stars pierce the heavens
5/7/5 poem61 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
I like the idea of stars piercing the heavens, it's very original. I also like the fact that you consider them jewels. Opulent jewels.
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
I like the idea of stars piercing the heavens, it's very original. I also like the fact that you consider them jewels. Opulent jewels.
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you Maria for your encouraging review and good wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from seaglass
Ah yes, no where but in the mountains can one experience this scene. The high altitude and absence of city lights and the missing glow of head lights make the stars an impressive light show. Your short verse captures that moment of awe.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
Ah yes, no where but in the mountains can one experience this scene. The high altitude and absence of city lights and the missing glow of head lights make the stars an impressive light show. Your short verse captures that moment of awe.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging review. The high altitude here in the mountains and lack of other lights does make for an impressive light show when the stars come out.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from sfharper
I like the concrete specificity of the first two lines showing that the poem is one of witness, with the concluding effect on yourself, the ideas of being made much richer. Good work, enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
I like the concrete specificity of the first two lines showing that the poem is one of witness, with the concluding effect on yourself, the ideas of being made much richer. Good work, enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging review. I'm so pleased that your liked this one.'
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a stellar poem! Your little 5-7-5 is filled with beautiful imagery. I love the word choices, "pierce and jeweled." You have a well-written and nicely formatted contest entry. I wish you lots of luck.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
What a stellar poem! Your little 5-7-5 is filled with beautiful imagery. I love the word choices, "pierce and jeweled." You have a well-written and nicely formatted contest entry. I wish you lots of luck.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you Cindy for your encouraging review. I'm so pleased that your liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Janet. This is a nicely composed 5-7-5, well described. Looking up at the stars, especially in winter seems to give crystal clarity. Good luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
Hi Janet. This is a nicely composed 5-7-5, well described. Looking up at the stars, especially in winter seems to give crystal clarity. Good luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you Marilyn for your encouraging review. I'm so pleased that your liked this one.'
Blessings
Janet
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi JM,
What a lovely 5-7-5!
I absolutely love your last line and concur. Indeed the stars through the mountain pines is absolutely jeweled opulence! (I'd lived in Asheville for a few years.)
I see nothing amiss here to suggest improving upon.
Thank you for sharing,
Jan
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
Hi JM,
What a lovely 5-7-5!
I absolutely love your last line and concur. Indeed the stars through the mountain pines is absolutely jeweled opulence! (I'd lived in Asheville for a few years.)
I see nothing amiss here to suggest improving upon.
Thank you for sharing,
Jan
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you Jan for your encouraging review. I'm so pleased that your liked this one.
We have been here in the Asheville are for almost 15 years and love the mountains. However, our extended family moved east and so I'm not sure what the future has in store for us. As we are getting older, I miss having the family being close.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Liberty Justice
What a lovely way to describe star filled night and glowing stars. Gives religious and spiritual tone and sense of real mystery to behold. Really read mine also.lolol liberty justice
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
What a lovely way to describe star filled night and glowing stars. Gives religious and spiritual tone and sense of real mystery to behold. Really read mine also.lolol liberty justice
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging review. I'm so pleased that your liked this one.'
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Cindy Warren
This is lovely. I think you have a possible winner here. My computer isn't working right and I can't see the picture, but I can still imagine those stars seen through the pines. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
This is lovely. I think you have a possible winner here. My computer isn't working right and I can't see the picture, but I can still imagine those stars seen through the pines. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you Cindy for your encouraging review. I'm so pleased that your liked this one. Aren't computers "great". haha :)))
Blessings
Janet
Comment from tbacha58
Perfectly described with this most beautiful phrase. The picture made me want to keep writing how amazing is that discovery of a picture, that gave you the feeling to write and share with us. Good luck. Terry
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
Perfectly described with this most beautiful phrase. The picture made me want to keep writing how amazing is that discovery of a picture, that gave you the feeling to write and share with us. Good luck. Terry
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you Terry for your encouraging review. I'm so pleased that your liked this one. The picture certainly was an inspiration.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from patcelaw
The wording in this is excellent and conjures up a lovely picture in my mind. Good luck in the contest with this great work. Patricia
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
The wording in this is excellent and conjures up a lovely picture in my mind. Good luck in the contest with this great work. Patricia
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you Patricia for your encouraging review and extra special sixth star. I'm so pleased that your liked this one.'
Blessings
Janet