes do. I've been married almost 48 years and still have these feelings. I love your poem.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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This really spoke to me. This doesn't feel contrived at all as some of the set syllable poems sometimes do. I've been married almost 48 years and still have these feelings. I love your poem.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much for the review.
Comment from Miss Sherry
Wow! When I fell in love my husband, all I could think was, "Thank goodness, he has hair!" I love this sweet poem and the beautiful artwork. Good luck in the contest, this should be a good entry.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Wow! When I fell in love my husband, all I could think was, "Thank goodness, he has hair!" I love this sweet poem and the beautiful artwork. Good luck in the contest, this should be a good entry.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much, Sherry.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the first time we fall in love when we see the stars in the sky falling down on us. It is one of the most wonderful emotions to be in love.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the first time we fall in love when we see the stars in the sky falling down on us. It is one of the most wonderful emotions to be in love.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Ogden
I have a suggestion for a word change that I hope you'll see would make a meaningful improvement: Remove the comma, and replace 'this' with 'says', and, voila! - you have a declaration of love from your heart.
Good luck in the contest!
Don
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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I have a suggestion for a word change that I hope you'll see would make a meaningful improvement: Remove the comma, and replace 'this' with 'says', and, voila! - you have a declaration of love from your heart.
Good luck in the contest!
Don
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much!
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You're very welcome.
Don
Comment from Jennifer Carr
Well done on this 5-7-5 poem. The syllables are there and the poem matches the title nicely. The bursting heart goes nicely with the picture. This little piece made my heart happy. Good job :)
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Well done on this 5-7-5 poem. The syllables are there and the poem matches the title nicely. The bursting heart goes nicely with the picture. This little piece made my heart happy. Good job :)
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you very much.
Comment from meeshu
this short poem is delightful. You have done a fine job with this, your phrasing is terrific. an excellent entry into the contest, good luck..
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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this short poem is delightful. You have done a fine job with this, your phrasing is terrific. an excellent entry into the contest, good luck..
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you very much.
