Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thank you for letting us know that no photographers were endangered in taking the picture! I also appreciated your notes on the form, which is so complex. I particularly enjoyed your use of the first person and dialect for immediacy, plus the alliteration. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019

Thank you Joan. The complexity turns you inside out keeping track of everything.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written interesting poem about the bear that meets his end when a hunter shoot him on a hubting trip the format Droighneach serns to be quite a challenge to complete.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019

Thank you Sandra. It definitely is very hard. I still don't think I got it completely right.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Thank you so much for this brilliant example of a touch of the blarney. With your permission I shall feature this in Friday's rhyme class as we are just coming to grips with cross rhyme. We are using the schemata you use here with x marks the syllable and some other letter marks the treasure (rhyme).

Unfortunately I have just used up my last 6 for the week otherwise this would have had it as it well deserves.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019

Thank you Jim. You certainly can. This is a pretty tough one to achieve, as there are so many things to keep track of. In looking at it again. I didn't get the rhyming correct on lines 6,7, and 8. For example, in the second stanza, line 6's end-rhyme should rhyme with remember, then line 7 should carry the matching cross-rhyme. I've been wracking my brain since I posted it, trying to figure out how to fix it. I just can't, without completely changing it. So I'll have to write another one to get it right. one can so easily get lost in all the "thorny" detail.

Comment from C. Gale Burnett

Exceptional

Oh, my goodness ... you are a genius! To create a Droighneach poem, writing in the Gaelic verse form seems, seems to be as complicated as you can get. I would have to say you nailed it, trusting that you did so because the difficult instructions you cited went straight over my head.
As for the Irish poem ... what a delightful and fun read. I loved your use of the Irish dialect, and I felt as if I were in the pub itself, listening to some grand hunt story.
Great photography, I might add :)
This was wonderful; I am so glad I stumbled upon your poem :)
Gale

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019

Thank you C Gale Burnett. I am delighted that you enjoyed the story, and took note of the complex format. Indeed, these are not easy to write. I appreciate your review and comments, as well as the stars,

Comment from 24chas

Excellent

I enjoyed this piece very much, Treischel. The implied accent in the words made it really appealing to read and I could really enjoy the story. Nice job and keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019

Thank you 24chas, I appreciate your review and comments.

Comment from trimple

Excellent

Good evening, Tom

This poem appears to be rather complex in style. Even after reading your notes, I was left in a daze lol

The story though is super, and I dare say, may well have happened at some point :)

I saw the picture and initially thought, Oh blimey, our Tom is really taking this photography to new limits!


thank you for sharing

much love

tracey

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019

Thank you Tracy. That would have been too close.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

This gave me a headache trying to decipher the Irish
Droighneach form....what about a limerick
T'was once a she bear from Alaska
If you don't believe me just ask her
This hunter got tangled
Thought he'd get mangled
But bloody well shot and unmasked her
Simple is all I can manage
God bless

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019

Thank you kiwijenny, I like that You should post it.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Well done Tom. What a wonderful picture of a magnificent animal. I have been to a Cabello's in Utah. It is quite a place with their stuffed animal displays and the Aquarium room you can walk in to see aquarium's on both sides. Nice story in a poem. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019

Thank you Nancy. Yes, it is an interesting place to shop and is a destination in itself.

Comment from damommy

Excellent

The picture looks real, so I was surprised when you said it wasn't.

I can see this is difficult form, but you have mastered it, as far as I can tell, with a very entertaining story.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019

Thank you damommy. I am glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I do enjoy a good tale, Tom, and some of those told in bars are the best. This was very funny, when he thought he'd be a gonna, his bullet ricochet after he was trapped in the roots of the tree and killed the bear. Yes, that was indeed providence! LOL Well done, that photo really looks real! :) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019

Thank you Sandra. Glad you liked my story. It's an awesome bear.