Renaissance of Enchantment
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Chapter Two, Part 2"It was their world long before our existence...
15 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
The plot thickens. I love reading stories about inheritances, especially unexpected ones, and I suspect this particular one is going to be something very unique. :-)
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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The plot thickens. I love reading stories about inheritances, especially unexpected ones, and I suspect this particular one is going to be something very unique. :-)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Surprise! You own a super-natural boarding house.... ;) :) LOL! ;)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I have a feeling that this woman that they are searching for is, perhaps Maggie....Oh I sure hope so anyway. She would have a home of her own even though it's a boarding house. Onto the next chapter. Love your story.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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I have a feeling that this woman that they are searching for is, perhaps Maggie....Oh I sure hope so anyway. She would have a home of her own even though it's a boarding house. Onto the next chapter. Love your story.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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A perceptive lady, you are!! ;)
Comment from Sankey
Another interesting chapter and I really appreciate the connecting up with the foregoing. L9ooking forward to what lies ahead and no spags this time around.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Another interesting chapter and I really appreciate the connecting up with the foregoing. L9ooking forward to what lies ahead and no spags this time around.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Hooray!! ;) Yvette
Comment from JudyE
The interest is maintained here and some interesting questions are arising.
The action immediately had Kato cutting his bright amber eyes - I don't understand 'cutting his eyes' but maybe others do.
Lycaois growled again to which Kato joined his own for a chorus, but Koko's radiating optimism was starting to rub off on Peadar, Geoffrey could see it in the fiery man's eyes. - I would have put a period after 'Peadar'
Geoffrey couldn't help himself but relax - delete 'himself'
Again, Geoffrey made himself relax, so as to convey a somewhat peaceful aura for the man in front of him, no need to stoke animosity where there need not be any. - period after 'him'
Geoffrey really needed to get home to Gary and Charlise; he knew they would both be waiting up for him even though he had told them not to do so. - Maybe it's correct or not important but why a semi-colon after Charlise rather than a period?
He'd call Stephen in the morning and have him start the search for the young lady; he and Jinx were an investigative powerhouse for it only being the two of them. - replace semi-colon with a period.
Again, ignore anything that doesn't sit well with you.
Judy
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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The interest is maintained here and some interesting questions are arising.
The action immediately had Kato cutting his bright amber eyes - I don't understand 'cutting his eyes' but maybe others do.
Lycaois growled again to which Kato joined his own for a chorus, but Koko's radiating optimism was starting to rub off on Peadar, Geoffrey could see it in the fiery man's eyes. - I would have put a period after 'Peadar'
Geoffrey couldn't help himself but relax - delete 'himself'
Again, Geoffrey made himself relax, so as to convey a somewhat peaceful aura for the man in front of him, no need to stoke animosity where there need not be any. - period after 'him'
Geoffrey really needed to get home to Gary and Charlise; he knew they would both be waiting up for him even though he had told them not to do so. - Maybe it's correct or not important but why a semi-colon after Charlise rather than a period?
He'd call Stephen in the morning and have him start the search for the young lady; he and Jinx were an investigative powerhouse for it only being the two of them. - replace semi-colon with a period.
Again, ignore anything that doesn't sit well with you.
Judy
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Thanx again, ma'am -- I have copied these into a file and will look at them next week.... :) ;) Thank you so very much for your diligence and enjoy the upcoming week! :) ;)
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Fantastic was a really good tie in and I love the cuckoo for coco puffs quote - awesome! I think it's Kato that I am going to like but I am not sure yet need more of him to know for sure. And still milking the whole order business around in my think tank. I like the idea of Rosemary holding Maggie as a baby. My real grandma did that and I never met her before she passed kind of cool coincidence - I believe it! So far you have glued to the page! Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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Fantastic was a really good tie in and I love the cuckoo for coco puffs quote - awesome! I think it's Kato that I am going to like but I am not sure yet need more of him to know for sure. And still milking the whole order business around in my think tank. I like the idea of Rosemary holding Maggie as a baby. My real grandma did that and I never met her before she passed kind of cool coincidence - I believe it! So far you have glued to the page! Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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Good heavens -- you're on a roll! :) Glad you're liking the imagery and stuff -- keep on hanging in there! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from TheStoryMan
Nice revelation, Maggie is Rosemary's niece. Hopefully they can find her and she will take over the boarding house. This is a very interesting story.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Nice revelation, Maggie is Rosemary's niece. Hopefully they can find her and she will take over the boarding house. This is a very interesting story.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Oh, yeah, you could say that... LOL! :) ;) Gotta lil' more "plot developin'" to do, but it'll get there! :) ;) Thanx, Ron -- so appreciate your tuning in! :) ;)
Comment from poetwatch
Well I didn't count the words but I believe you needed another chapter, Yvette. I'm getting excited with the web you weave for it draws one into its mystery. It's very good. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Well I didn't count the words but I believe you needed another chapter, Yvette. I'm getting excited with the web you weave for it draws one into its mystery. It's very good. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Yeah -- I had trouble trying to figure out where to cut this as it was...sorry. :( Certainly an interesting band of misfits, though, eh? :) ;) They'll get even more interesting...you have my promise! LOL! :) Thanx for staying tuned, Jose! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from royowen
You've a pretty broad eclectic list of characters that made up the residents of the "Boarding house" and the deceased Rosemary, who seemed interested in keeping them together, a mysterious lost female, Marguerite Atkinson who is heir to this estate, whom Geoffrey needs to find, well done Yvette, assembling characters and plot, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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You've a pretty broad eclectic list of characters that made up the residents of the "Boarding house" and the deceased Rosemary, who seemed interested in keeping them together, a mysterious lost female, Marguerite Atkinson who is heir to this estate, whom Geoffrey needs to find, well done Yvette, assembling characters and plot, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 06-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Certainly an interesting band of misfits, eh? :) ;) They'll get even more interesting...you have my promise! LOL! :) Thanx for staying tuned, Roy! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a lovely chapter, and I'm looking forward to learning more about these people and the Order. It's strange that this unknown relation, has inherited it all. I enjoyed this part, too! Oh, I made a mistake in my last review, I meant Koko, not Kato in my 'friends' corner!! lol Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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That was a lovely chapter, and I'm looking forward to learning more about these people and the Order. It's strange that this unknown relation, has inherited it all. I enjoyed this part, too! Oh, I made a mistake in my last review, I meant Koko, not Kato in my 'friends' corner!! lol Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 06-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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And here I was thinking that you were enjoying the thought of the young, well-built youngster!! LOL! :) ;Yeah, the 'Ol' Indian' really has a lot in the "peacemaker" department, eh? :) ;) Thanx for stopping in -- gonna try to get caught up on grading and get another part out sometime today... :) ;) Take care! :) Yvette
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. Each character has their own personality and there can be many clashes when they are all get together at the same time in the same place.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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A very well-written chapter. Each character has their own personality and there can be many clashes when they are all get together at the same time in the same place.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the read and review, Sandra -- always greatly appreciated! :) ;) Yvette
