stars pierce the heavens
5/7/5 poem61 total reviews
Comment from meeshu
Your writing is smooth and has such an easy flow to it. I like "Jeweled Opulence", such a great phrase.. Very well done, Janet..................meeshu
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Your writing is smooth and has such an easy flow to it. I like "Jeweled Opulence", such a great phrase.. Very well done, Janet..................meeshu
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you meeshu for your encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you,
Blessings
Janet
Comment from rspoet
Hello Janet,
You've written a very fine 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with excellent connection in the first two lines and wonderful imagery
of the heavens and the pines. Using the present tense enhances the impact.
The third line is an excellent extension of the first two
much like a satori in a haiku (which this 5-7-5 poem also is)
Excellent picture to match
Well done
This should be competitive in the contest
Best wishes to you
Robert
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Hello Janet,
You've written a very fine 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with excellent connection in the first two lines and wonderful imagery
of the heavens and the pines. Using the present tense enhances the impact.
The third line is an excellent extension of the first two
much like a satori in a haiku (which this 5-7-5 poem also is)
Excellent picture to match
Well done
This should be competitive in the contest
Best wishes to you
Robert
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Robert for your encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you,
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation, Janet.
-The syllable count is good.
-The imagery is effective and
creates a vivid word picture.
-I like the concluding, satori
like line that relates nicely
to the stars and majestic mountains.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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-Very nice image and presentation, Janet.
-The syllable count is good.
-The imagery is effective and
creates a vivid word picture.
-I like the concluding, satori
like line that relates nicely
to the stars and majestic mountains.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Pam for your thoughtful review. It's my pleasure to hear from you,
Blessings
Janet
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You are very welcome, Janet.
Comment from nancyjam
Beautiful imagery in your 5-7-5 contest entry.
The clear night sky seen through the pines can be
breath taking.
I think you captured it perfectly.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Beautiful imagery in your 5-7-5 contest entry.
The clear night sky seen through the pines can be
breath taking.
I think you captured it perfectly.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Nancy for your encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you,
Blessings
Janet
Comment from LisaMay
Lovely image of the trees reaching skywards in majestic praise of the starlit sky above, opulently bejewelled.
I love camping and the night sky in an area of less light pollution from cities is indeed spectacular.
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Lovely image of the trees reaching skywards in majestic praise of the starlit sky above, opulently bejewelled.
I love camping and the night sky in an area of less light pollution from cities is indeed spectacular.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Lisa May for your encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you,
Blessings
Janet
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You are very welcome Janet
Comment from James W. Reynolds
Nice work. I like that you avoided a rhyme scheme and, instead, focused on alliteration. With such a short poem, word choice is hugely important, and I love your use of "jeweled opulence" to describe the night sky. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Nice work. I like that you avoided a rhyme scheme and, instead, focused on alliteration. With such a short poem, word choice is hugely important, and I love your use of "jeweled opulence" to describe the night sky. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you James for your encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Suzie Q
Well said! Perfect photo for your poem. I know hard it is to express yourself with such limitations but you had no problem here. I also like the alliteration of majestic mountain. So descriptive it made the photo a bonus instead of a necessity. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Well said! Perfect photo for your poem. I know hard it is to express yourself with such limitations but you had no problem here. I also like the alliteration of majestic mountain. So descriptive it made the photo a bonus instead of a necessity. Well done!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Suzie for your encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from l.raven
Hi Janet, and I would bet somewhere out there...there is a bright shining moon...I love your poem sweet girl...it is truly magical...I would love to have been the one who took the picture...amazing...very nicely written my sweet friend....love you...Linda xxoo
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Hi Janet, and I would bet somewhere out there...there is a bright shining moon...I love your poem sweet girl...it is truly magical...I would love to have been the one who took the picture...amazing...very nicely written my sweet friend....love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Linda for your encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you my friend.
Blessings
Janet
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you are so welcome sweet girl...Blessings to you as well...love you...xxoo
Comment from royowen
A wonderful entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest Janet, it's a marvellous thing and gift that the Lord has given us to enjoy. They were all meant as a gift to us, to display His majesty, and a wonder to us. Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
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A wonderful entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest Janet, it's a marvellous thing and gift that the Lord has given us to enjoy. They were all meant as a gift to us, to display His majesty, and a wonder to us. Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Roy for your encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you my friend.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from estory
Nice job with the alliterations here, all those echoing 'm' and 'l' sounds, the 's' sounds, made the poem. I think you had a great image of the stars seen through the trees, and what tied it all together was that epiphany moment of the word 'opulence'. you lift the image into something audacious. estory
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Nice job with the alliterations here, all those echoing 'm' and 'l' sounds, the 's' sounds, made the poem. I think you had a great image of the stars seen through the trees, and what tied it all together was that epiphany moment of the word 'opulence'. you lift the image into something audacious. estory
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you,
Blessings
Janet
