What Gives Life Meaning?
Love is as close as it gets28 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Congratulations on coming in second for the Valentine Poem contest. I admired your question in the title and response with rhymes in the acrostic form. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Congratulations on coming in second for the Valentine Poem contest. I admired your question in the title and response with rhymes in the acrostic form. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Joan. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
Comment from dragonpoet
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
This poem shows how happy love can make you. She looks so comfortable and happy in the artwork as the words show she is in life. The impish adjective seems to describe her well.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Congrats on placing second in the contest.
This poem shows how happy love can make you. She looks so comfortable and happy in the artwork as the words show she is in life. The impish adjective seems to describe her well.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Joan. I so appreciate your support.
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Debbie, I came late into to reading your poem but I'm so glad I didn't miss it. Yeah, so true, nothing can surpass true love and your poem just says it all. Warm regards. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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Awe, Debbie, I came late into to reading your poem but I'm so glad I didn't miss it. Yeah, so true, nothing can surpass true love and your poem just says it all. Warm regards. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Ulla. That is very sweet. I am glad that you read it.
Comment from Bucketlist
This is so true, and so many people are isolated from love for various reasons. I think many times, mental chemistry of depression has its roots in lack of connection. We cannot, in my view, separate the emotional from the physical needs. Suggestion - the color mix does not give the piece the standout quality it deserves, but I still loved it!
Hugs,Trisha
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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This is so true, and so many people are isolated from love for various reasons. I think many times, mental chemistry of depression has its roots in lack of connection. We cannot, in my view, separate the emotional from the physical needs. Suggestion - the color mix does not give the piece the standout quality it deserves, but I still loved it!
Hugs,Trisha
Comment Written 06-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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Bless you for all those stars, Trisha. I am so glad that the poem resonated with you. You offhandedly noted that " mental chemistry of depression has its roots in lack of connection." That is so incredibly true. I will be thinking about that for awhile.
As to my color mix, you really struck home. I like picking the colors more than I like writing the poem. Seriously. I love it and play with every imaginable color possibility. Here, I went with pale pink because it was Valentine's Day, and the pink matched the young girl's lipstick. I want it to pop though. Please look at it again. I tried browns (which looked good) but opted for the dark blue. See what you think please.
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I agree, the dark blue does the poem justice and picks out the blue of her pants. Beautiful effect!
Comment from Sasha
This is a beautifully written entry for this Valentine poem contest. I am not a great fan of Valentine's Day but understand its is a great way to show your feelings for someone special. I wish you all the best in this contest too.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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This is a beautifully written entry for this Valentine poem contest. I am not a great fan of Valentine's Day but understand its is a great way to show your feelings for someone special. I wish you all the best in this contest too.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Sasha. I'm not a fan of Valentine's Day either. I just decided to give the contest a shot. I do believe in love.
Comment from apky
I love this one, Debbie.
You got the romantic soul in me here and after I read it I decided to ask you if I could perhaps quote it in a WIP. If I do find an appropriate place to quote some of the lines, I'd of course mention you at the author.
Bless,
Apky
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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I love this one, Debbie.
You got the romantic soul in me here and after I read it I decided to ask you if I could perhaps quote it in a WIP. If I do find an appropriate place to quote some of the lines, I'd of course mention you at the author.
Bless,
Apky
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Bless you for saying that you want to quote me. I don't believe that I have ever been quoted before. What an honor and what a nice review. Quote away! Please.
Thank you for making me smile.
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Thanks, Debbie. I've copy pasted and saved for when I might need it. I'll let you know when I do use any of the lines.
Comment from CD Richards
You've done a terrific job with this acrostic Valentine poem, Debbie. I like how you've incorporated the ABCB rhymes. The Trochaic meter is consistent and pleasing to the ear.
"Impish sensibilities" sounds almost like an oxymoron... impish and sensible? I like it.
I think you've mentioned you don't like schmaltzy love poems, and this certainly isn't that. It starts out quite sedate, getting more playful as it progresses.
I love the closing couplet, perfect ending.
Well done, and best of luck in the contest.
Craig
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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You've done a terrific job with this acrostic Valentine poem, Debbie. I like how you've incorporated the ABCB rhymes. The Trochaic meter is consistent and pleasing to the ear.
"Impish sensibilities" sounds almost like an oxymoron... impish and sensible? I like it.
I think you've mentioned you don't like schmaltzy love poems, and this certainly isn't that. It starts out quite sedate, getting more playful as it progresses.
I love the closing couplet, perfect ending.
Well done, and best of luck in the contest.
Craig
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Oh, Craig, I am basking in your praise. For several reasons, your compliments mean so much to me. Primarily because you know what you are doing, and I find you to be an honest person. I am now going to have to amend my response to Pantygynt. I told him that he was the only reviewer to mention the trochaic meter.
Thanks for the detailed review. It helps me so much to know what you find good.
And, I am smiling because you added another word to my vocabulary just like you used to last year. I shall now start saying that things like love poems are schmaltzy. What a nice word.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is very nice and I like the pretty illustration. Last two lines resonate with me. "Isolated, I'm inept
Touching you, my mind's alight."
Good luck in the contest.
Marilyn
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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This is very nice and I like the pretty illustration. Last two lines resonate with me. "Isolated, I'm inept
Touching you, my mind's alight."
Good luck in the contest.
Marilyn
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Marilyn. I am glad that you enjoyed my poem. I've said before that I really don't like love poems. For me, it's hard to make them real. So, mine always turn out rather unusual.
It's good to hear from you. Did you take your dog for a walk around your frozen lake this morning?
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Hi Debbie. We don't go for a walk when it's cold. She has a big fenced yard. She likes to go for rides in the car with me, though.
Comment from lyenochka
A well crafted acrostic poem, Debbie! I like how you started with a question in your title and answered it with the poem. And I also like that you show that while relationships are never perfect (lines 5-7), love is able to make things alright.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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A well crafted acrostic poem, Debbie! I like how you started with a question in your title and answered it with the poem. And I also like that you show that while relationships are never perfect (lines 5-7), love is able to make things alright.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you for noticing that the poem was in response to the title. Without noticing that, the acrostic doesn't make sense. So many reviewers have said that they were confused throughout the entire poem. I was about to rethink the whole thing.
I appreciate your encouragement.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Debbie... I think your words are a perfect Valentine poem. I like the clever and creative approach you tackled for this writing prompt/contest, by writing an acrostic. Love is it!! A great message of love.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Debbie... I think your words are a perfect Valentine poem. I like the clever and creative approach you tackled for this writing prompt/contest, by writing an acrostic. Love is it!! A great message of love.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you for this kind review, Cindy. I truly think that love is closer to the meaning of life than anything else.
